公园— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (use past tense consistently), and give specific details. Avoid vague phrases like “MO” and “looking to the floors.” Use linking words to add one supporting detail. Keep to 2–4 sentences.

示例: Yes, I loved visiting parks when I was a child. I enjoyed walking along the tree-lined paths and my favourite thing was sitting by the pond and watching the ducks swim. Those visits felt peaceful and memorable.

建议: Correct small grammar and pronunciation errors and avoid repetition. Give one clear reason with a linking word (for example, because or so) and a concise example of when you go. Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

示例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. I often visit them after work because the fresh air and quiet paths help me relax and clear my mind.

建议: Use correct conditional form and avoid filler words. Give a specific reason and a concrete benefit of more parks. Use a linking word like because or so and keep the answer concise.

示例: Yes, I would like more parks in my city because they would provide green spaces for families to relax and improve air quality. For example, a new park near my neighbourhood would make it easier to exercise outdoors.

建议: Be precise and avoid unclear or incorrect words. Use present conditional or future tense correctly and give one specific reason. Remove hesitations and finish the sentence. Limit to 2–3 clear sentences.

示例: Yes. There is a park called Timber Park about a 10–15 minute walk from my house that I haven’t visited yet. I want to go because I’ve heard it has nice walking trails and a small lake.

× Yes, I really liked it to go in parks in my childhood.

✓ Yes, I really liked going to parks in my childhood.

The verb 'like' when followed by a general activity should use the -ing form (gerund). 'Liked to go' is possible but less natural; 'liked going to parks' is the correct and more fluent expression. Suggestion: Use 'verb + -ing' after 'like' for habitual activities (e.g., 'I liked playing soccer').

× I love to walk around Greenery and MO.

✓ I love to walk around the greenery and MO.

Countable/uncountable and article usage with place descriptions require 'the' before 'greenery' when speaking of a specific area. Also 'Greenery' is not normally capitalized unless a proper name; keep capitalization only if it's a proper noun. Suggestion: Use 'the greenery' or a proper park name and ensure correct capitalization.

× My favorite part of the park is sitting around the pond and looking to the floors.

✓ My favorite part of the park is sitting by the pond and looking at the flowers.

'Sit by' is the correct preposition for being next to a pond. 'Look at' is the correct verb-preposition combination. 'Floors' is incorrect; likely intended 'flowers'. Suggestion: Use 'by' for proximity and 'look at' for directing attention, and check vocabulary ('flowers').

× Yes, I like to go parts now as well.

✓ Yes, I like going to parks now as well.

After 'like' use the -ing form for habitual activities. 'Go parts' is incorrect: use 'go to parks'. Suggestion: Use 'going to parks' for current habitual actions.

× I often like to go to parks.

✓ I often go to parks.

'Often like to go' is wordy and slightly awkward; with adverb 'often' it's more natural to say 'I often go to parks'. Suggestion: Use concise structures: 'I often go' instead of 'I often like to go'.

× It's it gives me Peace of Mind whenever I am tired from my work or from a busy day.

✓ It gives me peace of mind whenever I am tired after work or after a busy day.

There is an extra 'it'. 'Peace of mind' should be lowercase. Use 'after work' or 'after a busy day' rather than 'from'. Suggestion: Remove redundant words and use 'after' for events that precede the feeling.

× Yes, if I got a chance to go to another parks in my city, I would like to go there to look around the beauty of, uh, environment and moreover to know more about the environment.

✓ Yes, if I got a chance to go to another park in my city, I would like to go there to admire the natural beauty and to learn more about the environment.

'Another parks' mixes singular/plural; use 'another park' (singular). 'Look around the beauty of environment' is unnatural; use 'admire the natural beauty' and 'learn more about the environment'. Suggestion: Match singular/plural ('another park') and use clearer verbs ('admire', 'learn').

× Yes, there is one specific park in a beanie park where I like to go in a future that is a Tinder park which is near to near to my house.

✓ Yes, there is one specific park, a small community park, that I would like to visit in the future; it is called Tinder Park and is very near my house.

'There is' can be used but the original sentence is confused and includes wrong words ('beanie park', 'near to near to'). Clarify with apposition: 'a small community park' and correct the name and proximity: 'near my house' (do not use 'near to' with 'near' in this context). Suggestion: Rephrase into a clear clause and avoid repeated words.

× It gonna take around 10 to 15 minutes while walking but I never went there.

✓ It will take around 10 to 15 minutes to walk there, but I have never been there.

'Gonna' is informal and ungrammatical in written form; use 'will' or 'is going to'. 'While walking' is awkward; 'to walk there' is better. For the experience, use present perfect 'I have never been there' rather than simple past 'I never went there'. Suggestion: Use 'will take' and present perfect for life experiences.

× I would like to go there to.

✓ I would like to go there too.

'To' at the end is incorrect; the correct adverb meaning 'also' is 'too'. Suggestion: Use 'too' for 'also' and avoid dangling prepositions.