自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Correct tense and article errors, and avoid uncertainty words like 'maybe' unless giving a clear age. Aim for 2–3 sentences and use a linking word if you add an extra detail.

示例: Yes, I did. When I was about six or seven, my dad bought a small red bicycle for my sister and me, and I used to ride it around our neighborhood every afternoon. As a result, I still remember being proud of learning to balance on two wheels.

建议: Give a clear direct answer, then support it with specific examples and correct vocabulary. Avoid informal fillers ('like') and unclear phrases ('easy car', 'bike lab'). Use linking words (for example, moreover) and complete sentences. Specify how bikes are used and where you see them.

示例: Yes, I think bicycles are very popular in my country. For example, many cities have public bike-sharing systems that people use to commute, and on my university campus I often see students riding shared bikes between classes.

× Well yes, when I was a child my dad bought a bike for me and my sister and it's a red and small bike for children.

✓ Well, yes. When I was a child my dad bought a bike for my sister and me, and it was a small red children's bike.

The sentence mixes past and present. The action of buying happened in the past so use past tense 'was' not 'is'. 'For me and my sister' should be 'for my sister and me' (correct pronoun case and customary order). Adjective order in English uses size before color: 'small red' and 'children's bike' is the correct possessive form. Also add punctuation to separate clauses.

× Maybe because I'm was 6 or 8 and.

✓ Maybe I was six or eight years old.

This fragment mixes present 'I'm' with past 'was' and ends abruptly. It should be a complete past-tense statement: 'I was six or eight years old.' Write numbers as words in short answers and include 'years old' for clarity.

× Yes definitely in my country we always have a U bike.

✓ Yes, definitely. In my country we always have access to shared bikes called U-Bike.

The original is unclear and missing articles and prepositions. 'Have a U bike' is unnatural; use 'have access to shared bikes' or name the system 'U-Bike'. Add commas and capitalization. Keep present tense but clarify meaning.

× Like you can use your easy car to rent a bike and on my campus we can see many bike lab students are riding at.

✓ For example, you can use an app or a kiosk to rent a bike, and on my campus we can see many students riding bikes.

The original has unclear phrases ('easy car', 'bike lab') and an incorrect ending 'are riding at'. Replace with clearer nouns: 'app or kiosk' and 'students riding bikes'. Remove unnecessary auxiliary 'are' at the end and fix word order. Maintain present tense for habitual actions.