视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 全体として意味は伝わりますが、文法ミス（時制・語形・前置詞）、語順の不自然さ、語彙の誤用が多く見られます。また、話がやや断片的で詳細が不足しています。改善方法： 1) 文法と語形を正す（例：preferred → prefer、photo → photos、I can take care of debris of city humans → 意図が不明瞭なので別表現に置き換える）。 2) 明確なトピック文を先に置き、次に1〜2文の具体例や理由を述べる。接続詞（for example, also, because）でつなぐと流れが良くなります。 3) 語彙はシンプルで正確なものを選ぶ（landscape, cityscape, coastline, mountains）。 具体的な練習：上の点を踏まえて短く自然な5文以内で答える練習を繰り返してください。

示例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views. I like photographing everything from coastlines to mountains and city skylines because each place has a unique atmosphere. For example, I often visit seaside areas at sunset to capture warm colours. I also try to keep the area tidy by picking up small pieces of litter when I can.

建议: 答えは意図が伝わりますが、不自然な語順と語彙の誤用が目立ちます（fastest landscape, dairy hassle jobs は意味不明）。また、文が途中で終わっており、支援的な詳細（理由や具体例）が不十分です。改善方法： 1) まず簡潔に好みを述べる（topic sentence）。 2) 次に理由を1つか2つ挙げる際は、明確な語彙を使う（peaceful, less crowded, fresh air, panoramic views）。 3) 接続詞（because, so, therefore）で文をつなぎ、文を完結させる。

示例: I prefer rural areas to urban ones because they are more peaceful and less crowded. The scenery in the countryside—such as rolling hills and open fields—feels priceless to me. For example, when I visit a village, I can relax and take photos without the noise and rush of city life.

建议: 内容は伝えたいことがあるが、文法、語順、語彙選択が大きく乱れており、意味の一貫性が欠けています（which is because normal? it costs very expensive?）。改善方法： 1) まず明確な主張を述べる（I prefer views in other countries.）。 2) 理由は簡潔に2点までに絞る（unique cultures, unforgettable experiences, limited opportunities due to cost）。 3) 金銭的理由を述べる際は表現を正しく使う（expensive, costly, rare opportunity）。 4) 例を一つ加えて具体性を出す。

示例: I prefer seeing landscapes in other countries because they offer unique scenery and cultural experiences I can't find at home. However, travelling abroad can be expensive, so I try to choose a few special trips each year. For instance, I once visited a mountain village abroad and enjoyed its traditional architecture and views, which I still remember.

× Yes, I am preferred to taking photo in various places from sea to mountain and city.

✓ Yes, I prefer taking photos in various places, from the sea to the mountains and the city.

The student used 'am preferred' which is passive and incorrect for expressing personal preference; the correct active form is 'I prefer' (present tense). 'Preferred to taking photo' mixes patterns: 'prefer' is followed by a gerund ('taking') or 'prefer to' + infinitive ('prefer to take'), and 'photo' should be plural 'photos' when speaking generally. Also add articles for 'the sea' and 'the mountains' and use commas for clarity. Suggestion: use 'I prefer taking photos' or 'I prefer to take photos'.

× I can enjoy each landscape.

✓ I enjoy every landscape.

'Can enjoy' is grammatical but unnatural here; the simple present 'I enjoy' more directly expresses habitual preference. 'Each landscape' is acceptable but 'every landscape' is more natural in this context. Suggestion: use simple present for habitual actions: 'I enjoy every landscape.'

× I can take care of debris of city humans.

✓ I can pick up litter left by city residents.

The phrase 'take care of debris of city humans' is incorrect and unclear. Use 'pick up' or 'clean up' for removing litter, and say 'litter left by city residents' (or 'people') rather than 'debriS of city humans'. 'Debris' is uncountable and 'city humans' is unnatural. Suggestion: use natural collocations like 'pick up litter' and 'city residents' or 'people.'

× Both I like but I more prefer the beautiful rural areas.

✓ I like both, but I prefer the beautiful rural areas more.

Word order is incorrect: place the subject before verbs and modifiers. 'Both I like' should be 'I like both.' Use 'prefer... more' or 'prefer... to' for comparisons: 'I prefer rural areas to urban areas' or 'I prefer rural areas more.' Suggestion: reorder to 'I like both, but I prefer the beautiful rural areas more.'

× The fastest landscape is priceless which I cannot see in dairy hassle jobs.

✓ The rural landscapes are priceless and I cannot see them during my daily hectic work.

'Fastest landscape' is incorrect word choice; likely intended 'most beautiful' or 'rural landscape.' 'Dairy' is a misspelling of 'daily'; 'hassle jobs' is unnatural—use 'hectic work' or 'busy job.' Also fix relative clause: 'which I cannot see' should refer to 'them' (the landscapes). Suggestion: choose appropriate adjectives ('priceless', 'beautiful') and correct spelling ('daily') and idiomatic phrases ('hectic work').

× So I want to remember and.

✓ So I want to remember them.

The sentence is incomplete and ends with 'and' without an object. Replace with a complete clause: 'So I want to remember them' or 'So I want to remember those views.' Suggestion: always finish the thought; provide the object after 'remember.'

× I more prefer to see other countries landscape in which is because normal and it costs very expensive when I want to go to it's precious experience because we cannot go so much.

✓ I prefer to see the landscapes of other countries because it is a special experience, although it is very expensive and we cannot go often.

The original sentence has multiple problems: 'I more prefer' is wrong word order—use 'I prefer' or 'I prefer ... more.' 'Other countries landscape' needs possessive: 'landscapes of other countries' or 'other countries' landscapes.' 'In which is because normal' is ungrammatical and unclear; likely intended 'because it is special' or 'because it is different from normal.' 'It costs very expensive' mixes noun and adjective—use 'it is very expensive' or 'it costs a lot.' 'When I want to go to it's precious experience' has pronoun errors: 'it's' should be 'its' but better rephrase. 'We cannot go so much' should be 'we cannot go often.' Suggestion: simplify and use clear clauses: 'I prefer to see the landscapes of other countries because it is a special experience, though it is expensive and we cannot travel often.'