教师— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more grammatical, concise and coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give specific supporting details using linking words. Correct verb tense and articles, avoid repetition. For example, say when and why he was your favorite and give one concrete example of how he helped your confidence.

示例: Yes. My favorite teacher was my high school English teacher because he always encouraged me to ask questions and practise speaking. For example, he paired students for weekly conversations and gave me positive feedback, which increased my confidence in English. As a result, I felt more motivated to study the language.

建议: Make a clear direct answer first (Yes/No) then explain reasons with precise language and linking words. Fix grammar (e.g., 'I don't have enough patience for teaching children') and avoid unclear phrases. Give one or two concrete reasons and a brief comparison to alternatives.

示例: No, I don't want to be a teacher. I don't have enough patience for working with young children, and I prefer a career that is more creative and flexible, such as graphic design. Therefore I would choose a job where I can set my own schedule and work on varied projects.

建议: Clarify and correct meaning; avoid contradictions. Start with a clear topic sentence and give specific memories. Use linking words and correct adjectives. Replace unclear or wrong phrases (e.g., 'hate a English teacher', 'inspired me to be a bad person') with accurate descriptions.

示例: Yes, I clearly remember my high school English teacher. He encouraged me to ask questions and explore literature, and his lively lessons made the subject interesting. Because of him I developed a lasting interest in reading and writing.

建议: Answer directly and give concise reasons using correct grammar. Use linking words to explain causes (e.g., 'because' 'so'). Be specific about how contact was lost and whether you'd like to reconnect.

示例: No, I'm not in touch with my primary school teachers. Because I moved and we didn't exchange contact details or social media, I lost contact with them. I would like to reconnect someday if I can find them online.

建议: Provide a complete sentence answering the question, then give specific examples of support and results. Correct grammar (e.g., 'learn other languages', 'attracted me to...'), avoid vague words like 'LIMO'. Mention particular activities or books he recommended and how they helped you.

示例: My high school English teacher helped me by encouraging questions and recommending books that matched my interests. For example, he suggested modern novels and grammar exercises which improved my vocabulary and made me more confident speaking English.

建议: Answer directly and compare clearly using linking words (e.g., 'because', 'while'). Fix grammar and awkward phrases (e.g., 'I pray for' -> 'I prefer' or 'I like'). Give specific reasons why you prefer high school teachers, with one example of respect or guidance.

示例: I prefer my high school teachers to my primary school teachers because they treated me like an adult and respected my opinions. For instance, a teacher gave me career advice and suggested subjects that matched my interests, which helped me choose my university major.

× Had an English teacher and he always encouraged me to ask question, inspire me to learning English and made me feel confident about the this subject.

✓ I had an English teacher and he always encouraged me to ask questions, inspired me to learn English, and made me feel confident about this subject.

Missing subject 'I' at start and 'question' should be plural 'questions' (singular/plural issue). 'Inspire me to learning' uses incorrect verb form; after 'inspired' use infinitive 'to learn' or gerund appropriately. Also remove the extra 'the' before 'this subject'. Suggestion: include subject, use plural for countable nouns, and use correct verb forms: 'encouraged me to ask questions' and 'inspired me to learn'.

× So I very like him.

✓ So I like him very much.

Word order and choice are incorrect: 'very like' is not idiomatic. Use adverb placement 'like him very much' or 'really like him'. Suggestion: place adverb ('very much' or 'really') after the verb phrase.

× To be our new stud now, I think I haven't enough patience to teaching children and I want my job that more creative and flexible.

✓ At this stage, I don't have enough patience to teach children and I want a job that is more creative and flexible.

Multiple issues: 'To be our new stud now' is unclear; 'At this stage' or 'Right now' fits. 'I haven't enough patience' is nonstandard in English; use 'I don't have enough patience' (present tense with contraction). After 'patience' use infinitive 'to teach', not 'to teaching' (verb + -ing form error). 'I want my job that more creative' needs correct structure: 'I want a job that is more creative and flexible' (use article 'a' and 'is'). Suggestion: use 'don't have', the infinitive 'to teach', and correct relative clause with 'that is'.

× I don't like the teaching and maybe it's a highway thing, but I think it's very difficult for me, so I'm not to choose to do that.

✓ I don't like teaching and maybe it's a high-pressure job, but I think it's very difficult for me, so I would not choose to do that.

