自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and use correct tense and grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details with appropriate linking words. Correct verb forms (use past tense) and avoid redundant phrases like “transportation purpose” and “going to my school days.”

示例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I used it mainly to ride to school and to visit friends in my neighborhood, and it was my primary way of getting around because my family didn’t own a car.

建议: Give a clear opening sentence, then support it with specific reasons and one brief example. Use more natural social-class terms (e.g., ‘middle-income’ and ‘lower-income’) and smoother linking words like ‘because’ and ‘also’. Avoid awkward phrasing such as ‘using bike for their transportation.’

示例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because many middle-income and lower-income people rely on them for daily commuting. Also, some wealthier people choose bikes for short trips since they are quick and convenient in busy cities.

× I had a bike when I was a kid and I usually use that bike for transportation purpose and also going to my school days.

✓ I had a bike when I was a kid and I usually used that bike for transportation and to go to school.

IDs: 5 Past tense issue and 11 Incorrect use of prepositions and 22 Article errors and 26 Sentence structure errors. Reason: The sentence mixes past and present tenses (had vs usually use) so the habitual action in the past should be 'used' (past tense). 'Transportation purpose' is unnatural; use 'transportation' or 'for transportation'. 'Going to my school days' is ungrammatical; correct form is 'to go to school' or 'to get to school'. Also drop 'my' before 'school' when referring to attending school in general. Suggestion: Keep tense consistent (past) and use correct prepositions: 'used... for transportation and to go to school.'

× Bikes are very popular in our country because middle class and low class people are using bike for their transportation even though high class people are also using due to their comfort.

✓ Bikes are very popular in our country because middle-class and lower-class people use bikes for transportation, and even wealthy people use them for comfort.

IDs: 11 Incorrect use of prepositions, 1 Singular and plural issue, 13 Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs, 26 Sentence structure errors and 27 Subject-verb agreement errors. Reason: 'middle class and low class people' should be hyphenated adjective forms 'middle-class' and 'lower-class'. 'are using bike' has number agreement; use plural 'use bikes' or 'use them'. 'for their transportation' is awkward; use 'for transportation'. 'even though high class people are also using due to their comfort' is ungrammatical and vague; revise to 'and even wealthy people use them for comfort.' Suggestion: Use consistent plural nouns and simpler structure: 'middle-class and lower-class people use bikes for transportation, and even wealthy people use them for comfort.'