自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be concise, use correct grammar and a clear structure: start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct verb forms and articles (a/one/the) and avoid unfinished sentences.

示例: Yes. My mother bought me a bicycle when I was a child, and I learned to ride it by practicing in our neighborhood park. At first it was difficult because I kept losing my balance, but after a few weeks of daily practice I became confident and could ride without help.

建议: Answer directly, then give clear reasons with linking words (for example, because, so). Use specific details and correct word order; avoid vague phrases and incomplete sentences.

示例: I think bicycles are becoming more popular in my country. In the past they were uncommon, but recently more people ride bikes because they want to improve their health and avoid traffic. For example, some cities have added bike lanes and rental schemes, which encourages more commuters to cycle.

× Yes, for me when I was a child I had my mom bought 1 bicycle for me and I had tried riding it and trained riding bicycles by myself.

✓ Yes. When I was a child my mom bought a bicycle for me, and I tried learning to ride it by myself.

Errors: incorrect use of past perfect 'had' where simple past is appropriate; awkward phrasing 'had my mom bought' (mixes causative and past tense); '1 bicycle' should be 'a bicycle'; 'had tried riding it and trained riding bicycles by myself' is unidiomatic and redundant. Suggestion: use simple past for completed past actions (bought, tried), use 'learn to ride' or 'tried learning to ride', and use 'a bicycle' instead of '1 bicycle'.

× I find that at first it's quite hard to begin riding a bicycle, but as I train I.

✓ I found that at first it was quite hard to begin riding a bicycle, but as I practiced it became easier.

Errors: tense inconsistency—student begins with present 'I find' but refers to past experience; unfinished sentence 'but as I' missing verb/completion. Suggestion: keep past tense to describe past experience (found, was, practiced, became) and complete the clause with a clear result 'it became easier'.

× For me I found that at first bicycles weren't popular during my childhood, but like as people start considering riding bicycle more for their health as well as the trains nowadays that they start prioritizing the healthcare they.

✓ I found that bicycles were not popular when I was a child, but now people are starting to consider riding bicycles more for their health, and public transport and health care are receiving more attention.

Errors: tense inconsistency (mixes past and present incorrectly), incorrect plural/form 'riding bicycle' should be 'riding bicycles', unclear phrase 'as well as the trains', and sentence is incomplete 'they start prioritizing the healthcare they.' Suggestion: use past tense for past state ('were not popular'), use present progressive for current trends ('are starting'), use correct plural nouns, and rewrite to complete the thought about public transport and healthcare receiving more attention.