教师— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Give a direct topic sentence naming the teacher and your relationship, then add 1–2 clear supporting details. Use correct grammar (subject + verb), correct nouns (e.g., "professor"), and avoid unrelated words. Keep it within 3–4 sentences and use linking words such as "because" or "for example."

示例: My favourite teacher is Professor Kim, who taught my university psychology seminar. He was very encouraging and explained difficult ideas clearly. For example, he used real-life cases to help us understand theories, which made learning much easier.

建议: Start with a clear statement (Yes/No), then give one or two specific reasons. Use consistent tense and correct grammar for phrases like "my parents are both teachers" and avoid long fragmented sentences. Use linking words like "because" and "however."

示例: No, I don't want to be a teacher in the future because both of my parents were teachers and I saw how hard they worked. For example, they often missed my school events, which made me decide to choose a different career.

建议: Answer directly and clearly: say which teacher you remember and why. Use precise vocabulary (e.g., "history teacher" and "teaching techniques") and provide one specific example of the technique. Keep to 2–3 sentences with linking words like "because" or "for example."

示例: Yes, I still remember my high school history teacher because he had a unique teaching style. For example, he used dramatic storytelling and role-play to make historical events vivid and memorable.

建议: Respond clearly with a topic sentence (Yes/No) and a concise reason. Use correct phrasing like "I am not in contact with my primary school teachers" and explain briefly why (e.g., no contact details, moved away). Use linking words such as "because" and avoid extra filler words.

示例: No, I am not in contact with my primary school teachers because I did not have a phone or their contact details when I moved away. As a result, we lost touch over the years.

建议: Begin with a clear topic sentence describing how the teacher helped you, then give a specific method or example. Use correct grammar and vocabulary (e.g., "helped me remember by using visual and audio aids") and linking words like "for example" or "such as." Keep to 2–3 sentences.

示例: My favourite teacher helped me improve my memory by using visual and audio aids. For example, he gave us catchy songs and colourful diagrams to help us remember key terms.

建议: Answer directly (Yes/No/Depends), then explain briefly with one or two clear reasons. Use correct comparative phrasing and vocabulary (e.g., "strict" rather than "lady strict") and provide an example of a memory. Avoid vague words like "kind of" and reduce fillers like "umm."

示例: It's both yes and no. I liked some primary school teachers because they were caring, but I also remember strict teachers who shouted and gave heavy homework, which made those memories unpleasant.

× Is IHOP.

✓ It is IHOP.

Student used 'Is' without a subject. Use the pronoun 'It' as the subject for identification sentences (There is/It is). Suggestion: begin identification with 'It is' or 'My favorite teacher is...'.

× When I was to our university student I met him.

✓ When I was a university student, I met him.

Extra preposition 'to' is incorrect and word order is awkward. Use the phrase 'a university student' and place time clause first followed by main clause. Suggestion: say 'When I was a university student, I met him.'

× He is my psychology seminar to profess UH professor and he taught me a lot of things.

✓ He was my psychology seminar professor and he taught me many things.

Errors: 'seminar to profess UH professor' is ungrammatical and article usage is wrong. Use 'my psychology seminar professor' or 'my psychology seminar tutor.' Use 'many' with countable plural 'things.' Also 'was' fits past context if meeting happened in past. Suggestion: simplify to 'He was my psychology seminar professor.'

× I don't want to be teacher because my parents are both over teacher when I was kid.

✓ I don't want to be a teacher because both my parents were teachers when I was a kid.

Missing article 'a' before 'teacher'; 'over teacher' is incorrect — likely meant 'teachers'; tense should be past 'were' for past time. Also include 'a' before 'kid.' Suggestion: 'I don't want to be a teacher because both my parents were teachers when I was a kid.'

× They are already retired.

✓ They are already retired.

Sentence is acceptable but keep present state 'are retired' to show current status. Suggestion: none; maintain as is.

× But uh, when I was a kid, they both teacher and the hard working.

