教师— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details with correct grammar and vocabulary. Use linking words (for example, 'because' or 'so') correctly and avoid repetition. Keep answers within 3–4 sentences.

示例: My favorite teacher is my English teacher because she helped me improve my vocabulary and grammar. For example, she used practical exercises and conversation practice to make new words easier to remember. Because of her, I feel more confident speaking English.

建议: Give a clear topic sentence and then support it with concise, specific reasons. Use correct grammar (e.g., 'harder' → 'very hard', 'I'm not decided' → 'I don't want to'). Avoid repeating the same idea. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

示例: No, I don't want to be a teacher. I think teaching is very demanding because you must manage large classes and work long hours, which would be stressful for me.

建议: Start with a direct answer and give specific, clear details. Correct grammar and word choice (e.g., 'their English' → 'her English'; unclear word 'vukas' should be replaced with a real term like 'pronunciation' or 'teaching style'). Use one linking sentence to explain why you remember her.

示例: Yes, I remember my grade 10–12 English teacher. She was from Egypt and I admired her clear pronunciation and lively teaching style, which made lessons interesting and easy to follow.

建议: Answer directly then give a brief, specific reason. Use correct tense and natural phrasing ('I graduated two weeks ago', 'I'm on vacation', 'I might contact them in a few months if I need help'). Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

示例: No, I'm not in touch with them at the moment because I graduated two weeks ago and I'm currently on vacation. I might contact some teachers in a few months if I need their advice.

建议: Give a clear topic sentence describing one or two concrete ways she helped, then support with specific examples. Correct grammar (e.g., 'vocab' → 'vocabulary', 'she taught me grammar' not 'no grammar'). Avoid repetition and keep sentences coherent with linking words ('for example', 'also').

示例: She helped me improve my speaking and daily vocabulary. For example, she gave speaking exercises and corrected my grammar and punctuation in writing, which made my English much clearer.

建议: Provide a clear comparison: state your preference, then give 1–2 specific reasons with correct grammar (e.g., 'were more skilled and more academic'). Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' and avoid repetition ('like to like').

示例: No, I prefer my high school teachers because they were more skilled and focused on academic subjects. They challenged me and offered guidance that helped me succeed.

× with the help of English teacher I will be going to learn more English language and more vocabulary and grammars.

✓ with the help of my English teacher I will learn more English and more vocabulary and grammar.

The phrase 'will be going to learn' mixes two future forms; choose 'will' or 'going to'. 'Will learn' is appropriate. Use 'my English teacher' (missing possessive article). 'English language' can be shortened to 'English'; 'vocabulary' is uncountable so do not pluralize 'grammars' — use 'grammar'.

× So it will be helping.

✓ So she will be helping me.

Pronoun 'it' is inappropriate for a person. Use 'she' for a female teacher and add the object 'me' to clarify who is helped. Also 'will be helping' is a future continuous but acceptable; you may use 'will help' for simplicity.

× It will be a helping and that.

✓ She will be helpful and supportive.

Original sentence is ungrammatical and vague. Replace with a clearer structure: 'She will be helpful and supportive.' This uses correct adjective forms and appropriate wording.

× I'm not decided to be a teacher because I'm thinking teacher job is more harder than everything because you should teach 20 to 30 students and you should teach 7 to 8 hours per day.

✓ I haven't decided to be a teacher because I think the teaching job is harder than many other jobs: you might teach 20 to 30 students and work 7 to 8 hours per day.

'I'm not decided' is incorrect; use 'I haven't decided' or 'I am not decided' is nonstandard. Use present simple 'I think' rather than 'I'm thinking' for opinions. 'Teacher job' should be 'the teaching job' or 'being a teacher'. 'More harder' is redundant; use 'harder'.

× So it would be a tough work and a hard work.

✓ So it would be tough and hard work.

'Work' as uncountable does not need 'a'. Using both 'tough' and 'hard' is repetitive; 'tough, hard work' or simply 'hard work' is better. Remove article 'a' before uncountable 'work'.

× Yes, often. I remember my grade 10 to 12 English teacher.

✓ Yes, often. I remember my grade 10 to 12 English teacher.

Sentence is mostly acceptable but 'grade 10 to 12' is slightly awkward; consider 'my grade 10 through 12 English teacher' or 'my grade 10–12 English teacher.' No grammatical change required under provided list.

× She was a woman from Egypt and their English was exciting, especially the vukas.

✓ She was a woman from Egypt and her English was engaging, especially the vocabulary.

Use 'her' to refer to a singular female, not 'their'. 'Exciting' is okay but 'engaging' suits language skills. 'Vukas' appears to be a mispronunciation—use 'vocabulary'.

× No, because I'm graduated before 2 weeks.

✓ No, because I graduated two weeks ago.

'I'm graduated' is incorrect; use simple past 'I graduated'. Use 'two weeks ago' instead of 'before 2 weeks'.

× Until now I'm not in touch with them.

✓ Until now I have not been in touch with them.

Use present perfect 'have not been' to describe a situation that started in the past and continues to the present. 'I'm not in touch' is possible but less accurate here.

× I'm not talking.

✓ I haven't been in contact with them.

'I'm not talking' is ambiguous and ungrammatical in this context. Use 'I haven't been in contact' or 'I am not in touch' to express lack of communication.

× So maybe after like after two to three months, if I need the help from there or if I have anything, I'll be taking their helps.

✓ Maybe after two to three months, if I need help or need anything, I'll contact them for help.

Avoid 'after like after' and redundant phrasing. 'I'll be taking their helps' is incorrect — 'help' is uncountable and 'contact them for help' is natural. Use simple future 'I'll contact'.

× And teaching me how to speak and teaching you more vocabs to use daily in daily life.

✓ She taught me how to speak and taught me more vocabulary to use in daily life.

Maintain consistent tense (past) since referring to past help. Use past tense 'taught'. 'Vocabs' is informal/incorrect—use 'vocabulary'. Avoid repeating 'daily'.

× And also she teach to use no grammar.

✓ She also taught me how to use grammar correctly.

Use past tense 'taught'. 'Teach to use no grammar' is ungrammatical and likely opposite of intended meaning; assume intention was that she taught grammar, so correct accordingly.

× And specially especially she she teaches me the punctuation in writing.

✓ She especially taught me punctuation in writing.

Remove duplicate words and use past tense 'taught'. 'Especially' used once. 'Punctuation in writing' is the correct object.

× No, my high school teachers was more skillful and more advanced than my primary teachers and more academic so I would like to like them more than my primary teacher because they helped me a lot in my life.

✓ No, my high school teachers were more skillful and more advanced than my primary school teachers and more academic, so I like them more because they helped me a lot in my life.

Use plural verb 'were' to agree with plural subject 'teachers'. Keep tense consistent: past 'helped' is correct for finished actions. Avoid repeating 'like' twice and clarify 'primary teachers' to 'primary school teachers'.