视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Cần cải thiện ngôn ngữ tự nhiên và chính xác hơn, dùng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không phù hợp; rút ngắn câu dài và tối đa 5 câu; liên kết ý bằng từ nối đơn giản; cung cấp chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ: loại khung cảnh, thiết bị bạn dùng, tần suất chụp).

示例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views when I travel. I take pictures to preserve memories of moments with my family and friends. For example, I often photograph sunsets and mountain landscapes using my smartphone. After trips, I select the best shots and put them in a scrapbook or digital album. This helps me remember the trip and share highlights with others.

建议: Cần sử dụng cấu trúc câu chính xác và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp (ví dụ: subject-verb agreement), dùng từ nối để so sánh rõ ràng; nêu một câu chủ đề trực tiếp và cung cấp ví dụ cụ thể để làm rõ sở thích; giữ tổng số câu không quá 5.

示例: I prefer different views depending on my mood. Urban areas appeal to me when I want excitement because of the busy streets and modern architecture. In contrast, I choose rural areas when I need peace, such as quiet fields and forests. For instance, last month I enjoyed the calm of a village walk more than a city tour.

建议: Cần sửa nhiều về ngữ pháp, lựa chọn từ và tính mạch lạc. Tránh câu ngắt quãng và nội dung không liên quan (ví dụ: hy sinh của tổ tiên chưa rõ liên hệ với cảnh quan). Nên trả lời trực tiếp, cung cấp lý do cụ thể và ví dụ về cảnh đẹp trong nước so với nước ngoài; giữ dưới 5 câu.

示例: I prefer views in my own country because I feel a strong personal connection to its landscapes. For example, I love the coastal cliffs and historic villages that remind me of our cultural heritage. Although other countries have attractive sights, I appreciate the familiar scenery and local traditions at home.

× Yes, I love touching gorgeous sceneries when I travel.

✓ Yes, I love taking pictures of gorgeous scenery when I travel.

The verb 'touching' is inappropriate for photographing; use 'taking pictures' or 'taking photos'. 'Sceneries' is uncountable in this context; use 'scenery'. Use consistent collocations: 'take pictures of scenery'. Suggestion: learn common verb-noun collocations and countability of nouns.

× Taking picture helps me remember and tourist every moment I spent with my family or my best friends.

✓ Taking pictures helps me remember and enjoy every moment I spend with my family or my best friends.

Use plural 'pictures' after 'taking'. 'Tourist' is the wrong word here; likely intended 'enjoy'. Tense consistency: change 'spent' to 'spend' to match general statement. Also add 'and' correctly linking verbs. Suggestion: check verb choice and maintain present simple for habitual actions.

× After having all pictures with my approval and satisfaction, I usually attach them into a scrapbook.

✓ After getting all the pictures approved and satisfactory, I usually paste them into a scrapbook.

Phrase 'having all pictures with my approval and satisfaction' is awkward; use 'getting the pictures approved' or 'once I am satisfied with the pictures'. 'Attach them into' is incorrect collocation; use 'paste them into' or 'attach them to'. Include article 'the' before 'pictures'. Suggestion: use simpler, natural phrasing and learn common verb-preposition collocations.

× Taking photo is the best activity when I am in a long distance trip.

✓ Taking photos is the best activity when I am on a long-distance trip.

Use plural 'photos'. Use preposition 'on' with 'trip' and hyphenate 'long-distance' as a compound adjective. Suggestion: remember plural for general activities and correct prepositions for fixed phrases.

× I think rural and urban areas both have their own unique appeal.

✓ I think both rural and urban areas have their own unique appeal.

Original word order is acceptable but more natural to place 'both' before the nouns. No major grammar error; adjusted for naturalness. Suggestion: prefer natural word order in English.

× Urban area is often believed to be linked to bustling, livable cities with various kinds of building, while rural area always brings out relaxation and serenity.

✓ Urban areas are often associated with bustling, livable cities with various kinds of buildings, while rural areas usually bring relaxation and serenity.

Use plural 'areas' to match general statement and plural 'buildings'. 'Believed to be linked to' is wordy; use 'associated with'. 'Brings out' is unnatural here—use 'bring'. Suggestion: ensure plural agreement for general statements and prefer natural verbs.

× So it's really depend on my mood.

✓ So it really depends on my mood.

Subject-verb agreement: 'it' requires the third person singular verb 'depends'. Suggestion: in present simple third person singular add -s to the verb.

× Absolutely my own countries.

✓ Absolutely my own country.

Should be singular 'country' when referring to the speaker's nation. Also the fragment lacks a verb; in context it's a short answer so 'Absolutely my own country' is acceptable. Suggestion: use singular when referring to one nation.

× My own country's beauty is not completely defined as a place with numerous tall buildings, beautiful sceneries with approachable citizen.

✓ My country's beauty is not simply defined by numerous tall buildings and beautiful scenery with approachable citizens.

Use 'defined by' instead of 'defined as a place with'. Use 'scenery' (uncountable) not 'sceneries'. Use plural 'citizens'. Remove redundant 'own'. Suggestion: prefer 'defined by' and correct countability and plural forms.

× My country's unique charm is accentuated by the fearless sacrifice of our ancestors. So.

✓ My country's unique charm is accentuated by the fearless sacrifices of our ancestors.

Make 'sacrifices' plural to match 'ancestors'. Sentence fragment 'So.' is incomplete—remove it or complete the thought. Suggestion: avoid sentence fragments; ensure each sentence is complete and plural agreement is correct.