自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is unclear and contains many grammatical errors. Keep it concise and directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail. Use correct tense (past) and simple sentence structures. For example, say whether you had a bike, explain briefly why or why not, and avoid irrelevant or confusing phrases.

示例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. In my town it was uncommon and many parents preferred that children walked because riding was considered unsafe, so my family never bought one for me.

建议: Your answer communicates the main idea but has grammar and phrasing mistakes. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give two specific reasons using linking words (for example, "because" and "also"). Use accurate vocabulary (e.g., "affordable" instead of "fit in their budget") and avoid unclear words like "due to victory."

示例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. This is mainly because they are affordable for many middle-class families, and people also enjoy riding them to travel short distances and appreciate the scenery.

× As in our country below the children's it are not allowed to try bikes.

✓ In our country, children are not allowed to ride bikes.

Pronoun and determiner use is incorrect and word order is awkward. 'The children's' is possessive and unnecessary; use 'children' as the plural noun. 'It are not allowed' is ungrammatical — use passive construction 'are not allowed' with plural subject 'children'. Also 'try bikes' is unnatural; 'ride bikes' is the correct collocation. Improve by using the plural noun without possessive and matching verb agreement: 'children are not allowed'.

× So when I'm tired I don't have bike because it is illegal.

✓ So when I was a child I didn't have a bike because it was illegal.

Tense is inconsistent with the question asking about childhood. The student used present tense 'I'm tired' which is irrelevant; use past tense 'I was a child' and 'didn't have' to describe past state. Also article is missing before 'bike' — use 'a bike'. 'It is illegal' should be 'it was illegal' to match past context. Suggestion: maintain past tense throughout when talking about childhood and include appropriate articles.

× Yes, bikes have wide popular in a country.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in my country.

The original sentence has incorrect verb choice and word order: 'have wide popular' is ungrammatical. Use the copula 'are' with adjective 'popular'. 'Wide' is not used to modify 'popular' here; use adverb 'very' if you want to intensify. Also include 'my' to specify the country. Suggestion: use 'are popular' and place intensifier before the adjective.

× Most of the people like to ride bike because in our country most of the people are middle class due to victory.

✓ Most people like to ride bikes because in our country many people are middle class.

'Repetition and quantifier use' problem: 'Most of the people' can be simplified to 'Most people'. 'Ride bike' lacks plural or article — use 'ride bikes' for general statement. The phrase 'due to victory' is unclear and likely unnecessary; replace with 'many people are middle class' to convey idea. Use consistent quantifiers and plural nouns when generalizing.

× Bikes are fit in their budget and some people also like to travel on bike so that they can enjoy the nature.

✓ Bikes fit their budgets, and some people also like to travel by bike so that they can enjoy nature.

Preposition and noun use errors: 'fit in their budget' should be 'fit their budgets' (omit 'in' when using 'fit' with object). 'Travel on bike' should be 'travel by bike' — the correct preposition for modes of transport is 'by'. 'Enjoy the nature' is unnatural; use 'enjoy nature' without the definite article. Also pluralize 'budget' to match 'their'. Suggestion: use correct prepositions ('by bike') and collocations ('fit budgets', 'enjoy nature').