学习— Part 1 评分报告

建议: In English (Cambodia), try to make your answer more natural and clear by avoiding redundancy and improving sentence structure. For example, say "I am a full-time student because I want to focus on my studies. In the future, I hope to become a good person and find a good job."

示例: I am a full-time student because I want to focus on my studies. In the future, I hope to become a good person and find a good job.

建议: In English (Cambodia), improve clarity by correcting grammar and avoiding repetition. Use linking words to connect ideas. For example, say "I am currently a second-year architecture student at Norton University. I really like it because I believe it will help me have a good future. Therefore, I try my best in my studies."

示例: I am currently a second-year architecture student at Norton University. I really like it because I believe it will help me have a good future. Therefore, I try my best in my studies.

建议: In English (Cambodia), make your answer more natural by using correct terms and linking words. For example, say "Yes, it is a good place to study, but it mainly offers courses in English, architecture, and engineering. So, if you want to study these majors, I highly recommend it."

示例: Yes, it is a good place to study, but it mainly offers courses in English, architecture, and engineering. So, if you want to study these majors, I highly recommend it.

建议: In English (Cambodia), improve your answer by organizing ideas clearly and using correct vocabulary. For example, say "I like everything now, but I think the environment could be improved. There are not many natural things like flowers or green trees, so I would like to see more greenery."

示例: I like everything now, but I think the environment could be improved. There are not many natural things like flowers or green trees, so I would like to see more greenery.

建议: In English (Cambodia), make your answer clearer and more natural by using linking words and correct grammar. For example, say "My future study plan is to finish my bachelor's degree first. Then, I want to work a little to gain experience. After that, I will study for a master's degree because this career requires higher education."

示例: My future study plan is to finish my bachelor's degree first. Then, I want to work a little to gain experience. After that, I will study for a master's degree because this career requires higher education.

× I am a full time student, I don't work anymore because I just want to focus on my study first and in the future I will be the good person and I can find a good job for my future.

✓ I am a full-time student. I don't work anymore because I just want to focus on my studies first, and in the future, I want to be a good person and find a good job for my future.

The sentence has issues with verb tense consistency and article usage. 'Full time' should be hyphenated as 'full-time' when used as an adjective. 'Study' should be plural 'studies' to refer to academic work in general. 'Will be the good person' is incorrect; it should be 'want to be a good person' to express future intention. Also, 'I can find' is better as 'find' to match the future intention. Suggestions: use correct hyphenation, plural form for 'studies', and consistent future intention expressions.

× Now I study at Norton University Departure of Architecture year 2 and I really I really like it and I hope it's can bring me a good future because I really hope in this job and I try my best in this study also.

✓ Now I study at Norton University, Department of Architecture, year 2, and I really like it. I hope it can bring me a good future because I really hope to work in this field, and I try my best in my studies as well.

The phrase 'Departure of Architecture' is incorrect; it should be 'Department of Architecture'. 'I hope it's can bring me' is incorrect; 'it's' should be 'it' and 'can' should not be preceded by 'it's'. 'Hope in this job' should be 'hope to work in this field' for clarity. 'Try my best in this study' should be 'try my best in my studies'. Suggestions: correct prepositions and phrases for clarity and correctness.

× Yes it is actually. It's not for all student because the school is almost only uh, departure of English, architecture and engineering.

✓ Yes, it is actually. It's not for all students because the school is almost only the departments of English, Architecture, and Engineering.

'Student' should be plural 'students' to refer to all students. 'Departure' is incorrect; it should be 'departments'. Also, the definite article 'the' is needed before 'departments'. Suggestions: use plural forms and correct department names with articles.

× If you want to study those of job or those of major, you can go to study there.

✓ If you want to study those jobs or those majors, you can go to study there.

The phrase 'those of job' and 'those of major' is incorrect. It should be 'those jobs' or 'those majors' without 'of'. Suggestions: remove unnecessary prepositions for correct noun phrases.

× Actually I like everything right now but I think it should change something like environment it it not it.

✓ Actually, I like everything right now, but I think it should change something about the environment; it is not good.

The sentence has unclear pronoun references and repetition ('it it not it'). 'Change something like environment' is incorrect; it should be 'change something about the environment'. Suggestions: clarify pronouns and correct prepositional phrases.

× It doesn't have a lot of natural and beauty beauty like flower or green tree anything else I think I want to change it.

✓ It doesn't have a lot of natural beauty like flowers or green trees. I think I want to change that.

'Natural and beauty beauty' is incorrect; 'natural beauty' is the correct phrase. 'Flower' and 'green tree' should be plural 'flowers' and 'green trees'. Suggestions: use correct adjective-noun combinations and plural forms.

× For my future study plan, I want to finish my bachelor degree and I start work a little bit to get some experience and then I go to study master degree because I want to get high education and especially in this career it's need the most education.

✓ For my future study plan, I want to finish my bachelor's degree and start working a little bit to get some experience, and then I will go to study for a master's degree because I want to get higher education, especially since this career needs the most education.

'I start work' should be 'start working' to indicate ongoing action. 'I go to study master degree' should be 'I will go to study for a master's degree' to indicate future intention. 'High education' should be 'higher education'. 'It's need' should be 'it needs'. Suggestions: use correct verb forms, articles, and subject-verb agreement.