自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Сформулируйте ответ более естественно, исправьте ошибки времен и предлогов, сократите повторения и добавьте одно-два конкретных подробных факта. Используйте связки для плавного перехода (например, "when I was...", "since then", "for example"). Также следите за количеством предложений (не больше 5).

示例: Yes, I did. I bought my first bike when I was six, and since then cycling has been my favourite hobby. At first I struggled to balance, but after a few weeks of practice I could ride confidently without training wheels. For example, I used to cycle to my grandparents’ house every weekend, which helped me improve quickly.

建议: Упростите и уточните мысль, исправьте грамматику и выбор предлогов, добавьте конкретные причины и пример. Используйте связующие слова (например, "because", "also", "for instance") и избегайте некорректных выражений (например, "parts of the roads").

示例: I don't think bicycles are very popular in my country because there are few dedicated bike lanes and traffic can be dangerous. Also, the hilly landscape in many areas makes daily cycling impractical. For instance, most people prefer driving short distances rather than cycling.

× I've bought my first bike when I was 6 and since that time riding a bicycle was my favorite hobby.

✓ I bought my first bike when I was 6, and since that time riding a bicycle has been my favorite hobby.

The present perfect with 'have' plus past participle (I've bought) incorrectly combines with a definite past time expression 'when I was 6'. Use simple past 'bought' for a completed past action at a specific time. Also 'since that time' requires present perfect ('has been') to show a state continuing to the present. Suggestion: use simple past for the specific event (I bought) and present perfect for the continuing state (has been).

× My main accomplishment at this time was to understand how to ride on it.

✓ My main achievement at that time was learning how to ride it.

The original phrase 'to understand how to ride on it' is awkward and unidiomatic. 'Accomplishment' is acceptable but 'achievement' collocates better; 'at this time' conflicts with the past context, so change to 'at that time'. Use the gerund 'learning' or the infinitive 'to learn' rather than 'to understand how to ride on it'. Also 'ride it' is the natural verb-object collocation, not 'ride on it'. Suggestion: rephrase using 'learning how to ride it' or 'to learn how to ride it'.

× Honestly, I don't think so because we don't have enough parts of the roads to ride a bicycle on it and also the landscape of my country are not allowing us to use a bicycle every day.

✓ Honestly, I don't think so because we don't have enough suitable roads to ride a bicycle on, and the landscape of my country does not allow us to use a bicycle every day.

Multiple issues: 'parts of the roads' is incorrect; use 'suitable roads' or 'enough roads'. The clause 'ride a bicycle on it' uses a redundant pronoun 'it'—omit it or replace with 'them'. 'Landscape' is a singular noun and requires singular verb 'does not allow', not 'are not allowing'. Use simple present 'does not allow' for general truth rather than progressive 'are not allowing'. Suggestion: simplify to 'we don't have enough suitable roads to ride a bicycle on, and the landscape does not allow daily cycling'.