教师— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and organize your answer: start with a clear topic sentence, add 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words, and avoid repetition. Use correct grammar (e.g., “an angel,” “a role model”) and limit to about 3–4 sentences for clarity.

示例: My favorite teacher was my high school English teacher. She helped me with both English and personal advice, for example guiding me through university applications and giving feedback on my essays. Because she was patient and very knowledgeable, she inspired me to study English more seriously.

建议: Provide a clear topic sentence, correct small grammar issues, and add one specific reason or example of what you enjoy about teaching. Use linking words like “because” or “for example” and keep it within 3–4 sentences.

示例: Yes, my dream is to be an English teacher, and I am currently interning teaching Grade 8. For example, I enjoy preparing lesson plans and seeing students improve because it is very rewarding and different from college classes.

建议: Start with a clear sentence naming the teacher, then give concise, specific memories with linking words. Correct phrasing (e.g., “role model,” “I remember her face, voice and accent”) and avoid fragmented sentences.

示例: Yes, I still remember my high school English teacher because she was my role model. I remember her face, calm voice and clear accent, and I often visit her when I have free time because her advice still helps me.

建议: Use correct grammar and concise structure: state directly whether you are still in touch, then give a brief reason using linking words. Avoid repetition and incorrect verb forms (e.g., “I didn't,” “I didn’t have”).

示例: No, unfortunately I'm not in touch with my primary school teachers because I was too young then and we never exchanged contact details. However, I still have fond memories of them.

建议: Avoid short, vague answers like “Everything.” Provide 2 specific ways she helped you, using clear linking words and correct grammar. Replace unclear phrases with concrete examples and keep it to 3–4 sentences.

示例: She helped me academically and personally. For example, when I got low marks in English she gave me extra exercises and suggested study strategies, and she also taught me to stay positive and set realistic goals for improvement.

建议: Answer directly and simply: state your preference, then give 1–2 clear reasons with linking words. Avoid confusing phrases and exaggeration. Correct unnatural expressions (e.g., “no comparison,” “she encouraged me to love English and keep learning”).

示例: I prefer my high school teachers because they had a greater influence on me. For instance, my English teacher encouraged me to love the subject and supported my long-term studies, which motivated me to continue learning.

× She was very nice, so generous and gentle.

✓ She was very nice, generous, and gentle.

This sentence uses commas and coordination; 'so' before 'generous' is unnecessary and inconsistent. Use parallel structure with commas and include Oxford comma for clarity. Also no grammatical error type from list exactly fits, so treated as adjective coordination and punctuation improvement.

× She totally was like a Angel for me and my model, my idol in my heart.

✓ She totally was like an angel to me, my role model and idol in my heart.

Incorrect article 'a' before a word beginning with a vowel sound: use 'an'. 'Like an angel' and 'to me' are more natural; 'role model' is the correct collocation. Also capitalize only where needed.

× So elegant and so knowledgeable.

✓ She was so elegant and so knowledgeable.

This fragment lacks a subject and verb. Add 'She was' to form a complete sentence that matches surrounding tense and subject.

× And actually I am teaching right now, although it's my internship, but I still, uh, teaching the grade 8 students the English.

✓ Actually, I am teaching right now; although it's my internship, I am still teaching grade 8 students English.

Missing auxiliary 'am' before 'teaching' in the second clause. Remove redundant 'the' before 'English' and before 'grade 8 students' in this context. Combine clauses for clarity and maintain present continuous tense.

× It's very interesting and it's totally new, different experience from the college.

✓ It's very interesting and totally a different experience from college.

Word order and article use are incorrect. Use 'a different experience' and omit 'the' before 'college' when speaking generally.

× I remembered her like her face, her teaching voice, her speaking and her accent very much.

✓ I remember her face, her teaching voice, her way of speaking, and her accent very clearly.

Use present tense 'remember' for a present recollection. 'Speaking' needs a noun phrase - 'way of speaking'. 'Very much' replaced by 'very clearly' for naturalness.

× I still miss her a lot. Until today.

✓ I still miss her a lot to this day.

'Until today' is awkward; 'to this day' is the idiomatic expression. Combine into one sentence.

× I go and come to see her when I got free time.

✓ I go to see her when I have free time.

Mix of tenses: 'got' (past) conflicts with habitual present. Use present 'have' for habitual action. 'Go and come to see' is redundant; use 'go to see'.

× Unluckily, I didn't 'cause when I was in my primary school, I was too young.

✓ Unfortunately, I didn't because when I was in primary school, I was too young.

Colloquial contraction ' 'cause' is inappropriate in formal responses. Use 'because'. 'In my primary school' should be 'in primary school' for general reference.

× I didn't even have any phone or even my number.

✓ I didn't even have a phone or my own phone number.

Use indefinite article 'a phone' and clarify 'my own phone number'. Avoid double 'even' and make the noun phrase grammatical.

× So I didn't got the I didn't have the chance to exchange the phone number or the contact with my primary school teacher.

✓ So I didn't have the chance to exchange phone numbers or contact information with my primary school teachers.

Incorrect past tense 'didn't got' should be 'didn't have' (do-support with base verb). Simplify and pluralize 'teachers' if referring to more than one; use 'phone numbers' and 'contact information' for natural phrasing.

× My favorite teacher not only helped me with my English study but also my life, my goal and my everything.

✓ My favorite teacher not only helped me with my English studies but also with my life, my goals, and everything important to me.

Use 'English studies' plural and parallel structure: 'not only... but also with'. Clarify 'goals' plural and 'everything important to me' for idiomatic expression.

× When I had the bad grades on my English, she would tell me.

✓ When I got bad grades in English, she would advise me.

Use 'got' or 'received' for obtaining grades; 'on my English' is incorrect preposition — use 'in English'. 'Tell me' is vague; 'advise me' or 'tell me what to do' is clearer.

× She would tell me what should I do next and how should keep the positive attitude for average.

✓ She would tell me what I should do next and how to keep a positive attitude despite average grades.

Indirect question word order requires subject before verb ('what I should do'). 'How should keep' is ungrammatical; use 'how to keep'. Clarify 'for average' to 'despite average grades'.

× Do you like your primary school teachers more than your high school teachers?

✓ Do you like your primary school teachers more than your high school teachers?

Question is fine; no grammatical correction needed. Included for completeness.

× Actually, there's no competition of the sale.

✓ Actually, there's no competition; they are not comparable.

The original phrase 'competition of the sale' is incorrect and likely a mistranslation. Replace with 'no competition' and clarify meaning.

× Like my high school teacher impressed me a lot and had a greater influence on me, and she really helped me a lot, like encouraging me to love English forever, keep learning until I couldn't learn.

✓ My high school teacher impressed me a lot and had a great influence on me. She really helped me, encouraging me to love English and to keep learning as much as I could.

Sentence run-on and tense/idiom issues. Use 'had a great influence', avoid repetition 'a lot', and fix 'keep learning until I couldn't learn' to 'keep learning as much as I could' to express continual effort.