整洁— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Cải thiện ngữ pháp (ví dụ: 'it make' → 'it makes'), tránh lặp từ và rút gọn câu cho tự nhiên hơn. Thêm một câu cụ thể để minh họa tầm quan trọng của việc gọn gàng (ví dụ: cảm xúc hoặc lợi ích thực tế). Sử dụng liên từ đơn giản để kết nối ý rõ ràng.

示例: Yes, I enjoy keeping things tidy because it makes me feel calmer and more productive. For example, when my desk is organized I can find my notes quickly and focus better.

建议: Loại bỏ tiếng ậm ừ ('uh') và dùng thì phù hợp. Tránh dùng khẩu ngữ quá mức (''cause') trong bài thi; thay bằng 'because'. Cụ thể hoá tần suất và lý do ngắn gọn, kết hợp bằng liên từ để mạch lạc.

示例: Yes, I did. When I was a child I cleaned my room twice a week because I liked everything to be neat, and I often helped my sister with hers too.

建议: Tránh tiếng nhấp nhổm ('Umm') và sửa ngữ pháp (e.g., 'replaced things into its right position' → 'put things in their proper places'; 'make them messy' → 'make them messy' tense). Nói rõ các hành động cụ thể (ví dụ: sử dụng khay, dọn mỗi ngày) và dùng liên từ để nối ý.

示例: First, I always put items in their proper places and tidy up my desk every evening. I also use small boxes for stationery, which helps me keep the space uncluttered.

建议: Chỉnh cấu trúc câu và ngữ pháp: tránh lặp ('tidy tidy'), sửa thì và trật tự từ (e.g., 'Not only do you become a clean person but it also makes you feel better'). Thêm một ví dụ ngắn về lợi ích tinh thần hoặc hiệu suất để cụ thể hoá ý.

示例: Yes, I think being tidy is important. Not only does it make you appear responsible, but it also helps you feel more relaxed and focused when you study or work.

× Of course, I like to keep things tidy as it make me feel better and refresh my mind.

✓ Of course, I like to keep things tidy as it makes me feel better and refreshes my mind.

Verb agreement in present simple: when the subject is singular (it), the verb requires an -s. Use 'makes' and 'refreshes' to match 'it'. Suggestion: For third-person singular subjects add -s/-es to verbs in present simple.

× I also considered cleaning as one of my favorite hobbies.

✓ I also consider cleaning to be one of my favorite hobbies.

Tense and verb form: 'considered' (past) conflicts with present habit expressed by 'I like'. Use present 'consider' and the correct infinitive structure 'consider X to be Y' or 'consider X one of my favorite hobbies'. Suggestion: Keep verb tenses consistent; use present simple for habitual statements.

× Yes I did, when I was a child I uh, used to clean my room twice a week or I even help my sister clean her room 'cause I want everything to be cleaned.

✓ Yes I did. When I was a child, I used to clean my room twice a week, and I even helped my sister clean her room because I wanted everything to be clean.

Mixed tenses: 'used to' indicates past habitual action so supporting verbs must be past tense: 'help' → 'helped', 'want' → 'wanted'. Also use 'clean' (adjective) rather than 'be cleaned' in this context. Suggestion: Use past tense consistently for past routines and choose correct adjective vs passive form.

× Umm, first, I always replaced things into its right position and I never, I never make them messy.

✓ Umm, first, I always put things in their right places and I never, I never make them messy.

Pronoun agreement and verb choice: 'its' is singular but refers to plural 'things' so use 'their'. 'Replaced things into its right position' is unnatural; use 'put things in their right places'. Also tense: 'make' with present simple is acceptable, but repetition 'I never, I never' can be streamlined. Suggestion: Match pronoun number to the noun and use natural verb collocations (put in place/put away).

× It's my discipline and I think it's helped me very much for cleaning.

✓ It's my discipline and I think it has helped me a lot with cleaning.

Tense and preposition: 'it's helped' ambiguous; use present perfect 'it has helped' to show effect up to now. 'Very much for cleaning' is incorrect preposition; use 'helped me a lot with cleaning'. Suggestion: Use 'has helped' for past actions with present relevance and pair 'help with' for activities.

× I think it's very important to be tidy tidy.

✓ I think it's very important to be tidy.

Redundancy: 'tidy tidy' repeats the adjective unnecessarily. Use a single adjective. Suggestion: Avoid repeating the same word; use one adjective or add an intensifier if needed (very tidy).

× Not only have you be a clean person but also make you feel better while staying in your own space.

✓ Not only are you a clean person, but it also makes you feel better while staying in your own space.

Structure and verb forms: 'have you be' is ungrammatical; correct form is 'are you' for 'not only are you...'. Parallelism needed: 'but it also makes you feel better' provides a subject for 'makes'. Suggestion: Use parallel structures in 'not only... but also...' constructions and ensure verbs agree with their subjects.