自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Improve tense accuracy, give a direct topic sentence and add one or two supporting details using linking words. Use past tense for childhood, and avoid short, incomplete answers. Be specific (e.g., type of bike, how you used it, who you rode with).

示例: Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child. For example, it was a red mountain bike that I rode to school and around my neighborhood every day, and I often rode it with my brother on weekends.

建议: Give a clear opinion in the topic sentence, support it with specific reasons and use linking words (e.g., however, although, because). Avoid repetition and filler phrases like “I don't know.” Provide one concrete example or comparison. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

示例: I don't think bicycles are very popular in my country because most people prefer cars for commuting. For instance, our cities lack safe bike lanes, so only a few people—mainly children and hobbyists—ride bikes, although some of my friends own one for short trips.

× Yes, I do have a bike.

✓ Yes, I had a bike.

The examiner asked 'Did you have a bike when you were a child?', which is past tense. The student replied using present simple ('I do have'), which mismatches the past-time context. Change to past simple ('I had') to match the past timeframe. Suggestion: when answering questions about past events, use past tense verbs (e.g., 'I had a bike').

× I don't think bikes are popular in our country because I don't really see bikes that much, but my friends do have do have a bike. I don't know.

✓ I don't think bikes are popular in our country because I don't really see them that much, but some of my friends had bikes when they were younger.

There are several issues: (1) Repetition 'do have do have' is an accidental duplication and should be removed. (2) The sentence mixes present observations ('I don't really see') with a general statement about popularity; using pronoun 'them' makes the sentence less repetitive. (3) The student's earlier answer and the question context imply childhood or general popularity now; to be consistent, choose either present or past. If commenting on current popularity, keep present: 'some of my friends have bikes.' If comparing childhood, use past: 'had bikes when they were younger.' Also 'my friends do have a bike' is odd singular; use plural 'bikes' or 'a bike' with 'each' / 'one' clarified. Suggestion: remove duplicated words, use appropriate pronouns (them), and ensure tense consistency.