教师— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be direct and natural. Give a clear topic sentence, then briefly explain why without grammatical errors and avoid saying 'bias' incorrectly. Use one or two supporting details with a linking word. Keep it under 5 sentences.

示例: I don't have a single favorite teacher because I try to appreciate all my teachers. For example, each teacher has helped me in different ways — some with subject knowledge and others with personal support.

建议: Organize the answer: start with a clear statement, then give brief supporting details using linking words. Correct grammar and vocabulary (e.g., 'I am studying' not 'that does my course', 'bachelor of physical education'). Keep sentences concise and natural.

示例: Yes, I want to be a teacher in the future. I am currently studying for a Bachelor of Physical Education, and I enjoy teaching because I love working with children and helping them stay active.

建议: Start with a clear topic sentence naming the remembered teacher, then give specific details about why you remember them. Use linking words to connect ideas and correct tense and word choice (e.g., 'when I was in first grade', 'her teaching was excellent').

示例: Yes, I still remember my first-grade teacher. When I was in first grade she made learning fun and patient, and that made a strong impression on me because she helped me gain confidence.

建议: Give a direct answer and a clear, grammatical reason. Use linking words like 'because' correctly and avoid unclear phrases. If possible, offer a brief extra detail about how you would contact them or why not.

示例: No, I'm not in touch with them because they are busy teaching other students. I would like to contact them someday, but I don't have their current contact details.

建议: Answer directly about how the teacher helped you (methods, encouragement, explanations). Use correct grammar and specific details: mention teaching methods, examples of support, and a linking word to connect ideas.

示例: My favorite teacher helped me by explaining difficult math topics step by step and giving extra practice problems. Because of her clear explanations and patience, I began to enjoy and understand mathematics more.

建议: Give a clear direct response, then briefly explain with specific reasons. Use linking words like 'because' and correct phrasing instead of awkward fragments. Keep it concise.

示例: I love them all and I wouldn't choose between them because each teacher helped me in different ways. For instance, primary teachers built my basics while high school teachers prepared me for exams.

× I don't have a favorite teacher because I am not a bias.

✓ I don't have a favorite teacher because I am not biased.

The student used the noun 'bias' incorrectly where the adjective 'biased' is required to describe a person. Use 'biased' to indicate having prejudice. Suggestion: use adjectives to describe states (I am biased/unbiased).

× Yes, I want to be a teacher and that does my course now in college and my course is beeped bachelor of physical education and I love teaching and I love kids so much.

✓ Yes, I want to be a teacher and I am taking a course now in college; my course is a Bachelor of Physical Education. I love teaching and I love kids very much.

Multiple tense and word-choice issues: 'does my course now' is ungrammatical — the present continuous 'I am taking a course' fits. 'beeped' is incorrect word; the intended phrase is 'a Bachelor of Physical Education' (article and noun capitalization). 'so much' is informal; 'very much' is clearer. Suggestion: use correct continuous tense for ongoing actions and correct noun phrases with articles.

× I am grade 12 now and I still remember that day I was daycare like first, first grading or first grade and that was my favorite teacher and her teaching is so much.

✓ I am in grade 12 now and I still remember the day when I was in daycare or in first grade; that teacher was my favorite and her teaching helped me a lot.

Problems: missing preposition 'in' for grade level, unclear phrase 'that day I was daycare like first, first grading or first grade' needs restructuring to convey intended meaning. 'Her teaching is so much' is ungrammatical; use 'helped me a lot' or 'was very effective.' Suggestion: add necessary prepositions and restructure for clarity, use past tense for past events.

× No, because my primary teachers is still busy of teaching other kids who want to learn any that I want to learn before.

✓ No, because my primary teachers are still busy teaching other kids who want to learn what I wanted to learn before.

Subject-verb agreement: 'teachers' is plural so the verb must be 'are' not 'is.' Also 'busy of teaching' is incorrect; use 'busy teaching.' The clause 'any that I want to learn before' is unclear; use 'what I wanted to learn before' to indicate past desire. Suggestion: match verb form to subject number and use correct verb patterns (busy + -ing).

× I don't know why but my favorite teacher that he teach me is math mathematics because math is the hardest subject. And I love the subject.

✓ I don't know why, but my favorite teacher who taught me math taught me mathematics because math is the hardest subject, and I love the subject.

Pronoun and clause errors: 'that he teach me' mixes relative pronoun and subject pronoun incorrectly and uses wrong tense. Use 'who taught me' for a teacher (relative clause) and past tense 'taught' because the teaching occurred in the past. Also 'math mathematics' is redundant; use 'math' or 'mathematics.' Suggestion: use 'who' for people in relative clauses and match tense appropriately.

× I love them all. I don't want to choose because all of them teach me while. Teachers studying for me.

✓ I love them all. I don't want to choose because they all taught me and supported my studies.

Fragment and unclear phrases: 'all of them teach me while. Teachers studying for me.' contains a sentence fragment and mixed tenses. Use a single coherent sentence: 'they all taught me and supported my studies.' Suggestion: avoid sentence fragments, ensure verbs and tense are consistent and meaning is clear.