自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and fluent: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition and hesitations, correct grammar (use past tense consistently), and add one or two specific details. Use linking words if needed. For example, say you received the bike from someone or bought it, and mention when and how often you rode it.

示例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My mother bought it for me when I was in elementary school, and I rode it to school and around the neighborhood almost every day. It was a small red bicycle with a basket, which made it easy to carry my books.

建议: Give a clear opinion with a reason and a specific example. Use correct grammar (subject-verb agreement) and linking words like 'because' or 'however.' Avoid repetition and hesitations. You can compare cities or mention factors such as infrastructure or culture.

示例: I don't think bicycles are very popular in my town because most people prefer cars due to busy roads and long distances. However, in some larger cities there are bike lanes and more people cycle for short journeys or to avoid traffic.

× Uh, as a child, I, I had a bike, uh, I bought, I bought a bike on my mother bought a bike to me, uh, in elementary school, I ride, I ride a bike every day.

✓ Uh, as a child, I had a bike. My mother bought a bike for me when I was in elementary school, and I rode a bike every day.

Multiple past-tense actions are described, but the student mixed past and present verbs and used incorrect phrasing. 'I had a bike' and 'My mother bought a bike for me' should be simple past. The phrase 'bought a bike on my mother bought a bike to me' is ungrammatical; use 'My mother bought a bike for me'. 'I ride' should be past tense to match 'as a child' and 'in elementary school' so use 'I rode'. Suggestion: keep consistent past tense for childhood events and use 'bought...for me' for recipient expressions.

× Uh, in my country I, I think uh, bikes are not popular, uh, because my town have many cars, uh, cars is more popular than bikes in my town.

✓ Uh, in my country I think bikes are not popular because my town has many cars; cars are more popular than bikes in my town.

Subject-verb agreement errors: 'my town have' should be 'my town has' because 'town' is singular. 'cars is more popular' should be 'cars are more popular' because 'cars' is plural and requires 'are'. Also use plural adjective agreement: 'more popular' correctly compares two items; keep verb forms consistent. Suggestion: identify the grammatical number of the subject (singular/plural) and choose the correct verb form ('has' for singular, 'are' for plural).