整洁— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and slightly reorganize the answer: start with a direct statement, then give one clear reason and a brief specific example. Reduce repetition and avoid filler phrases like “like for example.” Use a linking word to connect the reason and the example.

示例: Yes, I do. I find being tidy saves time because I can find things quickly; for example, this morning I cleaned my room, which made me feel more organized and motivated to study in the afternoon.

建议: Give a clearer past-to-present structure and include a short supporting detail or reason. Avoid awkward phrasing like “bring it until now.” Use a linking word to show continuity from past to present.

示例: Yes, I did. I learned the habit from my parents when I was a child, and I have kept it into adulthood because it helps me stay organized.

建议: Be more concise and use clearer listing with correct grammar. Replace informal fillers and fix sentences (e.g., plural/singular agreement). Use a linking phrase to conclude with where you store other items.

示例: I keep my desk minimal: I only place items I use daily — my laptop, iPad, phone and a lamp — and I store everything else on a side table to avoid clutter.

建议: Structure the answer by stating your general view first, then contrast with your personal view using a linking word (however, but). Avoid repeating words and be succinct. Give one specific reason why it matters to you.

示例: I don't think tidiness is essential for everyone because people have different habits; however, for me it matters because a tidy room boosts my confidence and motivation to work.

× Like for example that morning I like to clean my room because it makes me feel more organized and gives me more motivation to do work in the afternoon.

✓ For example, that morning I cleaned my room because it made me feel more organized and gave me more motivation to do work in the afternoon.

The speaker refers to a specific past morning, so past tense should be used (cleaned, made, gave). Use past tense consistently when talking about past events. Suggestion: Use past simple for completed actions in the past: 'I cleaned', 'it made', 'it gave'.

× It is a habit that I've learned to practice when I was a kid, and I still bring it until now.

✓ It is a habit that I learned to practice when I was a kid, and I still have it now.

Mixing present perfect (I've learned) with a specific past time clause ('when I was a kid') is incorrect; use simple past 'learned'. 'Bring it until now' is awkward; use 'have it now' or 'still do it'. Suggestion: Match tense to time expression and use natural phrasing: 'I learned' and 'I still have it now' or 'I still practice it'.

× For me, I usually like to set up my table by putting only the things that I use on my daily tasks, like for example my laptop, my iPad, my phone and then my lamp and then the rest of the things I keep it in my other table.

✓ For me, I usually set up my table by putting only the things that I use for my daily tasks, for example my laptop, my iPad, my phone and my lamp; I keep the rest of the things on my other table.

Unnecessary 'like' and 'then' create redundancy. 'Use on my daily tasks' should be 'use for my daily tasks'. The clause 'the rest of the things I keep it in my other table' wrongly uses the pronoun 'it' and preposition 'in'; correct structure is 'I keep the rest on my other table.' Also 'like for example' is redundant; use one. Suggestion: Remove redundant words, correct preposition 'for', and avoid unnecessary pronouns: 'I keep the rest on my other table.'

× I don't think it is necessary, it is actually more of a preference and it differs from one person to another. But for me, in my case it is necessary because it makes me feel more confident and more motivated to do my work if my stuff are tidy or my room is tidy in that case.

✓ I don't think it is necessary; it's actually more of a preference and it differs from person to person. But for me it is necessary because it makes me feel more confident and motivated to do my work if my stuff is tidy or if my room is tidy.

'From one person to another' is better phrased 'from person to person'. 'My stuff are tidy' incorrectly uses plural verb with a collective noun; treat 'stuff' as singular or use 'my things are tidy.' Also delete redundant phrases 'in my case' and 'in that case'. Ensure parallel conditional clauses: 'if my stuff is tidy or if my room is tidy.' Suggestion: Use 'person to person' for generalization, match verb number with 'stuff' or replace with 'things', and avoid redundant phrases.