服装— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more accurate and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (articles, plurals), avoid fillers and repetition, and limit to max 4 sentences. Use linking words to add one specific detail about why you prefer those clothes.

示例: I prefer comfortable clothes like light shirts and skirts. For example, today I am wearing a white shirt and a light striped skirt because they are breathable and suit warm weather.

建议: Give a direct answer, remove hesitations and unclear phrases, and provide a concise reason with linking words. Correct tense and vocabulary (e.g. ‘I sweat a lot’). Keep to two or three sentences maximum.

示例: I prefer comfortable and casual clothes rather than smart clothes. Since summer is coming, I sweat a lot, so loose, breathable clothes are more comfortable for me.

建议: Answer directly and give a clear, relevant example without confusing details. Avoid unnecessary information and fix unclear phrasing (e.g. 'after coming to Toronto'). Use linking words to connect the example to your main point.

示例: Yes, I like wearing T-shirts because they are comfortable and easy to pack. For example, when I travelled to Toronto last year, I bought a few T-shirts because the weather was warm.

建议: Give a clear statement about your routine and avoid contradictory sentences. Use precise sequencing words (first, then) and reduce repetition. State one specific strategy you use and why it helps.

示例: No, I don't spend much time choosing clothes. I pick my outfit the night before so that I save time in the morning and can leave earlier.

建议: Clarify your stance: say whether you do or not, and give one contrasting example using linking words (however, while). Avoid vague generalizations and correct grammar.

示例: Yes. On weekdays I usually wear smart-casual clothes for work, while on weekends I prefer very casual outfits like T-shirts and jeans to relax.

建议: Start with a clear preference, then give a specific cultural observation with one reason. Remove fillers and awkward phrases (e.g. 'outstanding' — use 'stand out'). Keep it concise and coherent.

示例: I prefer wearing black or white because they are simple and easy to match. In Korea many people wear this combination, especially on the subway, because neutral colours are understated and practical.

× Personally, I feel that if I choose the my clothes, I like to come comfortable clothes such as light shirts or lights skirts.

✓ Personally, I feel that when I choose my clothes, I like to wear comfortable clothes such as light shirts or light skirts.

The sentence contains article errors and word choice issues. 'the my clothes' is incorrect; use 'my clothes'. 'come comfortable clothes' is incorrect verb choice and should be 'wear comfortable clothes'. 'lights skirts' should be 'light skirts' (adjective form). Suggestion: remove unnecessary articles, use correct verbs like 'wear', and place adjectives before nouns.

× I want to describe my today's outfit.

✓ I want to describe today's outfit.

'My today's outfit' mixes possessive 'my' with the determiner 'today's'. Use one determiner: either 'my outfit today' or 'today's outfit'. Suggestion: say 'today's outfit' or 'my outfit today'.

× I wore a light striped skirts and white shirt.

✓ I wore a light striped skirt and a white shirt.

There is a singular/plural mismatch: 'a' requires a singular noun, so 'a ... skirts' is incorrect. Also articles are missing before 'white shirt'. Use 'a light striped skirt and a white shirt'.

× I I prefer to wear comfortable and casual clothes than smart clothes nowadays.

✓ I prefer to wear comfortable and casual clothes rather than smart clothes nowadays.

This sentence has redundancy ('I I') and preposition/comparison wording. Use 'rather than' for comparisons. No third person singular error but include correction for redundancy. Suggestion: remove duplicate 'I' and use 'rather than'.

× I've felt uh, that the summer is coming now and it is very not crucial for me to.

✓ I feel that summer is coming now and it is not very comfortable for me.

Misuse of present perfect 'I've felt' (unnecessary) and awkward phrasing 'very not crucial for me to' which is unclear. The speaker likely means discomfort in summer: use present simple 'I feel' and 'not very comfortable.' Suggestion: use clear adjectives and present simple for general feelings.

× I'm very sweating a lot when the summer started.

✓ I sweat a lot when summer starts.

Incorrect progressive form 'I'm very sweating' and tense mismatch 'when the summer started' (past) versus general habit. Use simple present for habitual action: 'I sweat a lot when summer starts' or 'I sweat a lot in summer.'

× Yes, I like wearing T-shirts and for instance, uh, when I go to a new country, I always wear the T-shirts in each country.

✓ Yes, I like wearing T-shirts; for instance, when I go to a new country, I always wear T-shirts there.

Unnecessary definite article 'the' before 'T-shirts' and awkward phrase 'in each country'. Remove 'the' and use 'there' to refer to the new country. Suggestion: say 'wear T-shirts there' or 'wear T-shirts in each country.'

× So, umm, after calling to Toronto, I bought the, uh, expensive additional clothes in here.

✓ So, after coming to Toronto, I bought some expensive additional clothes here.

'After calling to Toronto' is incorrect; likely meant 'coming to Toronto' or 'moving to Toronto'. 'Bought the expensive additional clothes in here' has article and preposition errors. Use 'bought some expensive clothes here.' Suggestion: use correct verbs for movement (come/arrive) and use 'here' without 'in'.

× Oh well, I don't like to choose my clothes at morning every day, so I I want it to reduce my choosing time.

✓ Oh well, I don't like to choose my clothes in the morning every day, so I want to reduce the time I spend choosing them.

Use 'in the morning' not 'at morning'. Duplicate 'I'. 'I want it to reduce my choosing time' is ungrammatical; rephrase to 'I want to reduce the time I spend choosing them.' Suggestion: use proper time preposition and clearer phrasing.

× So I always therefore I always choose my clothes at morning and that is helpful to spend my time.

✓ Therefore, I always choose my clothes in the morning, and that helps me save time.

Awkward repetition 'I always therefore I always' and wrong preposition 'at morning'. 'That is helpful to spend my time' is unnatural; use 'helps me save time.' Suggestion: avoid repetition and use natural collocations.

× Yes, to be honest, umm are some people feel that the comfortable and comfortable clothes is more necessary to to focus on my working or studying, but on the weekday, uh, first, I firmly believe that most of people wanted to enjoy that.

✓ Yes, to be honest, some people feel that comfortable clothes are more necessary to help them focus on work or study, but on weekdays I firmly believe that most people want to enjoy themselves.

Multiple problems: extraneous question 'are', repeated 'comfortable', subject-verb agreement 'clothes is' should be 'clothes are', incorrect pronoun/reference 'my working or studying' should be 'work or study' or 'their work or study', tense mismatch 'wanted' should be 'want', and 'enjoy that' unclear—use 'enjoy themselves.' Suggestion: simplify sentence, fix agreement, and use correct pronouns.

× As far as I see, I prefer to wear black or white in Korea.

✓ As far as I can see, I prefer to wear black or white in Korea.

Missing modal 'can' in the fixed phrase 'as far as I can see.' Suggestion: use the complete phrase 'as far as I can see.'

× When you go to Korea, you can see that kind of combination very well at subway station or on the road because, uh, and it's not umm, outstanding for the person when we wear that.

✓ When you go to Korea, you can see that kind of combination often in subway stations or on the streets, because it is not very noticeable when people wear it.

Several issues: missing plural 'subway stations', 'on the road' better as 'on the streets', 'not ... outstanding for the person' is awkward and ungrammatical—use 'not very noticeable when people wear it.' Also remove filler 'uh' and 'and'. Suggestion: use plural nouns for general statements and clearer adjectives like 'noticeable.'