学习— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 你的回答语法错误较多，表达不够自然，且信息不够清晰。建议简洁明了地介绍自己是学生，学校和专业，并用简单句表达课程内容和感受。

示例: I am currently a student at Shenyang University, majoring in Industrial Engineering. This semester, I have studied courses like Lean Production and Microeconomics, which I find very useful and meaningful.

建议: 回答中存在语法和表达不流畅的问题，建议使用连贯的句子表达学习地点和原因，避免重复和语法错误。

示例: I usually study in the classroom, but sometimes I go to the library at night because the classroom is often crowded and there is less space to study.

建议: 回答较为简短且有语法错误，建议使用完整句子并适当使用连接词，使表达更自然流畅。

示例: Definitely, the library is a very quiet and peaceful place. Since everyone is studying and concentrating, I can focus on my studies from morning till night.

建议: 表达不清晰且有语法错误，建议直接回答是否希望改变学习环境，并给出理由，句子简洁明了。

示例: To be honest, I don't want to change my study place because I think it is efficient. I prefer to study in the classroom for one or two semesters without changing.

建议: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不够清晰。建议用简单句清楚说明未来的学习计划和职业打算。

示例: After I graduate from university, I plan to go to Germany to pursue a master's degree, which will take three or four years. After that, I plan to find a job related to my major.

× I'm currently a university which studied in Shenyang University and my major is Industrial Engineering which including Lean productions and Miracle economics.

✓ I'm currently a university student studying at Shenyang University, and my major is Industrial Engineering, which includes Lean production and Microeconomics.

这里“a university”应为“a university student”，因为人是学生而不是大学本身；“which including”应改为“which includes”，动词形式和主语不一致；“Lean productions”和“Miracle economics”应为“Lean production”和“Microeconomics”，名词单复数和拼写错误。

× This semester I learned through its courses which made me a very useful and meaningful.

✓ This semester I have learned through its courses, which have been very useful and meaningful to me.

“learned”应使用现在完成时“have learned”，因为动作发生在最近的时间段；“made me a very useful and meaningful”表达不正确，应改为“have been very useful and meaningful to me”，使句子通顺且语法正确。

× Mostly I'm studying in the classroom, but sometimes I need to go to the library because there's too much people studying in the classroom so it's how less space for me to study so I so I prefer to go to the library at night.

✓ Mostly I'm studying in the classroom, but sometimes I need to go to the library because there are too many people studying in the classroom, so there is less space for me to study. Therefore, I prefer to go to the library at night.

“there's too much people”中“people”是复数，应该用“there are too many people”；“too much”用于不可数名词，“too many”用于可数名词；“it's how less space”表达不正确，应改为“there is less space”；句子过长且重复，应拆分并调整。

× Definitely 'cause it is extremely very quiet and peaceful. Everybody was studying and concentrating so I can focusing on my studies from day to night.

✓ Definitely, because it is extremely quiet and peaceful. Everybody is studying and concentrating, so I can focus on my studies from day to night.

“was studying”应改为现在时“is studying”，因为描述的是当前情况；“can focusing”应改为“can focus”，情态动词后接动词原形；“extremely very”重复，应去掉“very”。

× To be honest, I don't like to make any changes where my study place because I think it is time wasting and I useful.

✓ To be honest, I don't like to make any changes to my study place because I think it is a waste of time and not useful.

“where my study place”表达不正确，应改为“to my study place”；“time wasting”应改为“a waste of time”；“I useful”语法错误，应改为“not useful”。

× So I prefer to studying in the classroom for one semester or two semesters without changing for a long time.

✓ So I prefer to study in the classroom for one or two semesters without changing for a long time.

“prefer to studying”中“to”是介词还是不定式符号，这里应接动词原形“study”，而不是动名词“studying”。

× I think after I graduating from university, I will go to Germany for my master degree including three or four years, and after I graduate from the German schools, I will plan to find a job. I bought my major.

✓ I think after I graduate from university, I will go to Germany for my master's degree, which will take three or four years. After I graduate from the German school, I plan to find a job related to my major.

“after I graduating”应改为“after I graduate”，动词形式错误；“master degree including three or four years”表达不清，应改为“master's degree, which will take three or four years”；“I will plan to find a job”应改为“I plan to find a job”；“I bought my major”表达错误，应为“related to my major”。