视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Câu trả lời của bạn đã rõ ràng và tự nhiên, có câu chủ đề và ví dụ minh họa. Tuy nhiên để hoàn thiện hơn bạn nên: 1) Tránh từ lặp lại (ví dụ “look back on those memories later” hơi thừa), 2) Sử dụng từ vựng chính xác hơn (ví dụ dùng “city skyline” thay vì “city skylights”), 3) Thêm liên từ ngắn gọn để câu mạch lạc hơn. Hãy giữ độ dài tối đa 3-4 câu và cụ thể hóa chi tiết.

示例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views to capture special moments. For example, I often photograph the city skyline at sunset because the colours and light remind me of relaxing evenings after trips. These pictures help me remember the atmosphere and little details I might otherwise forget.

建议: Bạn trả lời trực tiếp và có lý do, nhưng có lặp từ và cấu trúc khá đơn giản. Cần: 1) Tránh lặp từ như “relax” hai lần; 2) Dùng cụm từ cố định chính xác hơn (ví dụ “peaceful atmosphere” ở số ít); 3) Thêm một chi tiết cụ thể để minh họa (một hoạt động hoặc cảm giác). Giữ luồng ý mạch lạc bằng liên từ ngắn.

示例: I prefer rural views because the peaceful atmosphere and fresh air help me unwind. For instance, walking through fields lined with trees calms me and lets me disconnect from the city’s noise. This quiet environment is ideal for recharging my energy.

建议: Ý tưởng tốt nhưng ngữ pháp và từ vựng nhiều lỗi gây khó hiểu. Cần: 1) Sửa ngữ pháp và thứ tự từ (ví dụ “stranger” → “stranger/ more unfamiliar”); 2) Dùng cấu trúc ngắn gọn, tránh lỗi thì (“I think I prefer” thay vì “I think that I will prefer”); 3) Cung cấp ví dụ cụ thể về điều bạn muốn khám phá; 4) Chú ý số ít/đa số và chia động từ đúng. Viết 2-3 câu rõ ràng, liên kết bằng “because”/“for example”.

示例: I prefer views in other countries because many landscapes and cultures are more unfamiliar to me. For example, I’d love to see terraced rice fields in Southeast Asia or ancient architecture in Europe, which would teach me about different ways people live. Exploring these places makes me realise how vast and diverse the world is.

× Yes I do. I like taking photos of different views to record special moments so I can look back on those memories later.

✓ Yes, I do. I like taking photos of different views to record special moments so I can look back on those memories later.

No grammatical error affecting present tense; only missing comma after 'Yes' for natural spoken punctuation. Suggestion: include a comma when writing 'Yes, I do.' to mirror natural spoken pause.

× For example, I often photograph my city skylights and sunsets because they remind me of trips and peaceful evenings.

✓ For example, I often photograph my city's skylines and sunsets because they remind me of trips and peaceful evenings.

Original uses 'skylights' which is incorrect for 'city skyline'. Also 'city's skylines' or simply 'city skyline' is correct. Suggestion: use 'city skyline' or 'city skylines' depending on meaning; if referring to multiple cities use plural 'skylines'.

× I prefer views in rural areas because I enjoy the peaceful atmospheres and fresh air.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because I enjoy the peaceful atmosphere and fresh air.

'Atmospheres' is plural but 'peaceful atmosphere' is the natural collocation when speaking generically about rural areas. Use singular 'atmosphere' to refer to the general quality. Suggestion: say 'the peaceful atmosphere' or 'peaceful atmospheres' only if contrasting multiple distinct atmospheres.

× I can relax there and also enjoy natural scenery like fields and trees which helps me unwind and relax if I want.

✓ I can relax there and enjoy natural scenery like fields and trees, which helps me unwind.

Original has redundancy ('relax' twice) and a misplaced 'if I want' which is unnecessary. Also 'which helps' should refer to the whole preceding clause, so include a comma. Suggestion: avoid repetition and unnecessary conditional phrase; keep concise: 'which helps me unwind.'

× I think that I will prefer views in other countries because they are stranger and so much extraordinary for me than views in my country.

✓ I think that I would prefer views in other countries because they seem stranger and much more extraordinary to me than the views in my country.

Problems: wrong comparative construction ('stranger' used without clear comparison and odd collocation), 'so much extraordinary' is ungrammatical—use 'much more extraordinary'. Use 'would' for preference in hypothetical or polite contexts. Also use 'to me' rather than 'for me' and include 'the views' when comparing. Suggestion: use comparative forms 'stranger' -> 'stranger' is acceptable but better 'more novel' or 'more extraordinary'; use 'much more extraordinary' and 'to me.'

× Like I want to learn about new things and new views that I can see how huge the world are.

✓ For example, I want to learn about new things and see new views so I can understand how huge the world is.

Original: sentence fragment starting with 'Like' is informal and unclear; 'that I can see how huge the world are' has subject-verb disagreement ('world' is singular so verb should be 'is') and awkward structure 'see how'. Suggestion: start with 'For example' or 'I want to' and use 'is' for 'world is' and simpler structure 'so I can understand how huge the world is.'