教师— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be concise, use correct pronouns, and organize into a clear topic sentence plus one specific supporting detail. Avoid repetition and grammatical errors. Use linking words like 'and' or 'also' correctly.

示例: Yes, I do. My favourite teacher is Madam Karma, who taught me English. She speaks very fluently and always explains difficult points clearly, using both spoken examples and written exercises.

建议: Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons. Reduce hesitations and avoid repeating the same idea. Use linking phrases like 'because' and 'also' to connect ideas.

示例: Yes, I do. I have wanted to be a teacher since primary school because teaching makes me happy and I enjoy helping others learn. Also, I feel teaching matches my main life goal of supporting people’s development.

建议: Avoid repetition and give a specific memorable detail about the teacher (an example or incident). Use correct adjectives and sentence structure.

示例: Yes, I do. Madame Tandy Peter was my English teacher; she was very kind and generous. I remember her helping shy students read aloud, which made many of us more confident.

建议: Answer directly and use a full, grammatically correct sentence. If not in touch, briefly explain why or add a short detail.

示例: No, I am not in touch with my primary school teachers because I moved to a different city after school. However, I sometimes think about them and the lessons they taught me.

建议: Provide one clear, specific way the teacher helped you, and avoid confusing pronouns and repetitions. Use linking words like 'also' only once and give a concrete result.

示例: She helped me improve my English by correcting my pronunciation and giving extra practice exercises. She also encouraged me to work with classmates, which improved my communication skills.

建议: Give a clear comparison: state your preference, then give two specific reasons with linking words like 'because' and 'when'. Avoid filler words like 'like' and fix grammar.

示例: Yes, I prefer my primary school teachers because they were very patient and explained basic concepts clearly when we were young. In high school, teachers expected more independence, so they did not explain every detail as carefully.

× Her name is Madam Karma. He taught me English, uh, where she's very fluently in her English and if we are not able to understand understand, she always explains us with both speaking, writing and practical.

✓ Her name is Madam Karma. She taught me English; she is very fluent in English, and if we are not able to understand, she always explains things to us by speaking, writing, and practical demonstration.

Pronoun reference and gender: 'He' is incorrect because the teacher is female; use 'She'. Word choice and object pronoun: 'explains us' is incorrect; English uses 'explain something to someone', so use 'explains things to us'. Adverb/adjective form: 'very fluently in her English' is incorrect; use adjective 'fluent in English' to describe ability. 'Where' is unnecessary and incorrect in this context. Also remove repeated word 'understand'. Suggestions: use consistent pronouns, choose correct verb patterns (explain + object + to + person), use 'fluent in English', and avoid redundant words.

× Yes, I do want to become a teacher as it was my ambition when I was at primary school.

✓ Yes, I want to become a teacher; it has been my ambition since I was in primary school.

Tense consistency: The student mixes present desire with a past time expression using 'was'. Use present perfect 'has been' or present continuous idea when stating a long-standing ambition. Also 'since' or 'when I was in' is more natural. Suggestion: use 'has been my ambition since' to link past motivation to present desire.

× I want to become a teacher because, uh, when I teach someone, it makes me feel happy and when it Yeah, and, and my main motive in life is to teach someone.

✓ I want to become a teacher because teaching someone makes me feel happy, and my main goal in life is to teach others.

Redundancy and filler words: Remove fillers like 'uh', 'yeah' and repeated conjunctions. Word choice: 'motive' is understandable but 'goal' or 'aim' is more natural. Repetition of 'when' is unnecessary. Use concise structure: 'teaching someone makes me feel happy' and 'my main goal is to teach others'.

× Yes, I do. Her name is Madame Tandy Peter. She taught me English. Uh, she taught me English. And she's very kind and generous and well, well, old teacher known among elementary school.

✓ Yes. Her name is Madame Tandy Peter. She taught me English and is very kind and generous. She is a well-known former teacher at the elementary school.

Pronoun/repetition and word order: Remove repeated sentence 'she taught me English'. 'Old teacher' is ambiguous; use 'former teacher' for someone who previously taught. 'Known among elementary school' is incorrect preposition and noun phrase; use 'well-known at the elementary school' or 'a well-known former teacher in the elementary school'. Suggestions: avoid repetition and use correct noun phrases like 'former teacher' and 'well-known' with correct prepositions.

× No one not in touch with my primary school teacher.

✓ No, I am not in touch with my primary school teachers.

Pronoun and negative structure: 'No one not in touch' is ungrammatical. Use 'No, I am not in touch with...' or 'No, I'm not in touch with my primary school teachers.' Also 'teacher' vs 'teachers': context suggests plural. Suggestion: use subject + auxiliary + not + verb for negation ('I am not in touch').

× My favorite teacher who taught me English helped me help me to improve my English and she also beside teaching he also she beside teaching she also helped me to become a good relationship and to help others.

✓ My favorite teacher, who taught me English, helped me improve my English. Besides teaching, she also helped me build good relationships and encouraged me to help others.

Redundancy and pronoun confusion: Remove duplicate 'help me'. Incorrect pronouns 'he also she' are mixed; use 'she'. Word order: 'beside teaching' should be 'besides teaching'. Phrase 'become a good relationship' is incorrect; people form relationships, so use 'build good relationships'. Suggestion: split into two clear sentences and use correct connectors ('besides') and verbs ('helped me improve', 'helped me build').

× Yes I like my primary school teachers compared to my high school teachers because like when we were small a teachers or like be so kind to us and teach us every single thing we don't know and when we reach to high school and everything was not taught since we were older.

✓ Yes, I prefer my primary school teachers to my high school teachers because when we were younger the teachers were very kind to us and taught us many things we did not know; in high school, some things were not taught in the same way as we got older.

Comparative structure and article use: Use 'prefer A to B' rather than 'like A compared to B'. Grammar and word choice: 'when we were small a teachers or like be so kind' is ungrammatical—use 'when we were younger the teachers were very kind'. Tense consistency: 'we don't know' should be past 'we did not know' when referring to past. 'reach to high school' incorrect preposition—use 'reach high school' or 'when we reached high school'. 'everything was not taught since we were older' is unclear; rephrase to 'some things were not taught in the same way as we got older'. Suggestion: use 'prefer A to B', correct past tense, and clear clause connections.