整洁— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and natural. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one brief supporting detail using a linking word. Watch grammar: use simple present consistently and avoid overlong clauses.

示例: Yes, I do. I prefer my home tidy because it helps me relax and find things easily. For example, I always put books back on the shelf after reading.

建议: Answer directly, keep tense consistent (past habits: 'used to' or 'would'), and use linking words to list actions. Correct grammar in each clause and avoid contradictory phrasing.

示例: Yes, I used to. Before I left my bed, I would fold the blanket, arrange the pillows, and straighten the sheets so the room looked neat.

建议: Use present simple to describe habitual actions and simplify sentences. Use linking words to structure the steps and correct common errors (e.g., 'there are no things' → 'there is nothing').

示例: I keep it tidy by clearing unnecessary items before I start work. First, I wipe the desk, then I put stationery in a drawer so there's nothing on the table that doesn't belong there.

建议: Give a clear topic sentence, then give two concise, specific reasons with linking words. Avoid vague phrases and incomplete thoughts; use precise vocabulary (e.g., 'hygienic' rather than 'health is well on').

示例: Yes, I think being tidy is necessary because a clean environment is more hygienic and reduces the risk of illness. Also, it improves mental focus, so I can work more efficiently.

× Yes, I'm that kind of person who wants my place neat and clean, that everything is organized.

✓ Yes, I'm the kind of person who wants my place to be neat and clean and for everything to be organized.

The original sentence has awkward word order and missing infinitive and conjunctions. Use 'the kind of person' (idiomatic), 'wants my place to be neat and clean' (infinitive after want), and 'for everything to be organized' to express purpose. This fixes sentence structure and clarity. (Grammar problem type ID:26)

× Yes, before I leave my bed, I make sure that I fold the blanket, I arrange the pillow and the sheet was not folded.

✓ Yes, before I left my bed, I made sure that I folded the blanket, arranged the pillow, and folded the sheet.

The question asks about childhood (past), so use past tense consistently. Also avoid mixing past and present forms and use parallel verb forms: 'folded', 'arranged'. The original used present tense and passive incorrectly ('was not folded'). (Grammar problem type ID:5)

× Before my work gets started, I make sure my table was clean and organized and there's no any things that are in there that not belong to the table.

✓ Before I start work, I make sure my table is clean and organized and there are no things on it that do not belong there.

The original mixes tenses and has subject-verb and article problems. Use present tense 'Before I start work' (habitual), 'my table is clean', and plural agreement 'there are no things'. Replace 'not belong to the table' with 'do not belong there' and 'on it' for correct preposition. Remove redundant 'any'. (Grammar problem type ID:27)

× Yes it is because if your place is clean and neat, you can make sure that your health is well on. You are far from the viruses and any types of uh.

✓ Yes, it is, because if your place is clean and neat, you can make sure your health is good. You will be less exposed to viruses and other types of germs.

Use 'your health is good' rather than awkward 'health is well on'. Express consequence with future/predictive phrasing 'will be less exposed'. Use 'viruses and other types of germs' for clear noun phrase. Remove filler 'uh'. Also add commas for clarity. This corrects tense, preposition, and word choice issues. (Grammar problem type IDs:6 and 11)