教师— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid filler sounds (umm) and repetition.

示例: Yes. My favourite teacher was my elementary literature teacher because she was my first school mentor and helped me develop a love of reading. For example, she recommended stories that matched my interests and gave patient feedback, which made learning enjoyable.

建议: Give a clearer topic sentence and organize reasons with linking words. Fix grammar (singular/plural, verb forms) and avoid fragmented phrases. Limit to 2–4 sentences with specific examples of how you'd inspire others.

示例: Yes, I would like to be a teacher because I enjoy inspiring students and broadening their horizons. For instance, I would use interactive lessons and personal stories to make subjects relevant, so students feel motivated and confident.

建议: Be careful with tense and sentence flow. Start with a topic sentence, then add a concise, specific anecdote using linking words (for example, because, so). Avoid fragments like “Very thoughtful.”

示例: Yes. I clearly remember my university semantics teacher because she made the class welcoming. For example, when I mispronounced a word she calmly explained it was a French pronunciation, which saved me embarrassment and showed her kindness.

建议: Organize answer into a clear topic sentence and two supporting points. Correct grammar (word order, pronouns) and remove trailing fragments. Use linking words like “because” and “also.”

示例: Yes, I still keep in touch with my elementary literature teacher because she lives nearby and we often run into each other when I visit home. Also, she has become a close friend who gives me advice and support.

建议: Make your main point clear and give a specific example of the teaching method and outcome. Avoid vague phrases (“you know,” “changing my set”). Use linking words and correct collocations (e.g., “inspire people,” “useful for my career”).

示例: She taught in an engaging way that made topics interesting and accessible. For example, she used role-plays and vivid examples to spark curiosity, which improved my confidence in presenting and later helped in my university presentations.

建议: Answer directly with a clear reason, use correct grammar and avoid repetition/fillers. Provide one concrete contrast (e.g., closeness vs. formality) and link the idea using words like ‘because’ or ‘whereas’.

示例: Yes, I prefer my primary school teachers because they were friendlier and more supportive, whereas my high school teachers were more formal and focused mainly on exams. As a result, I formed closer relationships with my elementary teachers.

× I think part of the reason she is my favorite teacher because it was my first schooling experience and I and she helped me a lot.

✓ I think part of the reason she is my favorite teacher is that it was my first schooling experience and she and I helped each other a lot.

Original has plural/singular word order and pronoun order issues: 'I and she' is unnatural in English and 'because it was' after 'reason' needs 'is that' to connect the clause. Use 'she and I' (subject pronouns) and 'helped each other' to show mutual assistance. Also replace 'because' with 'is that' to form a correct noun clause following 'reason'.

× I always want to be a teacher because I love the fact that teachers are the person who can inspire other and teach others.

✓ I have always wanted to be a teacher because I love the fact that teachers are the people who can inspire others and teach them.

Subject-verb agreement: 'I always want' should be 'I have always wanted' to express a continuing desire. 'Teachers are the person' is singular mismatch; use 'people'. 'Inspire other' missing plural/object form; use 'inspire others'. Also 'teach others' better as 'teach them' to avoid repetition.

× Open the horizon.

✓ They open people's horizons.

Original is a fragment and imperative unrelated to context. The intended meaning is that teachers 'open horizons' for students. Use a full clause with subject and object agreement: 'They open people's horizons' or 'They open my horizons' depending on context.

× I really love the act that have like positive impact on many people.

✓ I really love the fact that they have a positive impact on many people.

Use 'fact' rather than 'act' to refer to a general truth. 'Have like' is colloquial and incorrect here; use 'have a positive impact'. Ensure subject 'they' (teachers) matches the verb 'have'.

× I remember really clearly my university teacher because she teach me semantics and there was a time when I pronounced the word wrong and she said that oh, you pronounce it in the French way, which make me not embarrassed in front of the class.

✓ I remember my university teacher very clearly because she taught me semantics. There was a time when I pronounced a word incorrectly and she said, 'Oh, you pronounced it the French way,' which prevented me from feeling embarrassed in front of the class.

Verb tense and agreement: 'she teach me' should be past 'she taught me' because referring to past events. 'Pronounced the word wrong' should be 'pronounced a word incorrectly' (adverb). 'You pronounce' inside reported speech needs past 'you pronounced' if quoting, and 'which make me not embarrassed' should be 'which prevented me from feeling embarrassed' to use correct tense and collocation.

× Yes, I do keep in touch with my elementary literature teacher because the first thing is she lives near me, so whenever I go home from university, often come across with her.

✓ Yes, I keep in touch with my elementary literature teacher because she lives near me, so whenever I go home from university I often come across her.

Redundant 'do' not necessary for simple present. 'Come across with her' incorrectly uses preposition 'with'; correct is 'come across her' or better 'run into her'. Also remove extraneous phrases like 'the first thing is' to make sentence natural.

× And the second thing is she is a very close friend of mine. We share with her a lot of things and she helped with me a lot.

✓ She is also a very close friend of mine. We share a lot with each other and she has helped me a lot.

'We share with her a lot of things' misuses pronouns; use reciprocal 'with each other' or 'we share a lot'. 'She helped with me a lot' incorrect preposition and tense: use 'she has helped me a lot' to indicate ongoing effect.

× So yeah, we're like.

✓ So yeah, we're close.

Original is an incomplete fragment 'we're like' lacking complement. Provide a complete predicate such as 'we're close' to convey intended meaning.

× My favorite teacher has a very impressive way of teaching a student, conveying knowledge.

✓ My favorite teacher has a very impressive way of teaching students and conveying knowledge.

Use plural 'students' for general statement. Use conjunction 'and' rather than comma to link parallel gerunds 'teaching' and 'conveying'.

× So the biggest lesson I learned from her was about, you know, changing my set, how to inspire people, the way to make people interested in the topic that I find very helpful and for even my career.

✓ The biggest lessons I learned from her were how to change my mindset, how to inspire people, and how to make people interested in a topic; I find these lessons very helpful for my career.

Original is ungrammatical and lists items awkwardly. 'Changing my set' likely means 'changing my mindset'. Use plural 'lessons' and parallel structure 'how to...' for each item. Clarify final clause: 'very helpful for my career.'

× Yes, I believe so because when I was at high school the I I was more focused on the study.

✓ Yes, I believe so because when I was in high school I was more focused on studying.

Use preposition 'in' with 'high school' not 'at'. Remove duplicate 'the I I'. 'Focused on the study' is unnatural; use 'focused on studying' or 'focused on my studies'.

× So I don't really have many close relationship with the teachers as much.

✓ So I didn't really have as many close relationships with my teachers.

Tense should match past context: use 'didn't really have'. 'Many close relationship' needs plural 'relationships'. Phrase 'as much' misplaced; rephrase as 'as many ... as' or 'as many close relationships with my teachers'.

× Such as, umm, my with my elementary school teachers.

✓ For example, my elementary school teachers did.

Fragment and pronoun disorder 'my with my' incorrect. Provide a complete clause matching context: 'For example, my elementary school teachers did' (meaning they were closer).

× So yeah, I like them more.

✓ So yeah, I like them more.

This sentence is acceptable as is; no grammatical correction needed.