教师— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more natural and precise: start with a clear topic sentence, use correct grammar (e.g. 'taught me mathematics'), avoid redundancy, and limit length to 3–4 sentences. Add one specific detail about what made his explanations clear (example method or example topic) using a linking word (e.g. 'for example' or 'because').

示例: My favorite teacher was my high school math teacher. He taught me mathematics clearly, for example by using real-life problems to explain algebra. Because he was patient and used simple steps, I understood difficult topics much better.

建议: Make your response more organized: begin with a direct statement about your current goal, then briefly explain why. Fix grammar (e.g. 'mathematics education', 'I want to teach students'). Use linking words like 'however' or 'because' to connect ideas and keep it within 2–3 sentences.

示例: I don't have a precise career plan yet, but I am majoring in mathematics education. Because I enjoy helping others understand math, becoming a teacher is one of my possible goals.

建议: Clarify and correct grammar, be concise and specific about how you keep in touch. Use correct pronouns and tense (e.g. 'him' -> 'him', remove extra phrases). Use linking words ('for example', 'so') appropriately. Limit to 2–3 sentences and give a concrete frequency or method of contact.

示例: Yes, I still remember my high school math teacher. For example, I sometimes call him or message him while he is in South Korea, so we keep in touch every few months.

建议: Avoid repetition and incomplete sentences. Answer directly, correct grammar ('almost a year ago'), and give one clear reason why contact is less frequent. Keep it to 2–3 sentences and finish your thought instead of trailing off.

示例: I don't keep in regular contact with my primary school teachers. I did speak to one of them about a year ago, but it is difficult because we live far apart and both of us are busy with work.

建议: Be specific about how he helped: use precise verbs ('taught', 'explained', 'encouraged'), avoid vague adjectives like 'touching', and give an example of support (e.g. extra lessons or advice). Use linking words ('for example', 'because') and keep to 2–3 sentences.

示例: He helped me by explaining difficult concepts clearly and giving extra coaching before exams. For example, he gave me extra practice problems and encouraged me to apply to good universities, which improved my confidence and grades.

建议: Answer directly and compare briefly if asked; correct grammar ('were helpful', 'I love both'). Use a linking phrase ('but' or 'however') to show comparison and provide one specific reason for your view. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

示例: I like both my primary and high school teachers equally because they each helped me in different ways. For example, my primary teachers built my basic study habits, while my high school teachers helped me prepare for university.

× Yes, I have one favorite teacher.

✓ Yes, I have a favorite teacher.

Using 'one favorite teacher' is grammatically acceptable but unnatural here; 'a favorite teacher' is more idiomatic. Use the indefinite article 'a' with singular countable nouns when not emphasizing the number.

× The teacher is my high school teacher and he touched mathematics to me.

✓ The teacher was my high school teacher and he taught me mathematics.

The verb 'touched' is incorrect; the correct verb for instructing is 'teach' in past tense 'taught'. Also, the phrase 'to me' after 'taught' is fine but word order 'taught me mathematics' is more natural.

× He was really kind and his explanation is so easy to understand.

✓ He was really kind and his explanations were easy to understand.

Mixes past and present: 'was' indicates past, so follow with past 'were'. Also use plural 'explanations' or 'his explanation was easy' for agreement. 'So' is conversational; remove for formality.

× To be honest I don't have precise future dream right now, but my major is mathematic education, so once I want to teach student that's one of my dream.

✓ To be honest, I don't have a precise future dream right now, but my major is mathematics education, so if I want to teach students, that would be one of my dreams.

Multiple issues: missing articles and plurals ('a precise future dream', 'mathematics education', 'students', 'one of my dreams'). 'Once' is incorrect in this context; use 'if' or 'when'. Tense/modal coherence: use conditional 'would be'. Added commas for clarity.

× Of course, as I mentioned before, I remember my high school mathematics teachers now and sometimes I contact to him like there is a teacher stay in South Korea.

✓ Of course, as I mentioned before, I remember my high school mathematics teacher now and sometimes I contact him because he lives in South Korea.

Pronoun and noun agreement: 'teachers' vs 'him' mismatch — use singular 'teacher' to match 'him'. Remove 'to' after 'contact' (contact someone, not contact to someone). 'Like there is a teacher stay in South Korea' is ungrammatical; use 'because he lives in South Korea.'

× So at the in the day I usually contact and call to him.

✓ So during the day I usually contact and call him.

Preposition errors: 'at the in the day' is incorrect; use 'during the day' or 'in the daytime'. Also remove 'to' after 'call' ('call him', not 'call to him').

× Yes, I mentioned before I sometimes contact and call to him, but nowadays it is really hard to contact regularly and so many times.

✓ Yes, I mentioned before that I sometimes contact and call him, but nowadays it is really hard to contact him regularly and so often.

Add 'that' for clarity. Remove 'to' after 'call'. 'So many times' is awkward; use 'so often'. Add 'him' after 'contact' for a clear object.

× So in my memory my last contact was almost one years ago.

✓ So in my memory my last contact was almost one year ago.

Use singular 'one year' not 'one years'.

× So after this conversation and.

✓ So that was my last contact.

Fragment: 'So after this conversation and.' is incomplete. Provide a complete clause that conveys the intended meaning, e.g., 'So that was my last contact.'

× Of course, he touched mathematic knowledge really well.

✓ Of course, he taught mathematical knowledge very well.

'Touched' is wrong verb; use 'taught'. 'Mathematic' should be 'mathematical' or 'mathematics'. 'Really well' is acceptable but 'very well' is more formal.

× Moreover, he was really kind, so he encouraged me a lot because I was worried about my university and my grade.

✓ Moreover, he was really kind, so he encouraged me a lot because I was worried about university and my grades.

Minor plural/detail adjustments: 'university' can be used without 'my' in general, but 'my university' is acceptable; 'my grade' likely refers to multiple grades—use 'grades'. Tense is consistent in past.

× So he was really touching.

✓ So he was very supportive.

'Touching' describes something emotionally moving, not a teacher's supportive behavior. Use 'supportive' or 'encouraging' to convey the intended meaning.

× I love both primary school teachers and high school teachers because they are all of my teachers and all of them was helpful and meaningful to me, so I believe that I can grow well because of them.

✓ I love both my primary school teachers and my high school teachers because they are all my teachers and all of them were helpful and meaningful to me, so I believe that I have grown well because of them.

Added possessive 'my' for clarity. Subject-verb agreement: 'all of them was' should be 'were'. Tense: use past 'were' and 'have grown' or 'have helped me grow' to reflect effect over time. 'Grow well' is awkward; 'have grown well' or 'have developed well' is better.