音乐— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and correct small grammar issues. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundancy (e.g., “happy music” repeated) and keep within 3–4 sentences. Also correct word choice (e.g., “I could enjoy the music” → “I can enjoy both”).

示例: I prefer happy music when I’m feeling down because it cheers me up and lifts my mood. However, when I’m calm I enjoy both sad and happy songs since they each suit different feelings — sad songs can be reflective, while upbeat tunes are energizing.

建议: Fix grammar and phrasing and use linking words for clarity. Begin with a direct answer, then give one clear, specific example. Avoid awkward phrases like “heavy a happy music” and use correct tense and collocations (e.g., “play upbeat music”).

示例: Yes, definitely. For example, when I jog on a treadmill I usually play upbeat pop or rap music because it boosts my energy and helps me exercise for longer. As a result, I can keep a faster pace and train more effectively.

建议: Correct the instrument name and refine structure: a clear topic sentence and two specific supporting details. Use linking words to explain cause and effect and avoid minor pronunciation/spelling issues in speech. Keep it concise.

示例: Yes, I learned the traditional Chinese instrument called the guzheng when I was young. It was quite challenging because players often use finger picks and weekly practice was demanding, so after a short time I decided to stop taking lessons.

建议: Make your answer more natural and concise. Start with a direct statement about your current habit, then contrast briefly with the past using a linking word. Use natural phrases like “I don’t usually just listen anymore” and “in the background while I’m doing chores or studying.”

示例: I usually listen to music in the background while I’m doing chores or studying. I used to be able to focus only on music when I was younger, but now I tend to play it as background noise to help me concentrate or lift my mood.

× Personally speaking, my preference depends on my mood.

✓ Personally speaking, my preference depends on my mood.

No correction needed; sentence correctly uses present simple to describe a general truth about preferences.

× When I feel sad, I want to listen to some happy music which would cheer me up and make me feel more positive.

✓ When I feel sad, I want to listen to some happy music which will cheer me up and make me feel more positive.

Use of 'would' is unnecessary when describing a likely result in the present; 'will' or simple present ('cheers') is more appropriate. Suggest using 'will' to indicate the expected effect in this context.

× But when I'm in a rather calm mood, I listen to both sad and happy music because I could enjoy the music.

✓ But when I'm in a rather calm mood, I listen to both sad and happy music because I can enjoy the music.

Modal verb 'could' implies past ability or conditional; use 'can' to express present ability or possibility.

× Yes, definitely.

✓ Yes, definitely.

No correction needed; appropriate short affirmative response in present context.

× For example, when I try to do some jogging on a treadmill, I would always put on heavy a happy music or even some rap music to help me feel more energetic.

✓ For example, when I go jogging on a treadmill, I always put on heavy, happy music or even some rap music to help me feel more energetic.

'Try to do some jogging' is unnatural; use 'go jogging'. 'Would' is unnecessary for habitual action; use simple present 'always'. Word order 'heavy a happy music' is incorrect — use adjectives before the noun and separate with a comma if two adjectives ('heavy, happy music'). Also 'music' is uncountable so omit 'a'.

× And when I listen to such music I tend to last longer.

✓ And when I listen to such music I tend to exercise longer.

Verb 'last' needs an object or context; it's unclear. Likely meaning is 'exercise longer' or 'keep going longer'. Use a clearer verb to match intended meaning.

× When I was very young, I used to learn a traditional Chinese musical instrument called Gujong.

✓ When I was very young, I used to learn a traditional Chinese musical instrument called Guzheng.

Spelling error 'Gujong' should be 'Guzheng'. 'Used to learn' is acceptable for past habitual action, so tense is fine.

× Guzheng is actually a very difficult instrument to learn and play because you need to wear fake nails to play the strings, and the practices each week were also very difficult, so I gave up on it very quickly.

✓ Guzheng is actually a very difficult instrument to learn and play because you need to wear fake nails to play the strings, and the weekly practice sessions were also very difficult, so I gave up on it very quickly.

'The practices each week' is awkward; use 'weekly practice sessions' or 'weekly practices'. Also 'you' is generic which is acceptable, but keeping consistent perspective with 'I' is clearer. Correction improves noun phrase and clarity.

× When I was younger I had the ability to solely enjoy the music when I would just put on my earphones and do nothing else.

✓ When I was younger I could solely enjoy music when I just put on my earphones and did nothing else.

'Had the ability to' is wordy; 'could' expresses past ability. Use simple past 'did' for the habitual past action 'did nothing else'. 'Would' is unnecessary here for past habitual action when 'used to' or 'could' is clearer.

× But currently I do not possess this ability any longer so I would put on music anytime as background when I do like chores or study.

✓ But now I no longer have this ability, so I put on music as background whenever I do chores or study.

'Do not possess this ability any longer' is formal; 'no longer have' is more natural. 'Would put on' wrongly suggests conditional or habitual past; use present simple 'put on' for current habit. 'Anytime as background' is awkward; use 'as background whenever'. 'Do like chores' is incorrect — use 'do chores'.