教师— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Speak in complete, grammatical sentences and organize your response: give a clear topic sentence, then one or two specific supporting details. Use correct pronouns and verb forms, and avoid repetition. Add linking words (for example, “because” or “so”) to show connections. Keep your answer concise (no more than 3–4 sentences).

示例: My favorite teacher was my primary school music teacher because she was patient and kind. She helped me resolve a conflict with a classmate by organizing a meeting where we talked through our problems. Because of her guidance, I learned how important friends are and how to communicate better.

建议: Answer directly and avoid filler words (umm/uh). Start with a clear statement of your current preference, then briefly explain reasons using correct grammar. Use linking words like “because” or “however” to contrast childhood desire and current choice. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

示例: No, I do not want to be a teacher now. As a child I wanted to be a teacher because I admired their energy, but now I prefer to become a scientist because I enjoy research and focused problem-solving.

建议: Avoid repeating what you already said; give one clear reason and add a specific example of what you remember. Use correct verb forms and vocabulary (e.g., “life skills” not “living skills”). Use linking words like “also” or “for example.”

示例: Yes, I remember my primary school music teacher because she helped me repair a friendship. For example, she taught us life skills like listening and empathy, and she showed us how to behave respectfully toward others.

建议: Provide a concise answer with grammatical sentences and avoid repeated fragments. State how you keep in touch, give one or two specific examples of activities or topics you discuss, and use correct tense and word order.

示例: Yes, I am still in touch with my music teacher. We meet occasionally to watch movies, and she often asks about my studies and gives advice about my future plans.

建议: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence, then give a specific example of how the teacher helped. Use correct past tense and plural/singular forms, and avoid filler sounds. Finish with a brief reflection or result of the help.

示例: She helped me resolve a conflict with a classmate by arranging a meeting where we calmly discussed the problem. As a result, we reconciled and I learned that friends are a valuable part of life.

建议: Make a clear comparison using linking words such as “because” and “however.” Use correct noun and adjective forms (e.g., “primary school teachers,” “more caring”) and avoid confusing phrases. Provide one or two specific reasons to support your opinion.

示例: I prefer my primary school teachers because they were more caring and focused on my overall development. However, high school teachers tended to concentrate more on grades, which is understandable given the exam pressure.

× At that time I have a problem with my classmates he help.

✓ At that time I had a problem with my classmates; he helped.

The sentence mixes present tense 'have' with a past situation. Use past tense 'had' for the time referred to, and 'he helped' for the past action. Also add punctuation to separate clauses.

× He helped to fix our relationship and teach us how pressure the friendship are.

✓ He helped to fix our relationship and taught us how important friendship is.

The original uses incorrect word order and forms. Use past tense 'taught' to match 'helped', and replace 'how pressure the friendship are' with the correct phrase 'how important friendship is'.

× Actually, not umm, but in my, in my childhood, I really want to be a teacher because I feel like teachers are full with energy and the knowledge.

✓ Actually, no; in my childhood I really wanted to be a teacher because I felt teachers were full of energy and knowledge.

Childhood is a past time, so verbs should be past tense ('wanted', 'felt'). Use 'full of' not 'full with', and omit the article before 'knowledge'.

× So, but uh, after grow growing up, I want to be a scientist instead of teacher because I think scientists it's can focus on their.

✓ But after growing up, I wanted to be a scientist instead of a teacher because I thought scientists could focus on their work.

Use past tense 'wanted' and 'thought' for past perspective. 'Growing up' is the correct form. Include the article 'a teacher', replace 'it's can' with 'could' and complete the noun 'work'.

× Yeah, as I just said, my music teacher in the primary school because she helped to fix my relationship with another classmate.

✓ Yes, as I just said, my primary school music teacher, because she helped fix my relationship with another classmate.

Use 'primary school music teacher' for natural word order and remove unnecessary 'to' after 'helped' (helped fix is acceptable). Keep past tense.

× And she's so cute because she not only teach us how to sing a song, but also teach us how the living skills and how to be a better person.

✓ And she's so kind because she not only taught us how to sing, but also taught us life skills and how to be a better person.

Match past tense 'taught' with previous context. Use 'life skills' instead of 'the living skills'; 'cute' may be replaced with 'kind' depending on intended meaning. Use 'teach us how to sing' → 'taught us how to sing' or simply 'taught us how to sing'.

× Yes, I still in touch with my music teacher in the primary school.

✓ Yes, I am still in touch with my primary school music teacher.

Missing auxiliary 'am' for present progressive 'am in touch'. Use natural word order 'primary school music teacher'.

× If we have time, we always hang out together and go to see a movie.

✓ If we have time, we always hang out together and go to see a movie.

Sentence is grammatically acceptable; corrected here only for consistency of style. (No change needed.)

× And till now she is still uh care about my future development.

✓ And even now she still cares about my future development.

Use 'cares' to agree with third person singular subject 'she'. 'Even now' or 'till now' can be used; 'still cares' is idiomatic.

× Sometimes she will ask me about how is my study and how is the how is how is my feeling about that?

✓ Sometimes she asks me about how my studies are going and how I feel about them.

Use present simple 'asks' for habitual action. Use proper question-to-statement order in reported speech ('how my studies are going') and 'how I feel about them' for clarity.

× My favorite teacher, the music teacher in the primary school, she helped me to fix my relationship with another children in the primary school.

✓ My favorite teacher, the music teacher in primary school, helped me fix my relationship with another child in primary school.

Remove the extra pronoun 'she' (avoid comma splice) and use singular 'child' to match 'another', and 'helped' past tense. 'In primary school' does not need 'the' here.

× We have a conflict at that, but she helped us to sit down and talk about the things and let us know how.

✓ We had a conflict then, but she helped us sit down and talk about things and taught us how to resolve them.

Use past tense 'had' and 'then' for time reference. 'Helped us sit down' (no 'to' required), and complete the idea with 'taught us how to resolve them.'

× UH friends is a treasure.

✓ Friends are a treasure.

Use plural 'friends' with plural verb 'are'. Remove filler 'UH'.

× I like my primers teacher more because I think primary teacher are more our care our future development.

✓ I like my primary school teachers more because I think primary teachers care more about our future development.

Correct 'primers' to 'primary', make nouns plural 'teachers', use 'care more about' for the intended meaning, and reorder words for clarity.

× But the high school teacher only care about our grades.

✓ But high school teachers only care about our grades.

Ensure subject-verb agreement: plural 'teachers' with 'care'. Original 'teacher' singular would require 'cares'.

× But I understand why they do that because primary school the high school teacher are pressure about our grades.

✓ But I understand why they do that, because in high school the teachers are under pressure about our grades.

Fix word order and add necessary prepositions: 'in high school' and 'teachers are under pressure'. Use 'teachers' plural and 'are'.