教师— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct tense and prepositions, and give one specific example of what made the teacher memorable. Avoid filler words like 'umm'. Use linking words when adding details.

示例: Yes. My favorite teacher at university teaches advertising and promotion. His engaging teaching style and practical assignments inspired me to choose advertising as a career. For example, he had us create a real ad campaign that helped me understand the industry and gain confidence.

建议: Give a direct topic sentence, then one or two clear reasons with correct grammar and linking words. Avoid repeating 'umm' and unclear phrasing like 'their what they will do'. Use vocabulary like 'role' or 'responsibility'.

示例: No, I don't want to be a teacher. Although teaching is important, the role requires not only delivering knowledge but also shaping students' manners and responsibilities, which I don't feel suited for.

建议: Organize answer: topic sentence, specific example, and result. Correct tenses and collocations (e.g. 'wanted to give up', 'worked harder than me', 'I got a good result'). Use linking words like 'because' or 'as a result'.

示例: Yes. My secondary school Chinese teacher encouraged me when I wanted to give up. She believed I was talented and worked with me regularly, so as a result I improved and got a good score in the final exam.

建议: Be clearer and more concise. Fix grammar ('primary school teachers', 'we don't talk much', 'my primary school is next to my home'). Provide one clear example of contact and use linking words like 'however' or 'sometimes'.

示例: Yes, I still keep in touch with my primary school teacher. We don't speak often, but because my old school is next to my home, we sometimes greet each other in the mornings, and she often remembers and celebrates my birthday.

建议: Start with a clear topic sentence stating how the teacher helped you, then give specific examples and correct phrasing ('low self-esteem', 'encouraged me', 'study late into the night'). Avoid unnatural quoted speech unless necessary.

示例: My favourite teacher boosted my confidence when I had low self-esteem. She encouraged me, worked alongside me, and often stayed up late to help me prepare for exams, which improved my performance.

建议: Make a clear comparison: state your opinion directly, give one or two specific reasons using correct grammar ('in my opinion', 'high school teachers helped me choose a career path'). Avoid unclear phrases like 'they are so young'.

示例: In my opinion, I prefer my high school teachers. They offered more focused guidance and helped me discover my career path, while primary school teachers were more nurturing but less career-oriented.

× Yes, I have a favorite teacher in at my university umm his subject is advertising and promotion.

✓ Yes, I have a favorite teacher at my university; his subject is advertising and promotion.

Use of prepositions: 'in at' is incorrect because only one preposition is needed. Use 'at my university' to indicate affiliation. Also separate clauses with a semicolon or period for clarity.

× So it become it became my career path.

✓ So it became my career path.

Redundant verbs: both 'become' and 'became' are used together. Choose the correct past tense 'became' to match the context.

× It is because that his teaching method is so interesting and he really having a heart to teach us.

✓ It is because his teaching method is so interesting and he really has a heart for teaching us.

Conjunction/structure error and verb form: 'because that' is unnecessary; use 'because' alone. 'Having a heart to teach us' is awkward; use 'has a heart for teaching us' and correct verb 'has' for third person singular.

× Umm, my answer is absolutely no.

✓ Umm, my answer is absolutely no.

Sentence is grammatically acceptable in tense, but consider 'absolutely not' as more natural. No correction required per list, so keep original.

× It is because they're a teacher.

✓ It is because they are a teacher.

Contraction 'they're' is acceptable but ambiguous; expand to 'they are' for clarity. 'They' as singular generic is acceptable but ensure agreement in following verbs.

× Umm instead of teaching students knowledge, also a teacher have to teach a student with their manner, their responsibility and also their what they will do, their characteristic.

✓ Instead of only teaching students knowledge, a teacher also has to teach students manners, responsibility, what they will do, and their character.

Subject-verb agreement: 'a teacher have' should be 'a teacher has'. Pronoun and plural consistency: use 'students' consistently instead of mixing singular/plural and use correct nouns 'manners' and 'character'.

