视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be clearer and more natural: start with a direct topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh, umm), correct grammar (use present tense: 'it helps me'), and give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Keep it concise (max 3–4 sentences).

示例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views because it helps me notice details I would otherwise miss. For example, taking photos of sunsets and cityscapes makes me appreciate colors and composition, and it also relaxes me after a busy day.

建议: Correct word choice and grammar, and organize with a clear topic sentence followed by specific supporting details linked logically. Replace incorrect words ('wheels') with 'views', use plural/singular correctly, and connect ideas with linking words such as 'because' and 'for example'. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

示例: I usually prefer views in rural areas because they offer green landscapes and quiet surroundings. For example, I like photographing gardens, hills and mountains since these scenes relax me and help me focus on composition.

建议: Improve clarity and grammar: use a direct topic sentence ('I prefer views in my own country'), correct verb forms, avoid repetition, and give a complete, specific example. Use linking words like 'because' and 'for example' and finish the thought. Keep within 2–3 sentences.

示例: I prefer views in my own country because I can easily visit diverse landscapes. For example, national parks near my hometown have rich wildlife and dramatic scenery, which I enjoy photographing and studying in detail.

× Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because it's helped me to interest many views that I uh, want to take further and is make me feel umm, wonderful from different views.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because it has helped me to become interested in many scenes that I want to explore further and it makes me feel wonderful.

Multiple issues: 'it's helped' should be 'it has helped' (correct present perfect form) and 'to interest many views' is incorrect verb/noun choice and structure; use 'become interested in many scenes'. 'Want to take further' is awkward; use 'explore further'. 'Is make me feel' is wrong verb form and subject; use 'it makes me feel'. Suggestions: use correct auxiliary for present perfect, choose appropriate verbs and nouns (become interested in, scenes, explore), ensure subject matches verb and use simple present for general states (it makes me feel).

× Usually I prefer wheels in rural areas because in the rural area have a lot of the UH garden views or the green view from the tree or the UH hill and mountain.

✓ Usually I prefer walks in rural areas because the countryside has many gardens and green views from trees, hills, and mountains.

Errors: 'wheels' is wrong word choice (probably meant 'walks' or 'views'); 'in the rural area have' is ungrammatical subject-verb order and missing subject; 'a lot of the UH garden views' is awkward. Correction: use 'walks' or 'views' and proper subject 'the countryside has' with plural noun 'many gardens'. Keep consistent nouns and correct word order. Suggestion: choose accurate vocabulary and ensure subject precedes verb with correct agreement. Note: This correction addresses sentence-structure and noun choice errors listed in the provided problem types.

× It's make me feel relaxed and comfortable.

✓ It makes me feel relaxed and comfortable.

Subject-verb agreement and tense: 'It's make' is incorrect; the subject 'It' with third-person singular requires 'makes' in simple present. Use 'makes' to state habitual or general feelings. Suggestion: for present simple with he/she/it, add -s to the verb.

× I prefer wheels in my country because I think it's have a lot of all scenery that I interest.

✓ I prefer views in my country because I think it has a lot of scenery that interests me.

Problems: 'wheels' is wrong word choice; 'it's have' is ungrammatical (should be 'it has'); 'a lot of all scenery' is redundant; 'that I interest' incorrectly uses 'interest' (should be 'interests me' or 'that I am interested in'). Suggestion: use 'views' or 'scenery', correct auxiliary and verb agreement, and use correct passive/active phrasing: 'scenery that interests me' or 'that I am interested in.'

× For example, in the National Park is have a lot of the wildlife in the wild is, uh, special for me and it's help me to.

✓ For example, in the national park there is a lot of wildlife in the wild, which is special for me, and it helps me.

Issues: word order and auxiliary 'is have' is incorrect; missing subject 'there' for existence; 'a lot of the wildlife' should be 'a lot of wildlife'; 'is, uh, special for me' needs a relative clause 'which is special for me'; 'it's help me to' is ungrammatical—use 'it helps me' or 'it helps me to relax' with an object. Suggestion: use 'there is/are' for existence, correct noun phrases, and match verbs with subjects and tense.