自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Clarify and tighten the response: start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar, avoid filler sounds, and give one or two specific supporting details linked logically. Mention why it was memorable and how you used it (e.g., where you rode it, who with). Keep it natural and within 3–4 sentences.

示例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a pink training-bike with two large wheels and two small stabilizers, which made it look quite funny. Although I wasn’t very skilled at cycling, I used to ride it every weekend with my friends in the park and we always had a great time.

建议: Give a clear, structured answer: start with a direct statement, then support with specific reasons and an example. Remove hesitations and be precise about how bike-sharing works (pricing, convenience, environmental benefits). Use linking words like 'for example' or 'because' to connect ideas.

示例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. For example, in big cities there are bike‑sharing services that charge about one or two yuan per kilometer, so they are cheap and convenient. Because of this affordability and the low pollution, many people choose cycling for short trips.

× Yes, I did have one.

✓ Yes, I had one.

Using 'did have' is unnecessary emphasis in a simple past statement. In standard responses to 'Did you have...?' use the simple past 'had' rather than the auxiliary 'did' plus base verb. Use 'I had one.' for a more natural and grammatically correct answer.

× I can still remember it was a pink one with four wheels, so there were two big ones and two small ones.

✓ I can still remember that it was pink and had four wheels, two big and two small.

The sentence mixes present ('I can still remember') with an unconnected clause. Add 'that' after 'remember' to introduce the remembered fact; use 'was pink and had four wheels' or rephrase with past tense consistently. Also streamline 'two big ones and two small ones' to 'two big and two small' for natural wording.

× I'm not really, I wasn't really good at cycling, but I did, umm, added a lot of fun in my chart.

✓ I wasn't really good at cycling, but it was a lot of fun for me.

The original mixes present and past ('I'm not really, I wasn't really') and uses incorrect verb form 'did...added' and awkward phrase 'in my chart.' Use a single past tense clause 'I wasn't really good at cycling' and follow with a past description or general statement: 'but it was a lot of fun for me.' This corrects tense consistency and fixes the wrong verb form and idiom.

× Umm umm big cities.

✓ In big cities,

This fragment lacks a verb or complete structure. To answer the examiner's question, use a complete clause such as 'In big cities,' followed by the main statement. Here 'In big cities,' can lead into the following sentence about renting bikes; do not leave it as an isolated fragment.

× You can rent BA bikes with only one or two Chinese yuan per kilometer, so it's very eco friendly as well.

✓ You can rent bike-share bikes for only one or two Chinese yuan per kilometer, so it's also very eco-friendly.

'BA bikes' is unclear; 'bike-share' or 'shared bikes' is more appropriate. Use 'for only' to indicate price and hyphenate 'eco-friendly.' Place 'also' in a natural position ('so it's also very eco-friendly'). This fixes word choice and adjective/adverb form.