教师— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Cần trả lời rõ ràng, trôi chảy và chính xác ngữ pháp. Tránh tiếng thừa như “umm” và lỗi động từ (ví dụ “find out” → “found”). Mở rộng câu chủ đề rồi cung cấp 1-2 chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ: cách cô dạy, một bài học đáng nhớ). Giữ không quá 5 câu và dùng liên từ để liên kết ý.

示例: Yes. My favourite teacher was my secondary school literature teacher. She discovered my talent for writing and encouraged me to read widely, which improved my style. For example, she assigned short stories and gave detailed feedback on my essays, helping me develop confidence.

建议: Cần trả lời trực tiếp và mạch lạc; tránh mâu thuẫn (ban đầu nói ‘muốn’ nhưng sau lại nói đã là giáo viên). Loại bỏ tiếng ồn như “umm”. Sử dụng cấu trúc rõ ràng để giải thích tình trạng hiện tại và lý do (ví dụ: ‘I am already a teacher and have taught for...’).

示例: Yes. Actually I am already a teacher and have been teaching for more than ten years, so I definitely want to continue. I enjoy helping students learn and I take pride in guiding their progress.

建议: Cần sửa ngữ pháp và diễn đạt chính xác (ví dụ “fight doubt” → “fought my doubts” hoặc “removed my doubts”; “inspire” → “inspired”). Trình bày rõ mối liên hệ và một ví dụ cụ thể về cách cô giúp bạn (ví dụ: lời khuyên, bài tập). Dùng liên từ để nối ý.

示例: Yes. I remember my Grade 8 literature teacher very well. She helped me overcome doubts about my writing by giving encouraging feedback and suggesting reading materials, which inspired me to keep writing.

建议: Cần trả lời ngắn gọn, trực tiếp và trang trọng hơn; tránh tiếng thừa và câu cảm tính mơ hồ (“it hurts me to remember”). Nên nêu rõ lý do tại sao không giữ liên lạc (ví dụ: chuyển nhà, mất liên lạc). Sử dụng 2-3 câu tối đa và dùng liên từ nếu cần.

示例: No, I’m not in touch with my primary school teachers. I’m 40 now and we lost contact after I moved several times, so unfortunately I haven’t kept in touch with them.

建议: Cần rõ ràng và mạch lạc: bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rồi giải thích chính xác cách cô giúp (ví dụ: dạy kỹ năng viết, cho bài tập diễn đạt ý). Tránh lặp từ và tiếng “umm”. Thêm một ví dụ cụ thể về phương pháp cô dùng (ví dụ: bài tập miêu tả, phản hồi chi tiết).

示例: She helped me express my ideas more clearly by teaching writing techniques and giving detailed feedback. For example, she showed me how to structure an essay and gave comments on word choice and coherence.

建议: Cần trả lời trực tiếp với một câu chủ đề rõ ràng rồi giải thích ngắn gọn lý do. Tránh diễn đạt rườm rà và lỗi lặp từ. Có thể so sánh cụ thể (ví dụ: ‘high school teachers influenced my interests more’). Dùng liên từ để kết nối lý do và kết luận.

示例: I prefer my high school teachers because I remember them better and they had a greater influence on my interests. For instance, my secondary school literature teacher inspired me to pursue writing, so I would choose high school teachers.

× She was the one who umm, find out that I could be good at literature.

✓ She was the one who, umm, found out that I could be good at literature.

The verb 'find' should be in the past participle/past form 'found' because the main clause is in the past tense ('She was the one'). Use past form to maintain correct tense consistency. Suggestion: Use 'found out' for past events: 'She was the one who found out...'.

× Absolutely yes. But this question, umm. Doesn't apply to me because I have been teaching for more than 10 years and I really enjoy teaching and planting things for for my students.

✓ Absolutely yes. But this question, umm, doesn't apply to me because I have been teaching for more than 10 years and I really enjoy teaching and planning things for my students.

'Planting things' is incorrect in context; likely intended 'planning things'. Also sentence had punctuation/capitalization issues: 'Doesn't' should be lowercase continuing the sentence. Suggestion: use 'planning' for preparing lessons and remove duplicated 'for'.

× She's the one fight doubt that I am good at writing and inspire me to continue writing until now.

✓ She's the one who fought my doubts that I was good at writing and inspired me to continue writing until now.

Missing relative marker 'who' and verbs need past forms 'fought' and 'inspired' to match the past reference. Also add the object 'my doubts' for clarity and adjust tense to 'was' for past perception. Suggestion: include 'who' and use past verbs when referring to past encouragement.

× I AM 40 years old now and my primary school time is just like uh, something 30 years ago.

✓ I am 40 years old now and my primary school time was just like, uh, about 30 years ago.

Use standard capitalization and past tense 'was' for a past period. 'Something 30 years ago' is informal and should be 'about 30 years ago'. Suggestion: use 'was' and 'about' for clarity.

× So umm. It hurts me to remember the teacher in primary school so umm and I didn't keep in touch with them.

✓ So, umm, it pains me to remember my primary school teachers, and I didn't keep in touch with them.

'It hurts me' is acceptable but 'it pains me' is more natural. Use plural 'teachers' and improve punctuation and conjunction use; keep past tense 'didn't keep'. Suggestion: combine clauses smoothly: '...and I didn't keep in touch with them.'

× Oh well, I am fond of reading and I am really good at umm understanding UMM, but I don't know how to express my my thinking and she is the one who helped me.

✓ Oh well, I am fond of reading and I'm really good at understanding, but I don't know how to express my thinking, and she is the one who helped me.

Remove repeated words, use contraction 'I'm' optional, and use gerund 'understanding' correctly without extra filler. Add comma before conjunction. Suggestion: avoid filler 'UMM' in writing and remove duplicate 'my'.

× It's really hard for me to answer this question because the primary school teachers, it is a story, 30 years ago I I couldn't remember all of them, but I still have a lot of memories with my high school teachers, so if I have to choose between them, I will choose high school.

✓ It's really hard for me to answer this question because my primary school years were 30 years ago and I couldn't remember all of my primary teachers, but I still have many memories with my high school teachers, so if I have to choose, I would choose my high school teachers.

Original sentence had awkward clause 'the primary school teachers, it is a story' and tense/number issues. Use 'years' and past tense 'were' and 'couldn't remember'. Use 'many' instead of 'a lot of' for formality and 'would' for hypothetical choice. Suggestion: restructure into clearer clauses and use consistent past tense when referring to past events.