教师— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be clearer and more grammatical. Start with a direct topic sentence naming the teacher and why you like them, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and incorrect tense. Focus on natural phrases (e.g., “My favourite teacher is…”).

示例: My favourite teacher is Mr Harbhajan Singh because he has a great sense of humour. For example, he often tells light, appropriate jokes during class, which helps students relax and pay attention. As a result, lessons feel more enjoyable and everyone participates.

建议: Give a clear direct answer then support with specific, realistic reasons. Use correct modal and noun forms (e.g., ‘teachers are respected’, ‘the salary is good’). Limit to 3–4 sentences and use linking words like ‘because’ or ‘so’.

示例: Yes, I would like to be a teacher in the future because teachers are respected in my community and I enjoy helping others learn. Also, teaching offers a stable career and good opportunities to develop professionally. For these reasons, I plan to study education.

建议: Be specific about one or two memorable teachers and give concrete details (their name, what they did, one example). Use correct adjectives (e.g., ‘funny’ not ‘comedy’) and clearer sentence structure. Use linking words like ‘because’ and ‘for example’.

示例: Yes, I still remember my teacher Mr Prasad because he had a funny personality and made lessons enjoyable. For example, he used humorous stories to explain difficult grammar, which made it easy for us to remember. Because of him, I developed a positive attitude toward learning.

建议: Answer directly (yes/no) and then explain who you keep in touch with and how (by phone, social media). Avoid contradictions and use correct pronouns and verb forms. Keep it short and specific.

示例: Yes, I am still in touch with one of my primary school teachers, Mr Bhajan Singh. We occasionally message each other on WhatsApp about my studies and career advice, and he sometimes sends helpful articles or reminders.

建议: Give a clear, logically structured example of help using correct tense. Start with a topic sentence describing the general help, then give a specific incident with linking words like ‘for example’ or ‘once’. Avoid unnecessary details.

示例: My favourite teacher has helped me both academically and personally. For example, once my scooter ran out of fuel on the road, he walked to a nearby petrol station and brought fuel to me, which was about four kilometres away. That showed he cares about his students beyond the classroom.

建议: Give a direct comparison and specific reasons. Use correct comparative language (e.g., ‘I prefer my high school teachers because…’) and explain with concrete examples (teaching style, age, approachability). Keep it concise.

示例: I prefer my high school teachers because they are closer to my age and more approachable. For example, they explain things in a way I understand and encourage open discussion, which makes me feel comfortable asking questions.

× Its name is Harbhajan Singh.

✓ His name is Harbhajan Singh.

The pronoun 'Its' is used for objects or animals; for a person use the possessive pronoun 'his' (male). Use 'His' to correctly refer to the teacher's name.

× That is very excitement at comedy day.

✓ That was very exciting on Comedy Day.

'Excitement' is a noun; the sentence needs the adjective 'exciting' to describe 'that'. Also tense should match past event 'was' and the preposition 'on' is correct for days or events. Capitalize 'Comedy Day' as a proper noun.

× The teacher will teacher will speak jokes anytime or all class will laugh.

✓ The teacher will tell jokes anytime and the whole class will laugh.

Redundant 'teacher will' removed. Use 'tell' for telling jokes; 'all class' should be 'the whole class'. Maintain future tense 'will' for both actions. Also use 'and' to join clauses.

× To be very honest, I want to to be a teacher in the future because the teacher will value very high and their job is their salary is very high.

✓ To be very honest, I want to be a teacher in the future because teachers are highly valued and their salaries are high.

Removed duplicate 'to'. 'Teacher' should be plural 'teachers' when speaking generally. 'Will value very high' is incorrect; use passive or adjective 'are highly valued'. 'Their job is their salary is very high' is ungrammatical; simplify to 'their salaries are high'.

× So I would like to teacher in my future.

✓ So I would like to be a teacher in the future.

Missing 'to be' verb and 'teacher' needs an article or 'be a teacher'. 'In my future' is awkward; use 'in the future'.

× Yes, I have many teacher from Prasad that I still remember because they are very comedy and they are not serious anytime they do.

✓ Yes, I have many teachers from Prasad that I still remember because they are very funny and they are never serious.

'Many' requires plural noun 'teachers'. 'Comedy' is a noun; use adjective 'funny'. 'Not serious anytime they do' is awkward and ungrammatical; use 'never serious'.

× They got jokes anytime at anywhere.

✓ They tell jokes anytime and anywhere.

'Got jokes' is informal and nonstandard; use 'tell jokes'. 'Anytime at anywhere' is redundant; use 'anytime and anywhere'. Maintain present simple for habitual actions.

× Mr. Bhajan Singh that is very conscious to our regarding job.

✓ Mr. Bhajan Singh is very conscious about our jobs.

Remove 'that'. Use 'is' as the main verb. 'Conscious to' is wrong; use 'conscious about'. 'Our regarding job' is incorrect; use 'our jobs' or 'our job'.

× They are very serious and they get joke anytime.

✓ He is very serious and he tells jokes occasionally.

If referring to Mr. Bhajan Singh (singular), use 'he' not 'they'. 'Get joke anytime' is incorrect; 'tell jokes' or 'make jokes' is correct. 'Occasionally' better conveys occasional joking while maintaining seriousness.

× My favorite teacher helped me when my fuel get empty, the teacher will get the A fuel from petrol pump and give me in a 4 kilometer away from the petrol pump.

✓ My favorite teacher helped me when my fuel ran out; he got fuel from a petrol pump and gave it to me when I was about 4 kilometres away from the pump.

Use past tense 'ran out' for completed action. 'Will get' is incorrect; use past 'got'. 'The A fuel' is wrong; use 'fuel' or 'some fuel'. 'Give me in a 4 kilometer away' is ungrammatical; rephrase to 'gave it to me when I was about 4 kilometres away'.

× High school teachers because they are of my age.

✓ I prefer high school teachers because they are closer to my age.

Sentence fragment fixed by adding subject and verb 'I prefer'. 'Are of my age' is unnatural; use 'closer to my age'.

× That they feel me comfort and they they think are of my same as it is.

✓ They make me feel comfortable and they think similarly to me.

Replace 'feel me comfort' with 'make me feel comfortable'. Remove duplicate 'they'. 'Think are of my same as it is' is ungrammatical; use 'think similarly to me' or 'share my views'.