自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be direct and clear: start with a simple topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid hesitations and grammatical errors (use past tense consistently), and do not use second-person forms like “your” when referring to yourself. Keep answers concise (2–4 sentences).

示例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. My parents thought cycling was too dangerous for young children, so they didn’t allow me to learn. As a result, I only started riding much later when I was a teenager.

建议: Start with a clear opinion sentence, then support it with specific reasons and examples. Use correct comparative forms (“more affordable” not “reasonable”) and appropriate grammar (e.g., “people can buy them” rather than “everybody has buy”). Use linking words like “because” and “for example” to connect ideas. Keep it natural and avoid filler words.

示例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are more affordable and easier to park than cars. For example, many commuters use bicycles to travel short distances to work or the market, which saves time and money.

× No, I did not have a bike when I was a child because my family didn't, not allowed me to, uh, get your bike because it's really dangerous.

✓ No, I did not have a bike when I was a child because my family did not allow me to get one because they thought it was really dangerous.

The sentence uses incorrect pronouns and mixed forms: 'my family didn't, not allowed me to' is ungrammatical. Replace with 'my family did not allow me to' (correct past tense and verb form). 'Your bike' is wrong contextually; use 'one' to refer to a bike. Also 'because it's really dangerous' should match past viewpoint but can remain present general belief; keep as 'they thought it was really dangerous' to be consistent.

× And I think, uh, as a child we don't sit and drive a bike.

✓ And I think that, as children, we did not sit on and ride bikes.

Tense and verb choice are incorrect. The speaker refers to the past ('as a child'), so use past tense 'did not'. Use correct verbs 'sit on' and 'ride' for a bike. Also adjust pronoun 'we' with 'as children' for clarity. 'Drive a bike' is not idiomatic; use 'ride a bike'.

× Yes, there are a lot of bikes in our country because I think bikes are reasonable than cars.

✓ Yes, there are a lot of bikes in our country because I think bikes are more affordable than cars.

'Reasonable than' is incorrect comparative structure. Use 'more affordable than' or 'cheaper than' to compare. 'Reasonable' as an adjective needs 'more' to form comparative but better word is 'affordable'.

× So uh, everybody has buy, so they can go easily wherever they want to go without any trouble and without any hesitation.

✓ So, everybody has bought one, so they can go easily wherever they want without any trouble or hesitation.

'Has buy' is incorrect: after 'has' use the past participle 'bought'. 'Wherever they want to go' can be shortened to 'wherever they want'. Also replace 'and without any hesitation' with 'or hesitation' for natural parallelism. Added 'one' to refer to a bike. 'Has bought' indicates present perfect, which is appropriate to express possession.