整洁— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Câu trả lời cần tự nhiên hơn, ngữ pháp và từ vựng chính xác (ví dụ: "keep things tidy", không phải "give things tidy"); câu trả lời nên ngắn gọn, có câu chủ đề rõ ràng và chi tiết cụ thể, tránh lỗi số nhiều/số ít và mạo từ. Hãy dùng liên từ khi mở rộng ý để mạch lạc (ví dụ: "for example", "so").

示例: I like to keep things tidy because I feel uncomfortable in a messy environment. For example, if my aunt messages me that she is coming over, I often spend an hour cleaning the living room and putting things back in their places.

建议: Cần trả lời trực tiếp với cấu trúc quá khứ khi nói về thói quen trong quá khứ (ví dụ: "I used to"), sửa lỗi từ vựng ("watch a chess" không đúng; có lẽ bạn muốn nói "play chess" hoặc "watch TV"). Tránh lặp từ và sửa lỗi phát âm/viết ("masses" → "messy"). Thêm một ví dụ ngắn để minh họa nếu cần.

示例: Yes, I used to keep my room tidy as a child. For instance, when I played chess I always made sure my desk was neat, because I felt embarrassed by clutter and preferred a calm space to concentrate.

建议: Câu trả lời còn lúng túng, có nhiều lặp từ và lỗi ngữ pháp. Nên bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề ngắn ("I keep my study space tidy by..."), rồi nêu các hành động cụ thể và hợp lý (ví dụ: "I tidy my desk every day, file papers, and store books on shelves"). Tránh tiếng lóng không cần thiết ("MMM").

示例: I keep my study space tidy by tidying my desk every evening, putting books on the shelf, and organizing papers into folders so I can find them easily.

建议: Ý chính rõ nhưng cần diễn đạt mạch lạc hơn; sửa lỗi ngữ liệu không rõ ("E people's E people live in a green environment" vô nghĩa). Nên nêu lý do cụ thể và kết luận ngắn gọn, dùng liên từ để nối ý ("because", "for example").

示例: Yes, I think it is necessary to be tidy because a clean environment helps people feel refreshed and less stressed. For example, when my room is tidy I can find things quickly and concentrate better on my studies.

× I really like to give things tidy because I hate living in the messy environment.

✓ I really like to keep things tidy because I hate living in a messy environment.

The verb 'give' is incorrect collocation here; English uses 'keep something tidy'. Use 'a messy environment' instead of 'the messy environment' for general statements. Suggestion: replace 'give' with 'keep' and use 'a' before 'messy environment'. (Vietnamese) Thay động từ 'give' bằng 'keep' vì collocation đúng là 'keep things tidy'. Dùng 'a messy environment' cho câu tổng quát.

× For example, if my aunt gets a message, I often spend an hours cleaning the living rooms and putting things back in their place.

✓ For example, if my aunt gets a message, I often spend an hour cleaning the living room and putting things back in their place.

Use singular 'an hour' not 'an hours'. Use singular 'the living room' when referring to a specific room in the house. Suggestion: change 'an hours' to 'an hour' and 'living rooms' to 'living room'. (Vietnamese) Sửa 'an hours' thành 'an hour' vì số ít, và 'living rooms' thành 'the living room' khi nói tới một phòng cụ thể.

× When I watched a chess I often keep my room tidy because I hate the masses environment and I really feel embarrassed when I live in a messy room.

✓ When I watched chess I often kept my room tidy because I hated the messy environment and I really felt embarrassed when I lived in a messy room.

Several issues: 'watched a chess' is incorrect — say 'watched chess' or better 'played chess' depending on meaning. Tense shift: question asks about childhood (past), so verbs should be past ('kept', 'hated', 'felt', 'lived'). 'masses environment' is incorrect; use 'messy environment'. Also article before 'chess' is unnecessary. Suggestion: decide whether you 'watched' or 'played' chess; use past tense for all verbs describing childhood. (Vietnamese) 'watched a chess' sai; nên 'watched chess' hoặc 'played chess'. Chuyển các động từ sang quá khứ: 'kept', 'hated', 'felt', 'lived'. Sửa 'masses environment' thành 'messy environment'.

× MMM for me, I often keep my study space tidies by that I often clean my clean my study facilities and put things in the right place.

✓ For me, I often keep my study space tidy; I often clean my study materials and put things in the right place.

Use adjective 'tidy' not plural 'tidies'. Remove filler 'MMM'. 'study facilities' is odd here; likely 'study materials' or 'study area'. Also avoid repetition 'clean my clean my'. Suggestion: use 'tidy', 'study materials' and a semicolon or separate sentences for clarity. (Vietnamese) Dùng 'tidy' (tính từ) thay vì 'tidies'. Loại bỏ 'MMM'. 'study facilities' không phù hợp, nên 'study materials' hoặc 'study area'. Xóa lặp 'clean my clean my'.

× Yes, definitely. Because E people's E people live in a green environment, they often feel refreshed and less stressful.

✓ Yes, definitely. Because people who live in a green environment often feel refreshed and less stressed.

Remove stray letters 'E'. Use relative clause 'people who live...' rather than repeating 'people'. Use adjective 'stressed' not 'stressful' to describe people. Suggestion: say 'less stressed' to describe how people feel. (Vietnamese) Loại bỏ ký tự thừa 'E' và lặp từ. Dùng 'people who live' cho mệnh đề quan hệ và 'less stressed' thay vì 'less stressful'.

× For example, when my room is tidy, I can find things quickly and concentrate matters in my study.

✓ For example, when my room is tidy, I can find things quickly and concentrate on my studies.

Use verb phrase 'concentrate on' followed by 'my studies' (plural) or 'my study' with different meaning. 'Concentrate matters in my study' is incorrect collocation. Suggestion: use 'concentrate on my studies' to mean focus on studying. (Vietnamese) Dùng 'concentrate on' và 'my studies' để diễn đạt tập trung vào việc học; 'concentrate matters in my study' là cấu trúc sai.