× Yes, I remember a teacher in my secondary school, she taught me Chinese in my secondary school.

✓ Yes, I remember a teacher from my secondary school; she taught me Chinese there.

Preposition and repetition: 'in my secondary school' repeated; use 'from my secondary school' to indicate association and 'there' to avoid repetition.

× I'm so lazy and wanna give up my DSC but she always encouraged me and think that I'm talented in Chinese.

✓ I was so lazy and wanted to give up my DSC, but she always encouraged me and thought that I was talented in Chinese.

Tense consistency: the student refers to past events, so use past tense verbs 'was', 'wanted', 'encouraged', 'thought' not present. Also use 'wanted' instead of informal 'wanna'.

× So she's more work harder than me and finally I get a good result in my day as the exam.

✓ So she worked harder than me, and finally I got a good result in my exams.

Pronoun/verb form and tense: 'she's more work harder' is incorrect; use past 'she worked harder'. Use past 'I got'. Pluralize 'exam' to 'exams' or use 'that exam' depending on meaning.

× Yes, I'm still in touch with my primaries school teachers.

✓ Yes, I'm still in touch with my primary school teachers.

Incorrect adjective form: 'primaries' is incorrect; use 'primary' as the adjective describing the school.

× Uh, we don't communicate and talk so much, but my secondary, my primary school is just next to my home.

✓ We don't communicate or talk much, but my primary school is just next to my home.

Preposition/conjunction and redundancy: use 'or' after 'communicate' and remove unnecessary 'secondary'. 'So much' -> 'much'. Also 'my primary school' not 'my secondary, my primary school'.

× So sometimes we will greet at the morning or when I'm off off work.

✓ So sometimes we greet in the morning or when I'm off work.

Incorrect preposition and repetition: use 'in the morning' not 'at the morning', and remove duplicated 'off'. Present simple 'greet' is fine for habitual actions.

× And she will also celebrate my birthday as.

✓ And she also celebrates my birthday.

Awkward ending 'as' is unnecessary. Use present simple 'celebrates' for habitual action.

× I think I am a student with low esteem and my teachers, my favorite teachers, always encourage me that you can do it, you can do it very well.

✓ I think I was a student with low self-esteem, and my favorite teachers always encouraged me, saying 'you can do it, you can do it very well.'

Pronoun and tense: 'low esteem' should be 'low self-esteem'. Tense consistency: past 'was' and 'encouraged' for past events. Quotation usage preserved conceptually.

× So let's get work, let's work hard together.

✓ So let's get to work; let's work hard together.

Verb phrase: 'get work' is incorrect; correct idiom is 'get to work' meaning begin working.

× And they always study with me till the sunrise.

✓ And they always studied with me until sunrise.

Tense consistency: if referring to past events, use past 'studied' and 'until' rather than 'till the sunrise' which is awkward.

× Do you like your primary school teachers more than your high school teachers?

✓ Do you like your primary school teachers more than your high school teachers?

Question is correct; no grammatical error from the provided list, so no change needed.

× Actually I think most of the people will think that primary school teachers are better than high school teachers as they are so young and teachers treat them so good.

✓ Actually, most people think that primary school teachers are better than high school teachers because the students are younger and teachers treat them so well.

Conjunction and word choice: use 'because' instead of 'as' for clarity. 'They are so young' unclear—replace with 'the students are younger'. 'Treat them so good' should be 'treat them so well' (adverb rather than adjective).

× By in my own opinion I think that my high school teacher is great is better.

✓ In my opinion, my high school teachers are better.

Preposition phrase 'By in my own opinion' incorrect—use 'In my opinion'. Also fix noun number and remove duplicated 'is'.

× It is because they are really teaching and pointing me out my career path.

✓ It is because they really taught me and pointed out my career path.

Tense and verb usage: if referring to past influence, use past tense 'taught' and 'pointed out'. 'Pointing me out my career path' is incorrect structure; use 'pointed out my career path' or 'pointed me toward my career path'.