学习— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答时语法和表达不够准确，句子结构混乱，且有语义不清的问题。建议简化句子，确保语法正确，避免冗余，并且表达更自然。

示例: I'm currently a marketing student, which I find very interesting because it helps me understand consumer behavior. I enjoy this subject as it allows me to interact with different people and share ideas without feeling pressured.

建议: 回答中存在发音和拼写错误，句子不完整且表达不清晰。建议使用完整句子，注意单词拼写和语法，表达清楚选择学校的原因。

示例: I study marketing at Hanson University, which is well-known for its excellent marketing courses. I chose this university because it offers many practical skills that will help me build a successful career.

建议: 回答中句子连接不够流畅，有断句和语法错误。建议使用连接词使句子更连贯，并注意句子完整性。

示例: I think it is a good place to study because the area is very quiet. Moreover, there are many green trees around, which help me feel relaxed and focused. This kind of environment makes it easier for me to concentrate on my work.

建议: 回答表达不清，语法错误严重，句子不完整。建议简化表达，使用正确的语法和词汇，清楚说明希望环境安静的原因。

示例: I would like the study area to be quieter because sometimes it gets too noisy, which makes it hard for me to focus.

建议: 回答中有严重的语法和拼写错误，表达不清晰。建议使用简单句子，正确表达未来计划和目的。

示例: After finishing university, I plan to pursue a master's degree in marketing to deepen my knowledge and improve my skills.

× I'm currently a student majoring in marketing which answered very interesting because it helps me understand consumer behavior.

✓ I'm currently a student majoring in marketing, which is very interesting because it helps me understand consumer behavior.

原句中“which answered very interesting”结构不正确，应为“which is very interesting”，表示“这很有趣”。需要使用正确的关系代词引导的定语从句，并用正确的动词形式。

× I enjoyed this subject as it allowed me to interact with different people and share ideas without feelings pressured.

✓ I enjoyed this subject as it allowed me to interact with different people and share ideas without feeling pressured.

“without feelings pressured”中“feelings”应为动词不定式“feeling”，表示“没有感到压力”。“feeling”作为动名词用作介词“without”的宾语。

× To change minds or opinion.

✓ To change minds or opinions.

该句为不完整句子，缺少主语和谓语，且“opinion”应为复数“opinions”与“minds”对应。应将其合并为完整句子或作为前句的补充。

× I study marketing at Hanson University, which is a world node in the stration.

✓ I study marketing at Hanson University, which is a world node in the station.

“stration”应为“station”，且“a world node in the station”表达不清，可能是拼写错误或表达错误。需要确认正确表达。

× I chose this university because it offers excellent causes in marketing and I hope to again many practical.

✓ I chose this university because it offers excellent courses in marketing and I hope to gain many practical skills.

“causes”应为“courses”，“again”应为“gain”，且句子不完整，缺少“skills”一词。需要使用正确的名词和动词。

× Skills that will help me build a successful career in the future.

✓ These are skills that will help me build a successful career in the future.

该句为不完整句子，缺少主语和谓语，应与前句合并或补充完整。

× I think it is a good place to start it because this is very quiet in this area.

✓ I think it is a good place to study because it is very quiet in this area.

“start it”应为“study”，“this is very quiet”应为“it is very quiet”，使用正确的代词和动词。

× There are many green trees around which helped me feel relaxed and focused in this kind of environment.

✓ There are many green trees around which help me feel relaxed and focused in this kind of environment.

“helped”应为现在时“help”，因为描述的是一般事实。

× Makes it easier. For me to concentrate on my work.

✓ It makes it easier for me to concentrate on my work.

句子缺少主语，应合并为完整句子。

× I would like to study in farmers to be quieted because sometimes it gets too noisy which make.

✓ I would like the study area to be quieter because sometimes it gets too noisy, which makes it hard to focus.

“study in farmers to be quieted”表达不清，应为“study area to be quieter”；“make”应为“makes”，主谓一致。

× It had to focus.

✓ It is hard to focus.

“It had to focus”语法错误，应为“it is hard to focus”，表达“很难集中注意力”。

× After finishing university, I plan to pressure and a master's degree in marketing too dipped my knowledge and improve my Koreans host bective.

✓ After finishing university, I plan to pursue a master's degree in marketing to deepen my knowledge and improve my career prospects.

“pressure”应为“pursue”，“too dipped”应为“to deepen”，“Koreans host bective”应为“career prospects”，句子中多处拼写错误和词语使用错误。