整洁— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more natural and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid awkward word choice («steady») and redundancy, and give one brief specific reason. Use a linking phrase for clarity.

示例: Yes — I prefer to keep things tidy because it helps me concentrate. For example, a clean desk lets me focus on studying without distractions.

建议: Provide a clear past-to-present contrast with correct grammar and concise supporting detail. Use linking words («however», «now») and avoid repetition. Fix tense and article errors.

示例: No, I wasn't very tidy as a child — I often left toys and clothes everywhere. However, now I make an effort to organize my room because it helps me concentrate and improves my mood.

建议: Give a clear topic sentence, then specific, coherent examples with correct phrasing. Remove vague wording («if any important thing is happening») and unnecessary repetition. Use linking words like «for example» and «so that».

示例: I keep my workspace organized so I can work efficiently. For example, I keep pens, a notebook and my laptop on the desk so I can quickly write down ideas or important tasks when they come up.

建议: Answer directly and support with a concise, specific reason and example. Avoid awkward phrasing («so that we are going to lose the focus») and informal fillers («let's say»). Use a linking word like «because» or «for example».

示例: Yes, I think being tidy is important because it reduces distractions. For example, if my documents and pen are within reach, I don't waste time searching for them during meetings and can stay focused.

× Yes, I like to keep the things steady because it gives me more focus so that I can concentrate well on my goals.

✓ Yes, I like to keep things tidy because it gives me more focus so that I can concentrate well on my goals.

Using 'the things' is unnecessary and unnatural here; omit the definite article and use the plural noun 'things'. Also 'steady' is not the usual adjective for tidy; use 'tidy' to match meaning. Suggestion: drop 'the' before general plural nouns and choose collocating adjectives. Grammar problem type's ID: 22

× As a child I was a never focused on keeping things in a correct way.

✓ As a child I was never focused on keeping things in the correct way.

Placement of 'never' was incorrect; it should come before the main verb 'focused' or after auxiliary. Also include 'the' before 'correct way' to refer to a specific manner. Suggestion: place adverbs like 'never' directly before the main adjective/verb phrase. Grammar problem type's ID: 6

× I used to throw them all over the places.

✓ I used to throw them all over the place.

The idiomatic expression is 'all over the place' (uncountable), not 'all over the places'. Use singular 'place' in this phrase. Suggestion: learn fixed expressions and idioms. Grammar problem type's ID: 26

× But now I learned how to keep things in a good way so that I can focus on better and it it improves my mood.

✓ But now I have learned how to keep things in a good way so that I can focus better and it improves my mood.

Use present perfect 'have learned' to link past learning with current state. 'Focus on better' is incorrect; use 'focus better' (adverb). Remove duplicated 'it'. Suggestion: use present perfect for past actions with present relevance and place adverbs correctly. Grammar problem type's ID: 6

× I keep my study or work place in an organized way so that I can focus more.

✓ I keep my study or workplace organized so that I can focus more.

Use 'workplace' as one word and avoid 'in an organized way' when adjective form 'organized' can modify the noun directly. Suggestion: prefer adjective + noun ('organized workspace') for concise expression. Grammar problem type's ID: 11

× For example, I keep up my pen and paper nearby so that if any important thing is happening I would like to notice.

✓ For example, I keep my pen and paper nearby so that if anything important happens I will notice it.

'Keep up' is unnecessary; use 'keep'. 'If any important thing is happening' is awkward—use simple present 'if anything important happens'. Use 'will notice it' for future result. Suggestion: use simple structures and proper verb tenses for conditional situations. Grammar problem type's ID: 11

× I would like to note them so that they are going to help me.

✓ I would like to note them down so that they will help me.

Use the separable phrasal verb 'note down' or 'write down'. 'They are going to help me' is wordy; 'they will help me' is more natural. Suggestion: prefer concise future forms and correct phrasal verbs. Grammar problem type's ID: 12

× Yes, being tidy helps us to focus more on our regular tasks.

✓ Yes, being tidy helps us focus more on our regular tasks.

Remove 'to' after 'helps' when followed by another verb; 'helps us focus' is idiomatic. No article error? Primary issue is verb pattern—classified here as article type per list? However corrected to natural verb pattern. Suggestion: use 'help' + object + base verb without 'to'. Grammar problem_type's ID: 22

× Let's say if we are not keeping them within reach, we might need to search during important meetings so that we are going to lose the focus.

✓ For example, if we do not keep things within reach, we might need to search for them during important meetings and lose focus.

'Let's say if' is awkward—use 'for example' or simply 'if'. Use 'do not keep' for present habitual actions. Use 'search for them' to include object. 'So that we are going to lose the focus' is incorrect; use 'and lose focus' for result. Suggestion: simplify conjunctions and use proper verb forms for conditional statements. Grammar_problem_type's ID: 16