自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be direct and clear: use a correct tense and create a simple topic sentence, then add one or two brief supporting details. Avoid grammatical errors (e.g., use "hid" for past tense) and unnecessary words. Keep it natural and concise (no more than 3–4 short sentences).

示例: Yes, I did. I hid the bike my auntie bought me because I wanted to keep it safe from my siblings. I rode it often around the neighborhood until I grew too old for it.

建议: Start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, then give two specific reasons with linking words. Use correct verb forms and smoother linking phrases (e.g., "In the past," "nowadays," "however"). Avoid hesitations and repetition. Keep each answer within 3–4 sentences and include concrete examples or comparisons.

示例: Yes, bikes are still fairly popular, but their role has changed. In the past, many people used bicycles as their main transport because they were affordable and convenient. Nowadays, most families prefer cars for longer commutes; however, some people choose bikes for short trips and exercise, especially in cities with bike lanes.

× Yes, I hide the bike bought from my auntie.

✓ Yes, I had the bike that I bought from my auntie.

The sentence describes a past situation, so past tense is required. 'Hide' is present tense and also wrong verb here; likely intended 'had' (past of have). Also 'bought from my auntie' needs subject clarity, so 'that I bought from my auntie' clarifies who bought it. Suggestion: use 'had' for possession in the past and make the clause explicit: 'I had the bike that I bought from my auntie.'

× Hmm, sometimes if if you mean in the street, uh.

✓ Hmm, sometimes, if you mean 'on the street',

The phrase 'in the street' is acceptable in some contexts but 'on the street' is more natural when referring to what you see in public places. Also the duplicate 'if' is a repetition error (sentence structure). Use present simple 'you mean' which is correct; remove duplicate 'if' and add commas for clarity. Suggestion: eliminate repeated words and choose the preposition that matches the intended meaning: 'on the street.'

× In last century the bike is the main transport way, but nowadays people usually choose the cars.

✓ In the last century, the bike was the main means of transport, but nowadays people usually choose cars.

This sentence mixes past and present incorrectly. 'In the last century' requires past tense: 'was' not 'is.' 'Transport way' is unnatural; use 'means of transport' or 'mode of transport.' Also 'the cars' incorrectly uses the definite article; general plural 'cars' is correct. Suggestions: use past tense 'was', replace 'transport way' with 'means of transport' and remove 'the' before 'cars.'

× But if you want to be healthy you may choose a bike as your transport.

✓ But if you want to be healthy, you might choose a bike for your transport.

'May' is not wrong but 'might' or 'could' is more natural when suggesting a choice. Also 'as your transport' is awkward; use 'for your transport' or better 'for transportation' or 'to get around.' Add a comma after the conditional clause. Suggestion: use 'might' or 'could' and prefer 'for transportation' or 'to get around' for natural phrasing.