✓ But when I was a kid, both of them were teachers and hard-working.

Missing verb 'were' and incorrect noun phrase 'they both teacher'; 'hard working' should be hyphenated 'hard-working' as adjective. Suggestion: use 'both of them were teachers and were hard-working.'

× They couldn't come to my school event so it's.

✓ They couldn't come to my school events, so I understand.

The phrase ends abruptly with 'so it's.' Needs completion. 'School events' plural and provide result clause. Suggestion: complete idea, e.g., 'so I understand why they couldn't come.'

× Yes, either I remember some unique teacher, one of teacher.

✓ Yes, I remember a unique teacher, one of my teachers.

'Either' is misused; use 'I' as subject. 'One of teacher' should be 'one of my teachers.' Suggestion: 'I remember a unique teacher, one of my teachers.'

× He is historical teacher in a high school time.

✓ He was a history teacher in high school.

Use 'history teacher' not 'historical teacher.' Use article 'a' and phrase 'in high school' rather than 'in a high school time.' Past tense 'was' fits context. Suggestion: 'He was a history teacher in high school.'

× He was a really unique technique to use for teaching him and also his.

✓ He used really unique teaching techniques.

Original mixes noun and pronoun incorrectly. Simplify to subject 'He' + verb 'used' + object 'unique teaching techniques.' Suggestion: 'He used really unique teaching techniques.'

× I am not here keep keeping in contact with their primary school teachers because it when I was a kid.

✓ I have not been able to keep in contact with my primary school teachers because when I was a kid,

Pronouns wrong: use 'my' not 'their.' 'Keep keeping' is redundant; use 'keep in contact' or 'been able to keep in contact.' 'It when I was a kid' is incomplete — explain reason next. Suggestion: 'I have not been able to keep in contact with my primary school teachers because when I was a kid...'

× I don't have any cell phone so I don't have any chance to exchange contact number.

✓ I didn't have a cell phone, so I didn't have a chance to exchange contact numbers.

Tense should match past context: use past 'didn't have.' Use article 'a' before 'cell phone' and plural 'contact numbers.' Suggestion: 'I didn't have a cell phone, so I couldn't exchange contact numbers.'

× In the usual they are helping in a lot of way kinder not to usual way.

✓ Usually they helped me in many ways, not in the usual way.

Awkward phrasing: use 'Usually' and past 'helped' for past events. 'In a lot of way' -> 'in many ways.' 'Kinder not to usual way' unclear; interpret as 'not in the usual way.' Suggestion: 'Usually they helped me in many ways, not in the usual way.'

× For example I'm not good at to remember things, but they are trying to.

✓ For example, I'm not good at remembering things, but they tried to help me.

Use gerund 'remembering' after 'good at.' Tense consistency: past 'tried' fits. 'They are trying to' is incomplete; specify 'to help me.' Suggestion: 'I'm not good at remembering things, but they tried to help me.'

× How do can I can remember using a sound using a visual?

✓ How can I remember things using sound or visuals?

Incorrect auxiliary combination 'do can I can' — use 'How can I.' Use gerund 'remember' with 'can' and parallel nouns 'sound or visuals.' Suggestion: 'How can I remember things using sound or visuals?'

× Umm it's was yes and no because they're primary school teacher was lady strict and I feel kinder remembered many fear memory such as primary school teacher shouting and sometimes redistricting task.

✓ It's both yes and no because my primary school teacher was a strict lady, and I remember many fearful memories such as my primary school teacher shouting and sometimes giving strict tasks.

Multiple issues: tense mix 'it's was' should be 'it's both' or 'it was both'; pronoun 'they're' wrong, use 'my.' Article 'a' before 'strict lady.' 'Kinder remembered many fear memory' incorrect—use 'I remember many fearful memories.' 'Redistricting task' likely 'strict tasks' or 'punishing/strict tasks.' Suggestion: simplify and correct vocabulary: 'My primary school teacher was a strict lady, and I remember many frightening memories such as her shouting and assigning strict tasks.'