Pronoun and article issues: 'the teaching' should be simply 'teaching' (uncountable). 'It's a highway thing' is incorrect idiom; likely 'high-pressure' or 'hard way' fits. 'I'm not to choose to do that' is ungrammatical; use modal/correct verb phrase 'I would not choose to do that' or 'I am not going to choose that'. Suggestion: remove unnecessary articles, choose correct idioms, and use appropriate modal constructions ('would not choose').

× To be honest now, because then I'm so young and we lost connect information and have their social media and other information about that.

✓ To be honest, back then I was so young and we lost contact information and did not have their social media or other details.

Several errors: 'To be honest now' should be 'To be honest' or 'To be honest, back then'. 'because then I'm so young' wrong tense/person: use past 'I was so young'. 'lost connect information' should be 'lost contact information' (wrong word choice). 'and have their social media' should be 'and did not have their social media'. Suggestion: use past tense for past events, correct noun 'contact', and negative construction 'did not have'.

× So we lost touch with my primary school teachers.

✓ So we lost touch with my primary school teachers.

Sentence is grammatically acceptable, but context suggests pronoun mismatch: if speaking about multiple teachers, 'my primary school teachers' is fine. No change needed except confirming correct tense and plurality. Suggested improvement: 'So I lost touch with my primary school teachers' if referring personally rather than as a group.

× My high school English teacher. He always encouraged me to ask questions and learn more other language.

✓ My high school English teacher. He always encouraged me to ask questions and learn more about other languages.

'Learn more other language' is incorrect word order and missing preposition. Use 'learn more about other languages' or 'learn other languages'. Suggestion: add 'about' and pluralize 'languages' for general meaning.

× His classes were interesting, it's attracted me to LIMO and he always recommended me other books suited my life.

✓ His classes were interesting; they attracted me to literature, and he always recommended other books suited to my life.

'It's attracted me' should be 'they attracted me' (subject agreement). 'LIMO' seems wrong—likely 'literature'. 'Recommended me other books' is incorrect object placement; use 'recommended other books to me' or simply 'recommended other books suited to my life'. Also need preposition 'suited to my life'. Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement and correct prepositions and word order.

× Are you still in touch with your primary school teachers? Student: To be honest now, because then I'm so young and we lost connect information and have their social media and other information about that.

✓ To be honest, no. Back then I was so young and we lost contact information and did not have their social media or other details.

This repeats earlier errors and needs subject-verb tense consistency: 'I'm so young' should be 'I was so young'. Also ensure negative response 'no' to the question for clarity. 'Lost connect information' incorrect noun. Suggest using 'did not have' for past lack of information.

× Teacher from my high school hate a English teacher and he always encouraged me to ask questions and learn more about that.

✓ A teacher from my high school was an English teacher and he always encouraged me to ask questions and learn more about it.

'Teacher from my high school hate a English teacher' is ungrammatical: incorrect verb 'hate' and article 'a English' should be 'an English'. Use past tense 'was'. Replace 'about that' with 'about it' for clarity. Suggest: 'A teacher from my high school was an English teacher...'

× Inspired me to be a bad person.

✓ He inspired me to become a better person.

Sentence fragment lacks subject and is unclear: 'Inspired me to be a bad person' is likely wrong meaning. Use complete clause with subject 'he inspired me' and correct adjective 'better' not 'bad'. Also 'to become' is a better collocation. Suggest forming full sentences and clarifying intended meaning.

× Now I pray for my high school teachers because I think they think I'm a adult and they respected my thoughts and teach me more to my career and my studying and teaching me the subject that I'm interested in.

✓ Now I prefer my high school teachers because I think they see me as an adult; they respected my thoughts, helped me with my career and studies, and taught me the subjects that I'm interested in.

Many structural errors: 'I pray for' is wrong collocation—likely 'I prefer' or 'I am grateful to'. 'They think I'm a adult' should be 'they see me as an adult' (article and verb). Tense consistency: 'they respected' (past) and 'teach me' should be 'taught me'. 'Teach me more to my career and my studying' is awkward—use 'helped me with my career and studies'. Suggest rephrase into clear clauses, maintain tense consistency, correct articles, and use proper verbs ('see', 'respected', 'helped', 'taught').