音乐— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more grammatically accurate, concise and logical. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (e.g. ‘released’ → ‘relieved’), avoid repetition, and add one specific reason or example. Use a linking phrase for clarity.

示例: I prefer sad music because it helps me feel relieved and reflect on my problems. For example, when I listen to a slow piano song after a stressful day, it calms my thoughts and lets me process my worries more clearly.

建议: Improve grammar, pronoun consistency and sentence structure. Begin with a direct response, explain cause and give a specific example. Use linking words like ‘because’ and ‘for example’ and avoid fragmented sentences.

示例: Yes, happy music makes me feel more excited because energetic rhythms lift my mood. For example, when I play upbeat pop songs while studying, I feel more motivated and finish my homework faster.

建议: Improve tense and article use, and make the answer more compact and specific. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give two brief reasons linked with 'because' or 'so'.

示例: No, I've never taken music classes, but I would like to. I haven't because there are none near my home and private lessons are often too expensive for me.

建议: Correct grammar and word choice, and be more specific about how music helps. Use one linking phrase and a concise example. Keep within 3–4 sentences.

示例: Yes, I often listen to music while doing chores or homework because it makes me more motivated. For instance, upbeat songs help me clean faster and concentrate better when I have to complete assignments.

× Personally, I prefer sad music instead of happy music because when I listen to sad music I feel released.

✓ Personally, I prefer sad music to happy music because when I listen to sad music I feel relieved.

The phrase 'prefer ... instead of' is less natural than 'prefer ... to' for comparisons; also 'released' is incorrect word choice here; the correct adjective is 'relieved' to express a feeling of relief. Use present simple 'prefer' and 'listen' which are appropriate for habitual preference.

× I feel like everything, every problem that I have just goon.

✓ I feel like everything, every problem that I have, just goes away.

The original uses 'goon' which is not an English verb here; the intended meaning is that problems 'go away'. Subject-verb agreement requires 'goes' for singular 'everything' or the phrase 'every problem'; keep present simple 'have' for current possession. Add commas for clarity.

× Happy music really make me feel more excited because it will also affect my feelings when I feel sad or not.

✓ Happy music really makes me feel more excited because it also affects my feelings whether I am sad or not.

With singular subject 'Happy music', the verb requires third person singular 'makes' and 'affects'. Also rephrase 'when I feel sad or not' to 'whether I am sad or not' for grammaticality and clarity; maintain present simple because this is a general statement.

× Uh, in a mood to do something and then I listen to happy music, you will turn my sad mood to happy mood, which I can make my work or homework more.

✓ If I am in the mood to do something and then I listen to happy music, it will turn my sad mood into a happy mood, which helps me do my work or homework better.

Multiple issues: sentence structure and pronoun reference. Use conditional 'If I am in the mood' and correct subject 'it' (happy music) rather than 'you'. Use 'turn X into Y' for change of state. Use 'helps me do ... better' to express increased ability; 'more' is vague. '-ing' form not appropriate here; use base forms after modal/auxiliaries and correct verb forms.

× I've never taken any music classes but I have dream of it.

✓ I've never taken any music classes but I have dreamed of it.

When using present perfect 'have', the verb should be in past participle form 'dreamed' (or 'dreamt') not base form 'dream'. Alternatively, use 'I've always dreamed of taking them' to be more natural.

× The reason I'm not in any music classes is because there's no music classes near my house and also it was sometimes very expensive.

✓ The reason I'm not in any music classes is that there are no music classes near my house and they are sometimes very expensive.

'There is' with plural 'music classes' is wrong; use 'there are'. Also replace 'because' following 'is' with 'that' for formal structure. Use consistent tense and plural pronoun 'they' to refer to 'music classes'. 'Was sometimes' should be 'are sometimes' if speaking generally.

× Yes, I do listen to music while doing other things, for example when I do any chores or homework.

✓ Yes, I do listen to music while doing other things, for example when I do chores or homework.

Remove 'any' which is unnecessary in this affirmative general statement. Present simple 'do listen' is acceptable for emphasis; maintain present tense.

× The reason is it will make me more motivates and feel excited to make that things.

✓ The reason is it makes me more motivated and excited to do those things.

Use the adjective 'motivated' rather than verb 'motivates' after 'makes me'. Use 'excited' as an adjective. Use 'do' for actions and 'those things' to refer back to chores/homework. Use present simple 'makes' for habitual effect.