自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Make your answer more concise, directly address the question, and avoid fillers (like, uh). Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Keep it to no more than 3–4 sentences and use linking words for coherence.

示例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. Instead, I preferred walking and running, because my family valued exercise and we lived close to school. As a result, I became used to getting around on foot rather than by bicycle.

建议: Give a direct opinion first, then support it with two clear reasons and examples. Avoid repeating phrases and filler words. Use linking words such as 'however', 'because', or 'for example' to structure your answer and provide concrete details about what you mean by 'automatic bikes'.

示例: Yes, bikes are still popular, but electric scooters and e-bikes are more common now because they save time and are easy to rent. For example, many cities have shared e-bike stations, so commuters can pick one up for a short trip instead of owning a traditional bicycle.

× Unfortunately, I did not have any bike when I was a child.

✓ Unfortunately, I did not have a bike when I was a child.

Use 'a' with singular, countable nouns when referring to one nonspecific item. 'Any' is used with plural or uncountable nouns in negatives. Change 'any bike' to 'a bike' to be grammatically correct.

× It's just like, it's not because I'm a girl, it's just like since like I was a child, I was not very into buying cars and stuff.

✓ It's not because I'm a girl; since I was a child, I have not been very interested in buying cars and similar things.

Several issues: unnecessary fillers ('just like', 'like') and tense/aspect. Use a semicolon or conjunction to link clauses. 'Since I was a child' with a continuing state requires present perfect ('have not been') rather than simple past. Remove filler words for clarity.

× I usually just like, uh, prefer like walk or run just with my legs.

✓ I usually prefer to walk or run using my legs.

After 'prefer' you should use the infinitive 'to walk' or the gerund with 'prefer doing'. 'Prefer walk' is incorrect. Also 'just with my legs' is redundant; 'using my legs' or simply 'walk or run' is clearer. Remove filler words.

× I mean, I believe so, but compared to bikes, especially in these days, those automatic bikes are more popular just because it saves more time and it's like very accessible, easy to use and it's like basically everywhere compared to bikes because people just can lend them whatever to their liking time.

✓ I think so, but these days electric scooters and similar vehicles are more popular than bicycles because they save time, are very accessible and easy to use, and are available almost everywhere for people to rent when they want.

The original sentence is long, repetitive and ungrammatical: incorrect comparisons, tense/number agreement ('saves' should match plural subject), awkward phrasing ('lend them whatever to their liking time'). Break into clearer structure, ensure subject-verb agreement ('they save'), replace vague words with clearer terms ('rent' instead of 'lend them whatever'). Remove filler words for fluency.