教师— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Make the response more concise, correct small grammar issues, and add one specific example of what the teacher did to help students. Use a clear topic sentence, one linking phrase, and keep to 3–4 sentences. Avoid repetition (e.g., 'I do have' → 'Yes').

示例: Yes. My favorite teacher was my college accounting professor who made lessons clear and engaging. For example, he held weekly review sessions and gave one-on-one feedback so every student understood difficult topics. Because of his patience, I improved my grades and confidence in accounting.

建议: Avoid informal shortcuts (like '1') and combine ideas into a clear, well-structured answer. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give 1–2 concise reasons with linking words (e.g., 'because'/'so').

示例: No, I don't plan to become a teacher because I lack the patience needed for daily instruction. Also, I prefer work that involves independent tasks rather than the interpersonal demands of teaching.

建议: Be specific about one memorable teacher and give a concrete example of life lessons they taught. Use linking words (e.g., 'for instance', 'for example') to connect the topic sentence and details.

示例: Yes, I especially remember one college mentor who taught me more than academics. For example, he emphasized time management and integrity, which helped me balance study and work during my degree.

建议: Clarify the intended meaning (student seems confused between 'primary school teachers' and 'professors') and answer directly. Use a clear topic sentence and give a brief reason. Avoid making broad ethical claims without explanation.

示例: No, I'm not in contact with my primary school teachers. I believe it's more appropriate to keep a professional boundary after school, so we only reconnect occasionally at reunions.

建议: Tighten the answer: begin with a clear topic sentence, then give two specific ways he helped you using linking words (e.g., 'for example', 'also'). Avoid repetitive phrasing and minor grammar issues.

示例: My favorite teacher helped me academically and personally. For example, he explained difficult accounting concepts clearly and also emphasized personal accountability, teaching us to reconcile figures carefully and act with integrity in our work.

建议: Answer directly and avoid lengthy hedging. Use one linking phrase to give a concise reason and include one specific example of a moral lesson or support they offered.

示例: I prefer my high school teachers because they guided me through adolescence and taught important values. For instance, one teacher helped me develop discipline by setting clear expectations and giving constructive feedback, which still influences me today.

× He taught accounting and I was one of his students who greatly appreciate his efforts on trying to reach every student.

✓ He taught accounting and I was one of his students who greatly appreciated his efforts in trying to reach every student.

The relative clause 'who greatly appreciate' refers to the past context 'I was one of his students', so the verb should be in the past form 'appreciated' (past participle used as simple past here). Use 'appreciated' to maintain tense consistency with 'was' and 'taught'. Also use 'efforts in trying' (preposition 'in') for idiomatic phrasing.

× No, it's never been my dream to become a teacher.

✓ No, it has never been my dream to become a teacher.

'It's' is a contraction of 'it is' or 'it has'. Here the intended perfect meaning requires 'it has never been', not 'it is never been'. Use the correct auxiliary 'has' for present perfect.

× I don't think I have the calling to be 1.

✓ I don't think I have the calling to be one.

The digit '1' is inappropriate; spell out or use the word 'one'. No -ing change is needed; this correction addresses the content error rather than a grammatical form, but it preserves the sentence structure.

× I unfortunately have very little patience when it comes to teaching, and I don't think I have the capacity to pass on knowledge to someone who I don't know very well.

✓ I unfortunately have very little patience when it comes to teaching, and I don't think I have the capacity to pass on knowledge to someone whom I don't know very well.

In formal English, the object of a preposition should use the objective pronoun 'whom' rather than 'who'. 'Someone whom I don't know' is correct because 'whom' is the object of 'know'.

× Yes, I remember most of my teachers that I have in college.

✓ Yes, I remember most of my teachers that I had in college.

The sentence refers to past college experience, so the verb should be past 'had' rather than present 'have' to maintain tense consistency with 'remember'. Use past tense when talking about past enrolment.

× I remember them as a mentor that taught me not just academics, but also the things in life that I can use moving forward and how to become a better person.

✓ I remember them as mentors who taught me not just academics, but also life lessons that I can use moving forward and how to become a better person.

'Them' is plural, so the noun following should be plural 'mentors' and the relative pronoun should be 'who'. Also 'the things in life' is better expressed as 'life lessons' for clarity and idiomatic usage.

× Primary school teachers know I don't keep contact with my professors.

✓ Primary school teachers know that I don't keep in contact with my teachers.

'Keep contact with' is usually 'keep in contact with'. Also 'professors' is inappropriate for primary school context; use 'teachers'. Add conjunction 'that' for clarity. The original mixed levels caused a semantic/pronoun mismatch.

× I don't think it's ethical for them to keep contacting students after their term or after their semester.

✓ I don't think it's ethical for them to keep contacting students after their term or after their semester ends.

Add 'ends' to complete the time clause and make the sentence grammatical. Alternatively, omit 'after' and say 'at the end of their term/semester'. The original sentence left the time clause incomplete.

× Like I said, my favorite teacher when I was in college, he taught accountancy.

✓ Like I said, my favorite teacher when I was in college taught accountancy.

Avoid the redundant subject pronoun 'he' after the noun phrase; the clause 'my favorite teacher when I was in college' already serves as subject. Removing 'he' corrects the sentence structure.

× But not only that, he also lectures us more than academics.

✓ But not only that, he also lectured us about more than academics.

Maintain past tense 'lectured' to match earlier past context. Use 'about more than academics' for clearer idiom; 'lectures us more than academics' is ungrammatical. Alternatively, 'he taught us more than just academics.' would be even better.

× He taught us how to become better person, how to be accountable for the things we do.

✓ He taught us how to become better people and how to be accountable for the things we do.

'Person' should be plural 'people' to agree with plural subject 'us'. Also combine clauses with 'and' for smoother structure.

× And that's very important in accountancy, to reconcile everything and to balance everything with integrity.

✓ And that's very important in accountancy: to reconcile everything and to balance everything with integrity.

Use a colon or restructure sentence for clarity. Grammatically the original is acceptable, but punctuation improves clarity; no major tense/pronoun errors here.

× I don't like comparing, but for the sake of this question I would say I prefer my high school teachers.

✓ I don't like comparing, but for the sake of this question I would say I prefer my high school teachers.

Sentence is grammatically acceptable; no change required. Included here to indicate no error per list.

× They are the ones who watch me through puberty and instilled knowledge to me, not just in terms of academe but also moral grounds, moral standards, and principles that I still carry on with me today.

✓ They are the ones who watched me through puberty and instilled knowledge in me, not just in terms of academics but also moral standards and principles that I still carry with me today.

Maintain past tense 'watched' and 'instilled' to match past timeframe. Use 'instilled in me' (correct preposition). Replace 'academe' with 'academics' and 'moral grounds' with 'moral standards'. Use 'carry with me' rather than 'carry on with me'.