学习— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答中语法和表达不够准确，句子结构混乱，影响理解。建议简化句子，注意时态和词汇的正确使用，同时避免冗长和重复。

示例: I'm currently a student at the University of Technology, majoring in finance. I chose this major because I am interested in how people manage their money. Since starting my studies, I have learned a lot about data and index analysis, which I find very fascinating.

建议: 回答表达不清晰，句子不连贯，缺少具体细节。建议使用连词连接句子，明确表达地点和感受，并补充具体信息。

示例: I study at a university located in the city centre. In my first year, I studied at the new campus, but in the second year, I moved to the old campus. I find the old campus more convenient because it has better facilities.

建议: 回答中表达了观点，但语法和词汇使用不准确。建议使用更自然的表达方式，注意句子结构和词汇搭配。

示例: I must say it is not a very comfortable place to study because the climate is quite terrible. During September and August, the temperature often exceeds 30 degrees Celsius, so I can't study well without air conditioning.

建议: 回答表达混乱，句子不完整且含糊。建议明确表达想法，使用正确的词汇和句型，避免语法错误。

示例: Yes, I would like some changes at my university. For example, the transportation around the campus is not very convenient. It would be better if there were more bus routes and a nearby railway station.

建议: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不连贯。建议使用完整句子，清晰表达未来计划，并注意词汇的准确使用。

示例: Actually, I plan to start a postgraduate degree in international finance next year. After that, I want to find a suitable job in a major city and work towards earning a higher salary.

× I'm currently a student actually University of Technology and measuring the finance.

✓ I'm currently a student at the University of Technology, majoring in finance.

这里缺少冠词“the”，并且“measuring the finance”应为“majoring in finance”，表示主修金融。名词单复数和搭配错误。

× I choose the major because I was interesting how people manage has been their money, but after I started the lesson I learned.

✓ I chose the major because I was interested in how people manage their money, but after I started the lessons I learned a lot.

“choose”时态错误，应为过去式“chose”；“interesting”应为“interested”，表示感兴趣；“has been”错误，应去掉；“lesson”应为复数“lessons”。

× A lot of knowledge about the data and index analysis I found that is not quite over.

✓ I found that I learned a lot of knowledge about data and index analysis, but it is not quite over.

句子结构混乱，缺少主语和谓语，需调整顺序使句子通顺。

× I study at university located in the city centre.

✓ I study at a university located in the city centre.

“university”前缺少冠词“a”，表示泛指一所大学。

× First year I study. At the new campus of my school and there's replace and 2nd year I moved with my lesson.

✓ In the first year, I studied at the new campus of my school, and in the second year, I moved with my lessons.

时态应为过去式“studied”和“moved”；句子断裂，应合并成完整句子。

× To the old Campos and I found there is more convenient because they are a lot of.

✓ to the old campus, and I found it more convenient because there are a lot of facilities.

“Campos”应为“campus”；“there is”应为“there are”对应复数；句子不完整，需补充名词。

× I must say isn't a comfortable place to study because the climate in there is super terrible.

✓ I must say it isn't a comfortable place to study because the climate there is terrible.

缺少主语“it”；“super terrible”用词不当，简化为“terrible”；“in there”应为“there”。

× Exposure in this September and August I can't account leave without air conditioner.

✓ During this September and August, I can't leave without an air conditioner.

“Exposure in”用法错误，应为“During”；“account leave”错误，应为“leave”；缺少冠词“an”。

× Here's the temperature is more than 30.

✓ The temperature here is more than 30 degrees.

“Here's”用法错误，应为“The temperature here”；缺少单位“degrees”。

× So I would it be better if there are more verses and the railway?

✓ So it would be better if there were more buses and railways.

“would it be better”语序错误，应为“it would be better”；“verses”应为“buses”；“railway”复数形式“railways”；虚拟语气用过去式“were”。

× I was so they know the man.

✓ I was so sorry, I don't understand this sentence.

该句语义不清，无法理解，建议重新表达。

× Actually, I'm going to start dated. Post the graduate of. Of international financing next year and after that I want to find proper job in some in the major cities.

✓ Actually, I'm going to start a postgraduate degree in international finance next year, and after that, I want to find a proper job in some major cities.

“start dated”错误，应为“start a postgraduate degree”；“post the graduate of”错误，应为“postgraduate degree in”；“financing”应为“finance”；缺少冠词“a”；“in some in the major cities”重复，应为“in some major cities”。

× And to find ways to higher salary.

✓ And to find ways to earn a higher salary.

“to higher salary”缺少动词，应为“to earn a higher salary”。