视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Reduce repetition, correct word choice, and organize into a clear topic sentence plus one supporting detail. Use precise vocabulary (e.g., "scenes" or "places" instead of "suspects") and avoid filler sounds. Keep it to 2–3 sentences and mention why you enjoy it or what you share.

示例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because I find scenery inspiring. For example, I often photograph parks and waterfronts and share the best shots with friends on social media.

建议: Start with a clear preference sentence, then give two specific supporting reasons using linking words (e.g., "because", "however"). Correct vocabulary ("cleaner air", "wildlife", "city views"), and avoid unclear phrases. Keep sentences concise and coherent.

示例: I prefer rural views because the countryside is peaceful and has cleaner air, which helps me relax. However, I also enjoy city views at night because the lights and tall buildings look impressive.

建议: Use present tense and avoid repeating words. Give one or two specific examples or reasons why local views appeal to you (e.g., familiarity, cultural connection, specific landmarks). Keep it to 2–3 sentences and use varied vocabulary (e.g., "scenery", "landscapes").

示例: I prefer views in my own country because I feel a strong connection to its landscapes and traditions. For instance, I love visiting the coastal cliffs and historic villages that remind me of home.

× I like taking pictures of beautiful suspects and spots.

✓ I like taking pictures of beautiful scenes and spots.

The student used 'suspects' which is the wrong word; likely intended 'scenes'. This is a vocabulary/word choice error. Replace with 'scenes' to convey landscapes or views. Also 'spots' is acceptable but can be clarified as 'places' or 'spots'. Note: This error falls under incorrect use of adjectives/nouns; choose words that match meaning.

× I I I like I like photos and also share my share my interesting photos to people.

✓ I like photos and I also share my interesting photos with people.

The original has repetition and incorrect preposition 'to' and word duplication. Remove repeated words and use 'share with' rather than 'share to'. The verb 'share' takes the preposition 'with' when indicating people who receive the photos. Ensure a single clear sentence structure: subject + verb + object + prepositional phrase.

× Will I prefer rural views because they are peaceful and there is cleaner so I can relax

✓ I prefer rural views because they are peaceful and cleaner, so I can relax.

'Will I prefer' is incorrect here; the simple present 'I prefer' is appropriate for habitual preference. Also 'there is cleaner' is ungrammatical; use comparative 'cleaner' to compare rural areas to others. Use a comma before 'so' linking clauses. This corrects tense/modal misuse and improves clarity.

× For example, I like walking in the countryside and looking at the whites and his.

✓ For example, I like walking in the countryside and looking at the fields and hills.

'whites and his' appear to be incorrect words, likely intended 'fields and hills' or similar landscape nouns. Replace with correct nouns to convey the scenery. This is a vocabulary/adjective-noun misuse; choose accurate nouns for clarity.

× But sometimes I also enjoy city weaves at the night because the lights and tall buildings look very impressive so I like.

✓ But sometimes I also enjoy city views at night because the lights and tall buildings look very impressive.

'city weaves' is incorrect; 'city views' is appropriate. Use 'at night' not 'at the night'. The final 'so I like' is unnecessary and redundant; remove it. Correct noun choice and adverbial phrase improves grammaticality and fluency.

× I preferred views in my own country because my my country is beautiful.

✓ I prefer views in my own country because my country is beautiful.

The question asks about general preference, so use present simple 'I prefer' not past 'I preferred'. Also remove duplicated 'my'. Present tense matches the question's context of general habits or preferences.

× Beautiful suspects, beautiful countryside.

✓ Beautiful scenery, beautiful countryside.

Again 'suspects' is the wrong word. Use 'scenery' to refer to landscapes. This fixes incorrect noun choice and makes the sentence meaningful.

× I like my own country's views. There are many beautiful, beautiful spots.

✓ I like my own country's views because there are many beautiful spots.

Combine the ideas into one coherent sentence and remove unnecessary repetition 'beautiful, beautiful'. The phrase 'There are many beautiful spots' is acceptable, but linking to reason ('because') improves coherence and flow.