自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more natural and specific. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two supporting details (where, how you used it, feelings or frequency). Avoid unnecessary phrases like “only in my father's house” without clarification. Use linking words to connect ideas (for example, “but”, “so”, “because”). Keep it concise (no more than 3–4 sentences).

示例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I usually rode it around my father’s house and the nearby park because it was a safe area. I remember practising riding every weekend, which helped me become confident on busy roads later.

建议: Improve coherence and correct grammar. Begin with a clear opinion sentence, then support it with specific reasons and an example. Remove irrelevant time markers (“I lived in Belgium then”) unless explaining past experience. Use linking words (for example, “because”, “for instance”, “therefore”). Finish sentences fully and avoid trailing off. Aim for 2–3 well-formed sentences.

示例: Yes, bikes are very popular in Belgium because many cities have extensive cycle paths and safe infrastructure. For example, most commuters in my city cycle to work, especially during good weather, which reduces traffic and is healthier than driving.

× Yes, of course I I lived in Belgium then.

✓ Yes, of course. I lived in Belgium then.

The sentence contains a duplicated pronoun 'I I' which is a typo and breaks sentence flow. Correct by removing the extra 'I' and adding a period to separate ideas. Also ensure punctuation: 'Yes, of course.' is a natural short response followed by the past-tense clause 'I lived in Belgium then.' Suggestion: Proofread for accidental repeated words and use a period to separate the affirmation from the following clause.

× Most people prefer to go by bike to at.

✓ Most people prefer to go by bike.

The phrase ends with an extraneous and incomplete preposition 'to at', making the sentence ungrammatical. The intended meaning is complete without the extra words: 'prefer to go by bike.' If a destination was intended, use a clear preposition and noun (e.g., 'to work' or 'to the shops'). Suggestion: Remove accidental fragments or supply the correct prepositional phrase (for example, 'to work') to complete the thought.