自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is clear and relevant but a bit long and slightly repetitive. To improve, start with a concise topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details (when, how often, who with or a short anecdote). Use linking words like "and" or "so" only when needed, and avoid redundant phrases such as "every morning or every after class." Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

示例: Yes, I did. I had a small red bike and I practiced riding it with my brothers and cousins after school almost every day. Because we rode together, I improved quickly and became confident riding on busy streets.

建议: Good direct answer with relevant observation, but phrasing is slightly awkward and repetitive. Make the topic sentence concise, then give a specific reason or example (who uses bikes and why). Use linking phrases like "because" or "for example" to connect idea and evidence. Aim for 2–3 sentences and avoid vague phrases like "everywhere they want to go."

示例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because many people use them for short commutes. For example, students ride to school and adults cycle to work to save money and avoid traffic.

× Yes, I had a bike when I was a child and I used to practice every morning or every after class with my brothers and cousins.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, and I used to ride it every morning or after class with my brothers and cousins.

The sentence uses past contexts correctly but contains a verb choice error: 'practice' is odd for riding a bike; use 'ride'. Also 'every after class' is ungrammatical; use 'after class' or 'every afternoon'. Add a comma before 'and' to join two independent clauses. Suggestion: use verbs appropriate to the activity and standard time expressions (e.g., 'every morning' or 'after class'). Grammar problem type's ID: 5

× Yes, I think bikes are popular in our country since when I go outside I see a lot of people using their bikes, going to their school, their work or everywhere they want to go.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in our country because when I go outside I see a lot of people using their bikes to go to school, to work, or everywhere they want to go.

Using 'since' to give a reason is incorrect in this context; use 'because' or 'as'. Also 'their school, their work' is wordy; use 'school' and 'work' without repeated possessives, and use 'to go to' for purpose. The tense 'I think' is present and appropriate; adjustments clarify cause and improve preposition use ('to go to school/work'). Grammar problem type's ID: 6