整洁— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more fluent and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words, correct collocations and word order (e.g., "tidy desk" not "tidy desk on"), and give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Keep to 2–4 sentences.

示例: Yes, I like to keep things tidy because it helps me concentrate. For example, I always put my keyboard directly in front of the monitor and keep documents in a drawer, so I can work more efficiently and feel more creative.

建议: Improve grammar (past tense and subject-verb agreement), reduce hesitations, and be specific about reasons and timeline. Use linking words to show contrast between past and present. Keep answers under five sentences.

示例: Not really. When I was a child I often left my room messy and was scolded by my parents. However, as I grew older I learned that keeping things tidy makes it much easier to find things and saves time.

建议: Be concise and specific. Remove fillers, correct prepositions, and describe routine actions clearly. Use linking words to sequence actions if needed. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

示例: I keep my study space tidy by putting my keyboard directly in front of the monitor and storing my school bag behind the desk. I also sort papers into folders every evening so my desk is clear for the next day.

建议: State your opinion clearly, avoid repetition, and give a specific reason or example. Use linking words for clarity. Fix collocations (e.g., "waste a lot of time") and keep answer within 2–3 sentences.

示例: Yes, I think being tidy is necessary because it saves time. For instance, if my phone or mouse are in their proper places I can start work immediately instead of wasting a lot of time looking for them.

× I like to keep things tidy because it is my habit.

✓ I like to keep things tidy because it is my habit.

No change needed; sentence is grammatically correct. 'Tidy' correctly modifies 'things' and 'it is my habit' appropriately explains reason.

× I love to make things, uh, correct in their place And you know, the tidy desk on and some uh, you know, the, the keyboard in the in front of the monitor.

✓ I like to put things in their correct places, for example a tidy desk and the keyboard in front of the monitor.

Original sentence has awkward structure and word order. Use 'put things in their correct places' to express arranging items. Remove filler words and correct phrase order: 'keyboard in front of the monitor'. Also join clauses with commas or conjunctions for clarity.

× It can uh, make me feel re creative.

✓ It can make me feel creative.

Remove filler 'uh' and incorrect prefix 're' before 'creative'. 'Creative' is the correct adjective to describe feeling imaginative.

× Oh well, not really. Uh, when I was a child, I often make my roommate so I was scolded by my parents and when I until I grow up, I knew the importance of making your rooms tidy because it is uh, always easy to find your things.

✓ Oh well, not really. When I was a child, I often made my room messy, so I was scolded by my parents. When I grew up, I learned the importance of keeping my room tidy because it is always easier to find your things.

Use past simple 'made' for repeated past action. 'Roommate' is incorrect; 'room' is intended. 'Until I grow up' should be 'when I grew up' (past). 'Knew' replaced with 'learned' to show realization. Use 'keeping' instead of 'making' and 'easier' (comparative) for finding things.

× Umm, you know, I'm a, I'm a person who always makes my things in place.

✓ I'm a person who always keeps my things in their places.

Use 'keeps' or 'keep' concept: 'I'm a person who always keeps my things in their places' is natural. 'Makes my things in place' is incorrect collocation; 'keeps' and 'in their places' are standard.

× So I, you know, I make my keyboard in front of the monitor and I will place my school bag beca behind my desk and I will make anything in place because it is more tidy.

✓ I place my keyboard in front of the monitor, I put my school bag behind my desk, and I keep everything in its place because it looks tidier.

Use verbs 'place/put' correctly with prepositions 'in front of' and 'behind'. 'Beca' is typo removed. 'Make anything in place' changed to 'keep everything in its place'. Use 'tidier' (comparative) rather than 'more tidy'.

× Of course, I think it's very important to be tidy because you know, the easiest thing you can imagine is if you want, if you want to find your mouse or find your phone And they, they are they, they are not in their place.

✓ Of course, I think it's very important to be tidy because, for example, if you want to find your mouse or phone and they are not in their places,

Remove repetitions and restructure sentence. Use 'for example' to introduce a scenario. 'They are not in their places' uses correct plural possessive. Avoid repeating 'if you want'.

× So you'll waste any many time in finding it.

✓ you'll waste a lot of time finding them.

'Any many time' is incorrect. Use 'a lot of time' or 'much time' depending on formality. Also 'it' should be 'them' referring to mouse or phone (plural). Remove unnecessary 'in' before 'finding'.