教师— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers, and give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Also correct tense and pronouns.

示例: My favourite teacher is Mr. Wang, my high-school math teacher. He is very passionate and always offers extra help; for example, he invited me to ask questions after class and helped me understand difficult algebra problems.

建议: Answer directly, use correct grammar and reduce hesitations. Give a brief reason with linking words (because, therefore) and one specific example of the difficulty you expect.

示例: I don't want to be a teacher in the future because I find it difficult to communicate with young people; for instance, I struggle to explain ideas simply and calmly, which is essential for teaching.

建议: Provide a clear topic sentence and correct relative clause and pronouns. Use linking words to describe what happened and give a specific detail about how they helped (methods, results).

示例: Yes, I remember my former English teacher, Mr. Lee, who helped me prepare for writing competitions. For example, she reviewed my essays late into the evening and gave detailed feedback that improved my vocabulary and structure.

建议: Give a direct answer, avoid repetition, and organize reasons with linking words (because, so). Be specific about what ‘far away’ means and briefly mention if you'd like to reconnect in future.

示例: No, I'm not in touch with my primary school teachers because I moved to another city and I am busy with my studies. However, I would like to reconnect someday when I have more free time.

建议: Use correct verb forms and singular/plural agreement. Start with a clear topic sentence and give two specific examples of help, using linking words (for example, such as).

示例: He has helped me by explaining difficult concepts clearly; for example, he used diagrams to teach calculus. He also corrects my homework, pointing out mistakes in my solutions and suggesting better approaches.

建议: Answer directly and use correct comparative structures. Reduce fillers and give a specific reason with an example to support your opinion.

示例: No, I prefer my high-school teachers because they were more knowledgeable and better at explaining subjects; for instance, my chemistry teacher used clear experiments that made the lessons easier to understand even though he could be strict at times.

× Every time, uh, he told me to call him if I had any problem and actually he helped me a lot.

✓ Every time, uh, he tells me to call him if I have any problem and actually he helps me a lot.

The sentence mixes past tense 'told' and 'helped' with a general habitual meaning. For habitual actions use the simple present with third person singular: 'tells' and 'helps'. Also match 'have' to present general condition instead of 'had'.

× Like what he had said, Umm.

✓ Like what he said, umm.

The phrase 'had said' (past perfect) is unnecessary for a simple reference. Use simple past 'said' to refer to something he said earlier. Also maintain natural filler punctuation 'umm'.

× In the future, I will not to be a teacher because, uh, it's hard for me to communicate with others, especially for the children.

✓ In the future, I will not be a teacher because, uh, it's hard for me to communicate with others, especially children.

After 'will' the base verb form should be used without 'to' ('will not be'). Also 'for the children' is awkward; use 'especially children' when speaking generally.

× Uh, it needs quite a lot patience.

✓ Uh, it requires quite a lot of patience.

'Need' or 'requires' plus 'patience' must use an article or quantifier: 'a lot of patience' or 'much patience'. 'Needs quite a lot patience' is missing 'of' and would be better expressed as 'requires quite a lot of patience'.

× Uh, that's the thing I'm quite lack.

✓ Uh, that's the thing I'm quite lacking.

'Lack' is usually used without 'quite' before a noun; when describing a personal shortfall use the present participle 'lacking' after 'I'm' to form a correct adjective phrase: 'I'm quite lacking' or better 'I lack that'.

× Uh, yes, that's my English teacher, which one is called Mr. Lee and she helped me a lot in English writing competition.

✓ Uh, yes, that's my English teacher, Mr. Lee, and he helped me a lot in English writing competitions.

Use 'who' not 'which' for people. Also 'Mr. Lee' is male so use 'he'. 'English writing competition' should be plural or count-marked: 'English writing competitions' or 'an English writing competition'.

× Uh, at that time we worked until night by communicate with each.

✓ Uh, at that time we worked until night communicating with each other.

Incorrect structure 'by communicate with each' should be the present participle 'communicating' and include 'each other' for reciprocal action. 'Worked until night' is acceptable but 'until night' can be 'until late at night' for naturalness.

× No, they are quite far away from me and I also don't have any time to keep in touch with them because I have a lot of stress in my studying.

✓ No, they are quite far away from me and I also don't have time to keep in touch with them because I have a lot of stress from my studies.

'Any time' is okay but 'don't have time' is more natural. 'Stress in my studying' should be 'stress from my studies' or 'stress because of my studies' to use correct preposition and noun form.

× Umm, by the way, we don't have the chance.

✓ Umm, by the way, we don't have the chance to meet.

Sentence is incomplete; 'have the chance' needs an infinitive complement to specify the action: 'have the chance to meet' or 'don't get the chance'.

× They help me by let me know some knowledge by giving the explanation.

✓ They help me by letting me learn some things and by giving explanations.

'By let me know' is incorrect; use gerund 'letting' after 'by'. 'Some knowledge' is vague; 'learn some things' or 'learn some knowledge' is better. Use plural 'explanations' for naturalness.

× They help me in homework by, uh, tell me what's wrong in my writing and so on.

✓ They help me with homework by, uh, telling me what's wrong in my writing and so on.

Use 'with homework' rather than 'in homework'. After 'by' use the gerund 'telling'. Maintain parallel structure: 'by telling' matches previous 'by letting' style.

× Uh, I think not because I'm appreciate my high school teachers.

✓ Uh, I don't think so because I appreciate my high school teachers.

'I think not' is unnatural; 'I don't think so' is idiomatic. 'I'm appreciate' is ungrammatical; use the verb 'appreciate' with subject 'I' as 'I appreciate'.

× They compared with the primary ones, they are more, uh, brilliant and they have more knowledge, although sometimes they may be impatient.

✓ Compared with the primary-school teachers, they are more, uh, brilliant and have more knowledge, although sometimes they may be impatient.

Use 'Compared with' at sentence start without repeating 'they'. 'Primary ones' should be 'primary-school teachers' for clarity. Avoid redundant 'they' before 'have' for smoother structure.