教师— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and correct word order. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one brief reason. Avoid repetition and grammar errors.

示例: Yes. My favorite teachers are my Japanese teacher and my mathematics teacher because they explain difficult topics clearly and encourage questions.

建议: Provide a clear topic sentence and one or two specific reasons with a linking word. Reduce hesitations and avoid repeating phrases.

示例: No, I don't. Teaching seems very demanding, and I don't feel ready to take on that level of responsibility or work long hours every day.

建议: Answer directly, correct grammar and reduce fillers. Give one specific detail about why you remember them to enrich the answer.

示例: Yes, I do. I still remember four teachers from Japan and keep in occasional contact; I visit them whenever I go back because they supported my studies and gave me useful advice.

建议: Organize information clearly: state who you keep in touch with, then give a specific example. Fix tense and article errors and avoid listing awkwardly.

示例: Yes. I'm still in touch with my primary school class teacher from sixth grade, and with my kindergarten teacher; the kindergarten teacher even sent me a birthday message recently.

建议: Be specific and fix vocabulary/grammar. Use clear linking words and give a concrete example of how they helped you rather than vague statements.

示例: They helped by listening to students' concerns and adapting lessons to our needs. For example, my Japanese teacher noticed I struggled with grammar and gave me extra practice and feedback.

建议: Give a direct comparison and a clear reason. Avoid repeating words and state one specific difference between the schools or teachers.

示例: I prefer my primary school teachers because they were more caring and supportive. Also, my primary school was in a different country, so the teaching style and personal attention were quite different from high school.

× I do have favorite my favorite teachers, specifically my Japanese teacher and my mathematics teacher.

✓ I do have my favorite teachers, specifically my Japanese teacher and my mathematics teacher.

The possessive 'my' must directly modify 'favorite teachers'. 'Favorite my favorite' is incorrect word order and redundant. Remove the extra 'favorite' and place 'my' before the noun phrase. Suggestion: say 'I do have my favorite teachers' or simply 'I have favorite teachers'. (Grammar problem type ID corresponds to 26: sentence structure errors and 22: article errors; choose the primary type 26.)

× Umm no I don't because from my perspective I think teacher is such a hard job and I and I don't think I can have enough responsibility.

✓ Umm, no I don't because, from my perspective, I think being a teacher is such a hard job and I don't think I can take on that level of responsibility.

Use 'being a teacher' or 'a teacher' with the article; 'teacher is' without an article is incorrect. Also 'have enough responsibility' is awkward; 'take on that level of responsibility' is clearer. The main grammatical error is missing article and noun phrase form — treated as a third person singular/ noun form issue (ID 2) and sentence structure (26). Keep primary ID 2 as requested.

× Yes, I do actually actually have like 4 teachers from Japan. I'm still in contact with them occasionally and I always go to see them when I back to Japan. Yeah.

✓ Yes, I actually have about four teachers from Japan. I'm still in occasional contact with them and I always go to see them when I go back to Japan.

Use 'about four' instead of 'like 4' in formal speech, and remove duplicated 'actually'. 'In contact' is fine but 'in occasional contact' or 'still in occasional contact' is clearer. The clause 'when I back to Japan' is missing the verb 'go' — should be 'when I go back to Japan'. This is a verb omission/present tense issue (ID 6) and preposition/phrase wording; primary ID 6.

× Yes I am. I'm still in touch with my primary school teacher. She was my last year of school, my class teacher, and my 6th grade of primary school. And I'm also keep in touch with my kindergarten teacher. She just sent me happy birthday message.

✓ Yes I am. I'm still in touch with my primary school teacher. She was my class teacher in my final year of primary school, in sixth grade. I'm also still in touch with my kindergarten teacher. She just sent me a happy birthday message.

'She was my last year of school' is ungrammatical; correct phrasing is 'in my final year of primary school' or 'in my last year of primary school'. 'My 6th grade of primary school' should be 'sixth grade' or 'grade six'. 'I'm also keep in touch' needs auxiliary: 'I'm also still in touch' or 'I also keep in touch'. 'She just sent me happy birthday message' needs an article: 'a happy birthday message'. Errors include tense and word choice — primary ID 6 (present tense issue) and article error ID 22; choose 6.

× All of my favorite teachers listen to students voice and don't umm envy 2 students voice. They can listen and they try to understand what students perspective and what they think. So.

✓ All of my favorite teachers listen to students' voices and don't ignore students' voices. They can listen and they try to understand students' perspectives and what they think.

Plural possessive is required: 'students' voices' and 'students' perspectives'. 'Don't envy students voice' is incorrect; likely intended 'don't ignore students' voices'. Also 'what students perspective' is missing the possessive and plural: 'students' perspectives'. These are plural/possessive and word-choice errors (primary ID 1: singular and plural issue).

× Yeah, I prefer my primary school teacher because, well, to be honest, it is very hard to compare my high school teacher in primary school teachers because those school are different in in different countries.

✓ Yeah, I prefer my primary school teachers because, to be honest, it is very hard to compare my high school teachers and primary school teachers because those schools are in different countries.

Use plural 'teachers' when speaking generally. 'Compare my high school teacher in primary school teachers' is wrong word order; should be 'compare my high school teachers and primary school teachers'. 'Those school are different in in different countries' needs plural 'schools' and remove duplicate 'in': 'those schools are in different countries'. These are plural and sentence structure errors (primary ID 1).