学习— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答时应避免使用口语化和不完整的表达，如“like one year ago”和“still don't have a job yet”，应更自然流畅地表达时间和状态。

示例: I graduated from college about a year ago, and currently, I am not working yet.

建议: 回答中应避免使用口语填充词如“Oh”，并且可以更清晰地表达地点关系，增加连贯性。

示例: My college is located in a suburb of Chongqing. Before that, I studied in a small city in Fujian.

建议: 回答应避免重复和口语填充词，表达应更清晰和连贯，且直接回答问题。

示例: I enjoyed living there, but I don't think it was the best place for studying because I didn't get good grades in my high school exams. Therefore, I had limited options when choosing the college.

建议: 回答较好，但“choir zones”应为“quiet zones”，注意词汇准确性。

示例: Yes, I would like the school to improve the study environment by adding more quiet zones and comfortable seating areas to help students concentrate better. Also, upgrading technology like faster Wi-Fi and modern computers would be beneficial.

建议: 回答中应避免口语填充词，表达应更具体和连贯，明确说明学习计划。

示例: Since I have graduated, my main plan is to improve my professional skills. Besides that, I also want to study subjects that interest me in my free time.

× And neither, I graduated from college like one year ago and right now I still don't have a job yet.

✓ Neither, I graduated from college about one year ago and right now I still don't have a job yet.

句首的'And neither'用法不当，应该用'Neither'表示否定的回应。'like'在这里用作时间副词不准确，改为'about'更合适。

× Oh, my college is located in Chongqing but not in the main area and before that I was studying in a small city in Fujian.

✓ Oh, my college is located in Chongqing but not in the main area, and before that I studied in a small city in Fujian.

'was studying'在这里用过去进行时不合适，描述过去的事实应使用一般过去时'studied'。

× I say I very enjoy living there, but is it suitable for studying?

✓ I would say I really enjoy living there, but is it suitable for studying?

'I say'表达不自然，改为'I would say'更符合口语习惯。'very enjoy'搭配错误，应使用副词'really'修饰动词'enjoy'。

× I don't get a good grade and uh, umm, high school graduation exams, so I don't have much choice, so I just choose the place that has the most.

✓ I didn't get good grades in the high school graduation exams, so I didn't have much choice, so I just chose the place that had the most.

描述过去的考试成绩和选择，动词应使用过去时态。'get'改为'didn't get'，'choose'改为'chose'，'has'改为'had'。

× adding more choir zones and comfortable seating areas would help students concentrate it better.

✓ adding more quiet zones and comfortable seating areas would help students concentrate better.

'choir zones'应为'quiet zones'，且'concentrate'后不需要加'it'，直接用'concentrate better'。

× Additionally, upgrading the technologies and resources available such as faster Wi-Fi and more modern computers.

✓ Additionally, upgrading the technologies and resources available, such as faster Wi-Fi and more modern computers, would help.

原句缺少谓语动词，导致句子不完整。添加'would help'使句子完整。

× Since I already graduated from college, I think my main study plan is to improve my job skill, you know?

✓ Since I already graduated from college, I think my main study plan is to improve my job skills, you know?

'job skill'应为复数形式'job skills'，表示多项技能。

× And uh, other than that, I think I can study more. Something I like, like some interest.

✓ And uh, other than that, I think I can study more things I like, such as some interests.

原句结构不完整，'Something I like, like some interest'不连贯，改为完整表达。