自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Используйте простое и естественное время (Past Simple) для описания прошлого, избегайте повторений и избыточных слов. Постройте ответ с топик-сентенцией и одной-двумя поддерживающими деталями, используя связующее слово для плавности. Исправьте грамматику (I didn't have, I wish I had) и уберите лишние слова («the bike» не нужно перед общим понятием).

示例: I didn't have a bike when I was a child because my parents couldn't afford one. However, I always wanted one since bikes are very useful for getting around and exercising. Now I sometimes regret not having learned to ride earlier.

建议: Сформулируйте короткое прямое утверждение, затем добавьте 2 конкретные причины с связующими словами. Используйте правильные сочетания слов (cold weather, good roads, infrastructure) и избегайте тавтологии ("so that's why"). Сделайте детали более конкретными и естественными.

示例: No, bikes are not very popular in Russia. One reason is the lack of cycling infrastructure such as dedicated lanes and bike parking, and another is the harsh winter climate which makes cycling unsafe for many months of the year.

× I hadn't had a bike when I was a child, my parents couldn't afford it, but now I wish I I had the bike because it was very useful.

✓ I didn't have a bike when I was a child; my parents couldn't afford one, but now I wish I had a bike because it would be very useful.

The student used past perfect 'hadn't had' incorrectly; simple past 'didn't have' is appropriate for a past state. Also there is a duplication 'I I' and the noun phrase 'the bike' should be indefinite 'a bike' or pronoun 'one' because no specific bike was previously mentioned. Change 'was very useful' to 'would be very useful' to express a present hypothetical desire about the usefulness now. Suggestions: use simple past for past situations, avoid unnecessary past perfect unless indicating an action before another past action, fix duplicated words, and use 'a' or 'one' for non-specific items.

× No, unfortunately bikes are not so popular in Russia because we don't have a good infrastructure for this.

✓ No, unfortunately bikes are not very popular in Russia because we don't have good infrastructure for them.

'Not so popular' is colloquial; 'not very popular' is more natural. 'A good infrastructure' is incorrect because 'infrastructure' is an uncountable noun and does not take 'a' here. Also 'for this' is vague; 'for them' (for bicycles) or 'for cycling' is clearer. Suggestions: treat 'infrastructure' as uncountable, use clearer pronouns referring to the noun, and prefer 'not very popular' in this context.

× In Russia we have a very cold weather, so that's why we don't have enough amount of well roads.

✓ In Russia we have very cold weather, so we don't have enough good roads.

'A very cold weather' is incorrect because 'weather' is uncountable and should not take 'a'; use 'very cold weather' or 'a very cold climate'. 'Enough amount of' is wordy and ungrammatical here; use 'enough' before the noun phrase or 'a sufficient number of'. 'Well roads' is incorrect adjective order and word choice; the correct adjective is 'good' modifying 'roads'. Suggestions: drop the article with uncountable nouns, use 'enough' correctly ('enough good roads' or 'a sufficient number of good roads'), and use the adjective 'good' to describe roads.'