自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be clear, grammatical and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence in past tense (e.g., “Yes, I had a bike as a child.”). Correct verb forms and vocabulary (bought, taught, ride, ride it around). Limit to up to 4–5 short sentences. Add one specific detail using a linking word (for example, “because” or “so”) and avoid repetition and filler words.

示例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My father bought it for me and taught me how to ride it, so I practiced every day. I usually rode around our neighborhood and to the small park nearby. It was my main way of getting around.

建议: Give a clear, structured answer with correct tense and subject–verb agreement. Start with a topic sentence (e.g., “Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country.”). Use linking words (because, so, therefore) and provide specific reasons and one example. Avoid fillers and correct grammar (public transportation is not well-developed; families prefer to have bikes). Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

示例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. Because public transport is not well-developed and cars are expensive, many families choose bicycles as an affordable way to travel. For example, students and market vendors often use bikes for short daily trips.

× When I was a child it was my dad bought it for me and he told me how to ride a bag and I often write it around my house.

✓ When I was a child my dad bought it for me, and he taught me how to ride it, and I often rode it around my neighborhood.

Errors: 'it was my dad bought it for me' mixes 'it was' with past simple; use simple past 'my dad bought it'. 'told me how to ride a bag' is incorrect noun and verb choice; 'taught me how to ride it' is correct (teach + object + infinitive). 'I often write it around my house' uses present tense and wrong verb 'write' instead of 'ride' and 'house' is less natural than 'neighborhood'. Suggestions: Use simple past consistently for past events (bought, taught, rode), use correct verbs (taught, ride/rode), and choose appropriate nouns (neighborhood).

× Yes, I, yes, I think bike is very popular in my country when I was a child because, umm, the public transportation is not very uh, developed and uh, a car is very expensive.

✓ Yes, I think bikes were very popular in my country when I was a child because public transportation was not very developed and cars were very expensive.

Errors: 'bike is' should be plural 'bikes were' to match general reference to the category and past time frame. Tense mismatch: phrase 'when I was a child' requires past tense 'were' instead of present 'is'. 'the public transportation is not very developed' is awkward; drop 'the' and use past 'was not very developed'. 'a car is very expensive' should be plural 'cars were very expensive' when speaking generally in the past. Suggestions: Match singular/plural forms to the noun meaning (use plural for general categories) and align verb tense with time reference (use past tense for past situations).

× So, uh, family prefer to has a bike.

✓ So, families preferred to have a bike.

Errors: 'family prefer to has a bike' has multiple agreement and form problems. 'family' as a general plural meaning should be 'families' or 'the family'; plural subject requires plural verb 'preferred' (and past tense to match earlier past frame). 'prefer to has' mixes base form 'prefer'/'preferred' with incorrect verb form 'has' (third-person singular present). Use infinitive 'to have' after 'preferred'. Suggestions: Ensure subject and verb agree in number and tense, and follow verbs like 'prefer' with the correct infinitive form 'to have'.